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Writing a Letter of Concern

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Writing a Letter of Concern

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  1. Writing a Letter of Concern

  2. As I sit and wonder where my next meal may come from I glance over at my mother and ask why. In the city of Philadelphia 68% of children do not eat except when they are in school. Many families live below the poverty line and have to weigh the options of paying for rent or eating. I find that this type of life is no life at all for a child. I have many ideas on how we as a city can ensure that children eat at night. One suggestion I have is for restaurants to donate their unused food at the end of the night to food shelters instead of throwing the food into the garbage. Many restaurants and mini marts, such as Wawa throw away food at the end of the night to serve their customers fresh food daily. These restaurants and mini markets can feed an army with the amount of food they throw away nightly. I feel my solution would work because there is no cost lost or gained by the restaurants. If you think about it, if the restaurants were throwing the food away anyway they were not making a profit. Therefore, if there was no profit being made anyway, children and their families would not have to starve or go “dumpster diving” to find contaminated food. In conclusion hunger is a major problem in our city and there are restaurant and mini mart owners that can aide in the fight to fight child hunger. Something must be done for the children of Philadelphia.

  3. Expository Writing WRITING A SUMMARY

  4. Outline for Success • I. Introduction • Attention-grabbing opening • Controlling idea or thesis • II. Body • Causes and/or effects that support thesis • Logical organization of facts and details • III. Conclusion • Restatement of controlling idea or thesis • Memorable ending

  5. Snow A blanket of fresh snow can brighten a winter landscape. But snow is more than just beautiful. It is helpful, too. Snow benefits plants, animals, and people in many ways. Snow helps plants that stay in the ground all winter. It does not kill plants. It acts as a shield. Snow traps air beneath it. This air is warmer than the air above the snow. The warm air surrounds and protects plants. Biting winter winds cannot reach them. Ice storms and bitter cold cannot harm them. Plants stay alive through the worst weather.

  6. Snow helps animals, too. Some animals nest below ground. They spend the whole winter there. A blanket of snow serves to keep the nests warm. Other animals do not nest below ground. They tunnel into the snow itself. They make nests there. Compared with the cold air above, snow nests are cozy. Snow also benefits people. It helps many people earn a living. Some communities are centers for winter sports. Many visitors go there to ski. People who live and work in these communities need snow. Without it, they would have no business.

  7. Snow is useful even when it melts. Melting snow runs into wells. It flows into rivers and streams. These supply water to towns and cities. Farms benefit from melting snow as well. Some areas are dry in summer. They get little rain. Nearly all their water comes from melted snow. The water is stored in dammed-up lakes and ponds. It is used during the growing season to water fields and orchards. Without this water supply, there could be no crops. In this way, the summer harvest depends on winter snow.

  8. A sample summary for the article snow

  9. The article, “Snow”, explains how snow is beautiful, but more importantly ,helpful to plants, animals, and people. It is helpful to plants by providing them a shield that traps warm air to protect them from the wind and ice. Snow helps animals that nest below the ground by providing them with a protective blanket. Some animals even tunnel into the snow because it is warmer inside a snow cave than outside it. Many people who live in snowy areas earn their living from people who come to their community centers for winter sports. Melted snow is also good because it provides water for the water supply and for farms and orchards.

  10. Write a summary on your article. • Skipping every other line. • Handwritten • 2 spelling Words Used Correctly • UNDERLINE P.20 • Add 4 Synonyms in your paper • BOLD P.21 • Create a compound and complex sentence in your paper. • UNDERLINE AND BOLD P.22-23

  11. Writing: Response to Fiction

  12. REVISING STAGE • Paragraph 1 – “Hook” and First Sub-Topic from Graphic Organizer • Paragraph 2 –Second Sub-Topic from Graphic Organizer • Paragraph 3 –Third Sub-Topic from Graphic Organizer and Conclusion • 2 spelling words • 4 adjectives • Context clues • Supporting details sentence.

  13. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic __Populations and Communities_________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic ___Ecosystems and Change__ Subtopic ___Competition and Adaptation 1. 2. 3. Subtopic _Symbiosis and Predator -Prey___ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  14. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic __Ocean Water______________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic _____Earth’s Ocean______ Subtopic ___The Ocean Floor_____________ 1. 2. 3. Subtopic __ Changes to the Ocean______________ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  15. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic __Earth’s Early History______________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic _____Fossils_____ Subtopic ____How Fossils Form____________ 1. 2. 3. Subtopic ___Fossils and Earth_____________ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  16. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic __Cells______________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic ___Cells to Body Systems__________ Subtopic _Animal and Plant Cells_______________ 1. 2. 3. Subtopic ____Single Celled Organisms____________ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  17. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic ___Energy_____________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic _____Energy_____________ Subtopic __Kinetic and Potential Energy_________ 1. 2. 3. Subtopic __Energy Transfer______________ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  18. Response to Non-Fiction Subtopic __Plant Parts______________ 1. 2. 3. Important: REMEMBER – you are not restating what the original book said, instead you will make something new of it. You can do this by changing the narration of the story to the first person point of view. Be careful!! Topic ____Energy and Ecosystems_____ Subtopic ____Photosynthesis____________ 1. 2. 3. Subtopic __Producers and Consumers______________ 1. 2. 3. Conclusion ___________________________________

  19. Expository Essay WritingSRA Book p. 36-43

  20. Hook - catches reader’s attention Link – explains hook, gives background or summary information transitions to … THESIS STATEMENT (subject + opinion) Topic sentence for each body paragraph relates directly to proving thesis. Gives argument that will be presented in that body paragraph. The rest of the paragraph offers evidence (concrete detail) to support the topic sentence and explains its importance (commentary). Transitions are used between sentences. The concluding sentence • Wraps up the paragraph and leads to the next body paragraph or to the conclusion. • Restates the thesis in different words. • Summarizes the main points of each body paragraph. • State the significance or importance for the thesis. Goes further in your thinking about the thesis.

  21. Outline I. Good Fun Things A. Changing classes and teachers a. Ms. Trunchbull & Ms. Honey B. More Freedom a. no line b. See friends at lunch IV. Good and bad things A. freedom B. changing classes C. SAT test D. going to school longer E. tests F. Homework G. PE H. Fieldtrips II. Bad things A. SAT Test a. not like elementary school b. compare to stale bread c. more test and harder d. stress stomach hurts e. math makes me sick III. Things that are both good & bad A. Field Trips a. miss school b. might be boring B. PE a. clothes sweat b. fun to play and compete C. Homework a. too much b. pull up grades

  22. I. IntroductionII. Good / Fun ThingsIII. Bad ThingsIV. Both Good and BadV. Conclusion ( Recapping All GOOD AND BAD)

  23. AdditionallyOneFirstSecond Next Another- ifAlthough FinallyIn conclusionIndeedConsequentlyStars are key ideas or controlling statements. ExplanationsExamples,Evidence are listed below. Conclusion: Sum up what you’ve said. Refer back to your introduction.

  24. Sample Introduction Have you ever thought about what are the good and the bad things in seventh grade? There are good things like changing classes and more freedom. Some of the bad things are you have to stay in school longer, you have SAT tests, and tests get harder. Stay with me as I explain the good and bad things about being in the seventh grade. How does the writer grab your attention?

  25. First I will tell you about the good and fun things about being in the seventh grade.You get to change classes so if one teacher is like Mrs. Trunchbull in Matilda, you are only with her for part of the day. If your teacher is like Ms. Honey you will enjoy a fabulous time with her. Another thing I enjoy is more freedom. We don’t have to walk in straight lines as if we were soldiers marching off to war. Next, you can get your own food instead of having the lunch ladies get it for you. I like spending time with my friends so if there are not in one of my classes, I can see them at lunch. Transition words help! Does he explain, give examples?

  26. Did you find the transitions? What are the key ideas? How does he explain his key ideas? Next I’m writing about the bad things you go through in seventh grade. First of all you have to take the SAT test. In elementary school you didn’t have to worry about this kind of thing. The SAT test is like eating stale food because it can hurt you and it can be boring. The tests get harder as you go on. We have so many of them they can cause a major stress and make you feel like your stomach was just pulled out. At my elementary school we got out fifteen minutes earlier. Sitting in math class for that extra minutes makes me feel terrible inside.

  27. Finally my next category is going to be things that come good and bad. First field trips are extremely fun because you can talk and miss school. However it’s bad if you go somewhere boring or can’t sit with your friend. Everybody loves P.E. because we play real sports with competitiveness. But sadly when we’re leaving PE, my clothes get sweaty which doesn’t feel good. Everybody knows the pluses and minuses of Homework! We have so much homework it just takes the energy out of you, which is bad. What is good about it is that the more homework you have, the better chance you have to pull up your grade. Did you find the transitions? What are the key ideas? How does he explain his key ideas?

  28. In conclusion the seventh grade has good and bad things involved. Such as more freedom, and changing classes. Some other things are SAT test, going to school longer, and quizzes and tests. Homework, P.E., and field trips fall into both of those categories. What are your transitions? Does the writer sum up what he written? Does he refer back to the introduction. This paragraph was from an actual essay written by a student for the state writing assessment. His organization gave him a four.

  29. Persuasive Writing ESSAY

  30. Scoring Guidelines for this assignment

  31. Total = 50 points

  32. Assignment Break Down • Persuasive Paper • Paragraph 1: Introduction (Hook audience/introduce item) • Paragraph 2: Reason and supporting details • Paragraph 3: Reason and supporting details • Paragraph 4: Reason and supporting details • Paragraph 5: Conclusion (Powerful Punch the item!) Total = 50 points

  33. Letters to the Editor “If we want our children to grow up to become thoughtful and involved members of society, we want them to ask questions, carefully consider alternatives and choose wisely… so they can better understand their own positions on confusing and controversial issues.” -Heather Lattimer, author

  34. TOPIC Write a letter to the Washington Post to explain why our government should give more money to schools.

  35. Dear Washington Post,Schools are the future of the USA! I strongly encourage the government to provide schools more funding because I believe that schools with higher academically achieving students than those of lower ones should be provided more funding for. We need to provide funding to keep our highest achievers at the top. It is important to support top performers because they play an important part in our society. The students in the higher range deserve much more then students who do not come to school and make the school itself lag behind. The students should be able to get more freebies due to their ranks around the US, which the funding could provide for, and also the funding could be used to further develop more programs and afterschool programs to make the school an even better learning environment. We need to provide funding to keep our highest achievers at the top. This should be determined by not only schools performance overall, but by individual students. If there is a group of excelling students that happen to be at an average school, these students should have the programs necessary to advance them. If a school has an overall outstanding record, than it should be rewarded. It is important to support top performers because they play an important part in our society. They bring changes, progress, increase our standards of living. These people push the limits and produce new inventions which are important to sustain living in this world. It should had viewed as discrimination instead it should be seen as survival of the best. It is a part of nature and we cannot defy nature.I strongly encourage the government to provide schools more funding because I believe that schools with higher academically achieving students than those of lower ones should be provided more funding for. We need to provide funding to keep our highest achievers at the top. It is important to support top performers because they play an important part in our society. Just think the students would be the ones keeping the US on its feet by working in large companies.Sincerely,ms. Baumgardner610-981-52045117 Stenton AvePhiladelphia , PA 19150

  36. Letter to the Editor Now that you’ve soaked up all of this information like a sponge… … Make sure you added a question to start your paper, included 2 spelling words, 2 specific words, all types of sentences, and ended with a solution to the problem. Lastly, ADD your TRANSITIONS! 2nd Reason 1st reason First of all, Next, • Higher academically achieving students than those of lower ones should be provided more funding. • Further develop more programs and afterschool programs. • keep our highest achievers at the top. Schools are the future of the USA! I strongly encourage the government to provide schools more funding because . . . 3rd Reason Also, Finally, • It is important to support top performers because they play an important part in our society. I strongly encouragethe government to provide schools more funding because Just think the students would be the ones keeping the US on its feet by working in large companies.

  37. FIANL COPY DUE 16TH Scoring Guidelines

  38. Persuasive Flyer

  39. Scoring Guidelines

  40. Observation Report

  41. TOPIC You will write a 5 paragraph paper using 4 of your 5 senses to describe something you observed in life.

  42. I’m sitting at an outdoor café in Philadelphia, having coffee with my friend, Nadine. It is late afternoon and the sun is shining. Many people are in the city walking their dogs and strolling through the park across the street. Nadine and I like to enjoy the scenery and we sip on our coffee. (Feeling) It’s pretty windy but still warm. Every couple of minutes or so, a cool breeze hits us from where the river runs through the heart of the city about a block away. I have a sense of calmness inside as I relax drinking my coffee. (Smell) I can smell the wild flowers and fresh coffee for a few seconds, then it clears and we’re back to the regular smell of diesel engines and cigarette smoke that you would expect to smell in a city. I can smell the espresso being brewed inside the coffee shop. The pastries also smell delicious. (Hear) If I try real hard, I can sometimes focus my attention to the sound of the wind blowing through the trees or leaves sweeping across the ground instead of loud buses, cars honking their horns and people yelling and speaking in different languages. I can hear sirens of ambulances passing thru traffic. I can also hear the steam whistling from the coffee pots. (See)I look at Nadine, and I can see that she is enjoying herself as I am, even though we’re not talking. We’re both just sitting here, enjoying our surroundings and each other’s presence. There are pigeons everywhere. I see them on the sidewalk, on the floor, in the trees and in the bushes behind me. I wonder if this is really their city we’re in, and they’re just gracious enough to share it with us.

  43. Organize • Decide on a topic that you will write about, it must be something you observed. • Pick 4 of your 5 senses to write about. • Organize your ideas in a graphic organizer like on page 85

  44. FIANL COPY DUE 27TH Scoring Guidelines

  45. Personal Narrative

  46. Objective: Creative Writing For this unit we will writing a personal narrative. • You will need to create a story that includes: • PLOT • SETTING • CHARACTERS • DIALOGUE • Beginning • Middle • End

  47. Organize • Decide what you are going to write about • Develop the chain of events. Start with the first thing you will tell. Then tell what led to it. Include your feelings as events.

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