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Step 1: The Body Paragraph. Schaeffer Writing Model. Directions. For this presentation, you will be using the Schaffer Paragraph handout available at the courses site. Frayer 1 – Topic Sentence. 1 st sentence of a body paragraph Says what the paragraph will be about
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Step 1: The Body Paragraph Schaeffer Writing Model
Directions For this presentation, you will be using the Schaffer Paragraph handout available at the courses site.
Frayer 1 – Topic Sentence • 1st sentence of a body paragraph • Says what the paragraph will be about • general statement, not a specific detail • TS
Frayer 2 – Concrete Detail • Fact, example, quotation, story, etc. • Can be proven or found • Often begins with “for example” • Additional concrete details need to be introduced with transitions • CD
Examples of Concrete Details • For example, Mrs. Meeching is always wearing black. • Another example is that Mrs. Meeching is called “cold.” • Finally, even the sound of her name, Meeching, is unpleasant. • For example, in seventh grade I made a C in math. • Also, when we would play family games, my brothers would never let me keep score. • Worst of all, in college, I was put into a remedial algebra class that was made up of the football team and me.
Frayer 3 – Commentary • Your analysis, opinion, or explanation of the concrete detail • Opinionated • “this shows that” / “this is important because” • Should take more than one sentence of commentary to explain • CM
Examples of commentary • This shows that the author probably chose Mrs. Meeching’s name in order to give us a clue about her creepiness. • Her name is used as foreshadowing because it makes us realize that she is scary even before she actually does anything.
Frayer 4 - Chunk • CD plus CM together • A chunk must be kept together and completed before moving on to a new idea • The ratio of a well-written chunk is at least 2:1 (2 CM for every 1 CD)
Frayer 5: Concluding Sentence • Sums up the entire paragraph • Has the same idea as the topic sentence but in different words • A general statement, not a concrete detail • CS
Basic Body Paragraph Outline • Topic sentence (TS) • Concrete Detail (CD) • Commentary (CM) • Commentary(CM) • Concrete Detail (CD) • Commentary (CM) • Commentary(CM) • Concluding Sentence (CS) Chunk One Chunk Two
You try it! • On the back of your paper, write a ONE CHUNK paragraph that follows the format • Use one of the following topics: How would you describe your personality? Why is _____ your best friend? Should kids under 16 be allowed to play violent video games? Why should we keep or abolish Beck Dress Code?
Check Your Neighbor! • Identify and label all sentences in the paragraph
Group Practice Follow directions according to your seat number. • Initial the topic sentence and concluding sentence. • Draw brackets around the three chunks. • Highlight all concrete details in one color. • Highlight commentary in another color. • Check over everyone’s work and make any change.
2nd Sheet of Paper Topic: Choose EITHER: Which Learner Profile Characteristic do you demonstrate the most? Which Learner Profile Characteristic do you demonstrate the least?
Beyond the Basics – Your Paragraph Outline • TS • CD 1 • CM 1A • CM 1B • CD 2 • CM 2A • CM 2B • CD 3 • CM 3A • CM 3B • CS
Getting Started • Brainstorm concrete details first (ask yourself, when was a time that I showed I was an inquirer, etc?) • Try writing an outline – see example • Example will be posted online
REMEMBER • EXTRA SENTENCES ARE OKAY! • If it takes you more than one sentence to explain your concrete detail, that’s fine. Just don’t forget that you should still have multiple sentences of commentary. • If it takes you extra commentary to explain your details, fine!