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Improve this paragraph by combining these short, choppy sentences into the type of longer, more complex text you might find in The Series of Unfortunate Events . You may add a few transition words . NO ADDITIONS! NO CHANGES!.
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Improve this paragraph by combining these short, choppy sentences into the type of longer, more complex text you might find in The Series of Unfortunate Events. You may add a few transition words. NO ADDITIONS! NO CHANGES! The children were named Baudelaire. They looked out the wide and open windows. They saw the prettiest house on the block. The bricks had been cleaned very well. They could see an assortment of well-groomed plants. An older woman was standing in the doorway. Her hand was on the shiny brass doorknob. She was an older woman. She was smiling at the children. She carried a flowerpot in her hand.
"The Baudelaire children looked out and saw the prettiest house on the block. The bricks had been cleaned very well, and through the wide and open windows one could see an assortment of well-groomed plants. Standing in the doorway, with her hand on the shiny brass doorknob, was an older woman, smartly dressed, who was smiling at the children. In one hand she carried a flowerpot." The Bad Beginning: Book 1 "A Series of Unfortunate Events", Lemony Snicket (c.1999, Harper Collins Publishers), p. 9.