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“TRL” Timed Writing remediation:. 1. Don’t focus on the number score: focus on the grade letter equivalent. 2. Overall, we did a good job (average mid 30s in each class) and this was really our first academic timed-writing.
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“TRL” Timed Writing remediation: 1.Don’tfocus on the number score: focus on the grade letter equivalent. 2. Overall, we did a good job (average mid 30s in each class) and this was really our first academic timed-writing. 3. Keep the score in perspective: you have two more summative scores in the next 72 hours.
Annotations! You had to READ well to WRITE well! • Most of these were thorough and reflected your high efforts. • Some need more effort, and…WHY ARE YOU ANNOTATING WHAT I TOLD YOU TO SKIP! • 7/146 students defined APOCRYPHA which could have helped understand the whole article! (“Written or spoken words that are not genuine, true.”)
You MUST DEMONSTRATE you understand the basic thesis: • The main point Edmunds tries to impart to his readers is that Tecumseh’s reputation, historically is in a much more respected place than his brother; however, much of this attention is simply due to the fact he was UNDERSTOOD by white America.
Use Paragraphs and Topic Sentences! • This broke into three efforts: MAKE MAC ‘n CHEESE! • Backgrounds of both. • Maturing into power of both. • Ultimate failure of both to unite Shawnee. • Historical perspective and Edmunds’ opinion.
You MUST have included all of the following for TECUMSEH! • 1. His promise as a young boy; he was an athletic leader. • 2. His rise to power as a warrior. • 3. His quest to unify the tribes to resist encroachment and its ability to be comprehended by “white” culture. • 4. His heroic death in battle.
You MUST have included the following items for the Prophet: • 1. His inauspicious start as a child. • 2. His alcoholism. • 3. His seizure. • 4. His solar eclipse credibility. • 5. His “bullet proof elixir” discrediting his power. • 6. Misunderstood by white culture.
Thesis! • 1. Have one! • 2. Have a degree of analysis • “Both Tecumseh and his brother rose to power, but their leadership styles and places in history are distinctly different.” • 3. Don’t be overly critical/casual. Don’t use boozer, great guy, lush, liked the tough stuff, or other slang discussions.
Topic Sentences • 1. These should be a label for the contents of each paragraph. • 2. If your TS is specific, stay specific; if you include a discussion on The Prophet, make your topic sentence inclusive. • 3. As we progress, your TS should have an degree of analysis: “Tecumseh fell heroically; however, his brother’s demise was less admirable.”
Some “DEAL BREAKERS!” • Unclear/Absent discussion of thesis. • No paragraph construction. • A dearth of knowledge demonstrated for one brother or the other. • Unclear topic sentences. • Check spelling against the copy of the text! If you need to, match letter for letter.
