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Bikers must stay away from walking trails. 2000 AS UE Proofreading. Bikers must stay away from walking trails. Where can people enjoy biking in Hong Kong? Where can people enjoy hiking in Hong Kong? What would hikers object to bicycles in country parks?.
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Bikers must stay away from walking trails 2000 AS UE Proofreading
Bikers must stay away from walking trails • Where can people enjoy biking in Hong Kong? • Where can people enjoy hiking in Hong Kong? • What would hikers object to bicycles in country parks?
81. Bicycles are belong on the road. Walking trails82. in the country parks are for pedestrian83. to walk or jog along at their leisure. • “Belong” is a verb. • It isn’t being used in the passive voice, nor is it being used in the present continuous. • Delete “are”.
81. Bicycles are belong on the road. Walking trails82. in the country parks are for pedestrian83. to walk or jog along at their leisure. • Line 83 says “their leisure”. • Not only one pedestrian uses the country parks. • Replace “pedestrian” with “pedestrians”.
81. Bicycles are belong on the road. Walking trails82. in the country parks are for pedestrian83. to walk or jog along at their leisure. • No errors.
84. People who own mountain bikes is not “forced85. onto dangerous roads”. They choose to do this,86. rather than ride on the cycling paths which open to them, • The subject and the verb do not agree. (People/is) • Replace “is” with “are”.
84. People who own mountain bikes is not “forced85. onto dangerous roads”. They choose to do this,86. rather than ride on the cycling paths which open to them, • No errors.
84. People who own mountain bikes is not “forced85. onto dangerous roads”. They choose to do this,86. rather than ride on the cycling paths which open to them, • “Open” can be a verb. • Ex.: He will open the door for you. • “Open” can be an adjective. • Ex.: The window is open. • What is it in this situation? • What word is missing? • Add “are”. “…paths which are open to them.”
87. or on the too many kilometres of special cycling tracks88. which existing from Tai Wai to Tai Po and beyond. • Having many cycling paths in a city is generally considered to be a good thing. • The word “too” is only used in a negative sense. • Ex.: Too hot, too cold, too tired, etc. • Delete “too”.
87. or on the too many kilometres of special cycling tracks88. which existing from Tai Wai to Tai Po and beyond. • The paths will not be removed any time soon. They can be considered relatively permanent. • Replace “existing” with “exist”. • “Which” can also be deleted.
91. If mountain bikers understood dangers92. they have create for others in country parks,93. they would not put those people in risk. • There are many dangers in the world, but we are only talking about specific dangers - the dangers that are created by bikers. • Add “the”. “… understood the dangers …”
91. If mountain bikers understood dangers92. they have create for others in country parks,93. they would not put those people in risk. • “have create” is neither the present tense nor the present perfect. • Delete “have” or replace “create” with “created”.
91. If mountain bikers understood dangers92. they have create for others in country parks,93. they would not put those people in risk. • The wrong preposition is being used. • Put someone ____ risk. • Replace “in” with “at”. • N.B. You can say put someone in danger.
94. Indeed, a sensible mountain biker would not95. want to on the same trail as walkers. • No errors.
94. Indeed, a sensible mountain biker would not95. want to on the same trail as walkers. • You want something. (want + noun) • You want to do something. (want + to + verb) • Add be/ride/cycle/travel/go/bike/etc. • “…want to be on the same trail …”
96. South Island School mountain bikers can deserve “the97. same right enjoy their sport as walkers and runners”. That98. is, they can to cycle on roads, cycling paths or cycling tracks. • “Can deserve” doesn’t make sense. • Delete one of these verbs. • Delete “can”. • You can also replace “can” with “do” to emphasise the verb “deserve”. N.B. This structure is often used to emphasise something that might be unexpected. For most of the passage, the writer criticises bikers, but here he unexpectedly supports their right to enjoy their sport.
96. South Island School mountain bikers can deserve “the97. same right enjoy their sport as walkers and runners”. That98. is, they can to cycle on roads, cycling paths or cycling tracks. • A word is missing after “right”. • Ex.: You have the right to remain silent. • Add “to”. “…same right to enjoy…”
96. South Island School mountain bikers can deserve “the97. same right enjoy their sport as walkers and runners”. That98. is, they can to cycle on roads, cycling paths or cycling tracks. • You can say “able to cycle” but you cannot say “can to cycle”. • Delete “to”. • You can also add “choose”. “…can choose to cycle …”