Unnecessary Words

1. Unnecessary Words English 1A Dr. Eigenauer

2. Eliminate unnecessary words • They do make some good recommendations. • They make some good recommendations.

3. Eliminate unnecessary words • Each individual person has to make his own personal decisions. • Each person has to make his own decisions.

4. Eliminate unnecessary words • Her future plans included going to college at some time. • Her plans included going to college.

5. Eliminate unnecessary words • That way, they’ll know what shows their kids are watching and can be there for them to answer any questions they may have. • That way, they’ll know what shows their kids are watching and can answer questions.

6. Eliminate unnecessary words • There are also some people that disagree and don’t think that television is cause for a lot of today’s violence. • Some disagree and don’t think that television cause(s) violence.

7. Eliminate unnecessary words • When trying to distinguish between two, three, or four different brand products when not much information is provided about any of them to begin with, the deception becomes much more ambiguous. • When trying to distinguish between products when not much information is provided, the deception becomes more ambiguous.

8. Eliminate unnecessary words • The author points out when he says that people don’t have confidence in the government or in the economy. • The author says that people don’t have confidence in the government or the economy.

9. Eliminate unnecessary words • Also, Barrett and Rowe claim the American government’s laissez-faire attitude toward their citizens’ actions encourages the upbringing up criminal activity. • Also, Barrett and Rowe claim the American government’s laissez-faire attitude encourages criminal activity.

10. Eliminate unnecessary words • For example, the Albertson’s strike lasted for close to five months and the employees walked out of it with empty pockets and nothing to show. • For example, the Albertson’s strike lasted for five months and the employees walked out with nothing.

11. Eliminate unnecessary words • Barrett argues that children in school including teenagers do as they please and have a major lack of discipline. • Barrett argues that children lack of discipline.

12. Eliminate unnecessary words • Whatever is happening in America’s families, it’s not like every single child is turning out horribly. • Whatever is happening in America’s families, not every child is turning out horribly.

13. Eliminate unnecessary words • IBM decided to lay off thousands of workers because of the fact that the company was losing money. • IBM decided to lay off thousands of workers because the company was losing money.

14. Eliminate unnecessary words • The are some people who think that Bakersfield is getting too big. • Some think that Bakersfield is getting too big.

15. Eliminate unnecessary words • The Dodgers cannot win next year without some kind of help in the outfield. • The Dodgers cannot win next year without help in the outfield.

16. Eliminate unnecessary words • Barrett and Rowe show that this country definitely needs major changes. • Barrett and Rowe show that this country needs changes.