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WS1.6 Evaluation & Revision. WS1.6 (5 th Grade): Edit and revise manuscripts to improve the meaning and focus of writing by adding , deleting , consolidating , clarifying , and rearranging words and sentences . (5 questions on CST). Big Idea.
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WS1.6 Evaluation & Revision WS1.6 (5th Grade): Edit and revise manuscripts to improve the meaning and focus of writing by adding, deleting, consolidating, clarifying, and rearranging words and sentences. (5 questions on CST) www.elatestprep.com
Big Idea • You must be able to read a rough draft and make the following revisions: • Decide how to best combine simple sentences • Decide how to best reword confusing sentences • Decide which sentences should be deleted www.elatestprep.com
Combining Sentences • When asked to combine two sentences into one sentence, the newly formed sentence must be: • Clear not confusing or awkward • Unified not fragmented or run-on; the new sentence reads like one sentence. • Simple no repeated phrases or unnecessary words. www.elatestprep.com
Combining Sentences • (1) Earthquakes can cause tsunamis. • (2) Volcanoes can cause tsunamis. • What is the best way to combine sentences 1 and 2? • Earthquakes and volcanoes can cause tsunamis. www.elatestprep.com
Combining Sentences • (1) The playground is closed today. • (2) The playground is closed because workers are installing new equipment. • What is the best way to combine sentences 1 and 2? • The playground is closed today because workers are installing new equipment. www.elatestprep.com
Combining Sentences • (1) Francesca baked cookies last night. • (2) She baked the cookies for her grandfather. • What is the best way to combine sentences 1 and 2? • Francesca baked cookies last night for her grandfather. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. (1) I thought it would be boring. (2) Now I think science is interesting. What is the best way to combine sentences 1 and 2? (A) At first I thought it would be boring, since now I think science is interesting. (B) I thought it would be boring, though even now I think science is interesting. (C) I thought science would be boring, but now I think it is interesting. (D) Even though I thought it would be boring, however, now I think science is interesting. www.elatestprep.com
Deleting Sentences • Sentences that don’t support the topic or main idea should be deleted. • When asked to delete a sentence, get rid of the sentence that has the least to do with the topic. www.elatestprep.com
Which sentence to delete? (1) Soccer is my favorite sport. (2) We have practice after school every day. (3) Pizza tastes good. (4) My favorite position is goalie. www.elatestprep.com
Which sentence to delete? (1) We took a field trip to the San Bernardino County Museum. (2) They had interesting exhibits about birds. (3) My favorite part was looking at the polar bear. (4) We have a math test on Tuesday. www.elatestprep.com
Which sentence to delete? (1) The Cahuilla Indians live in the Palm Springs region. (2) Palm Springs has many great golf courses. (3) The Cahuilla got food by hunting and gathering. (4) The Cahuilla built shelters out of sticks and brush. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. (1) The Chumash Indians of California built wigwams. (2) Wigwams are round shelters. (3) The frame of each house was made of poles. (4) They bent the poles. (5) They connected the poles in the middle. (6) Great Plains Indians built tepees. (7) The floor of each wigwam was made by digging into the ground. (8) Some wigwams were fifty feet wide. (9) Wigwams held up to seventy people. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. Which is the best way to combine sentences 1 and 2? (A) The Chumash Indians of California, they built wigwams and they are round shelters. (B) The Chumash Indians of California, however, built wigwams which are round shelters. (C) The Chumash Indians of California built wigwams, and they are round shelters. (D) The Chumash Indians of California built round shelters called wigwams. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. Which is the best way to combine sentences 4 and 5? (A) They bent the poles, therefore they connected the poles in the middle. (B) They bent the poles and connected them in the middle. (C) They bent the poles, however they connected them in the middle. (D) They connected the poles in the middle, but they connected them first. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. Which is the best way to combine sentences 8 and 9? (A) Some wigwams were fifty feet wide and held up to seventy people. (B) Some wigwams being fifty feet wide, so they held up to seventy people. (C) Some wigwams were fifty feet wide, and so they were able to hold up to seventy people. (D) Some wigwams were fifty feet wide because they were able to hold up to seventy people. www.elatestprep.com
Test Prep. Which sentence in the passage should the student delete? (A) Sentence 4 (B) Sentence 5 (C) Sentence 6 (D) Sentence 7 Link to PowerPoint Supplement www.elatestprep.com