BA 5: Integration of Sources

1. BA 5: Integration of Sources

2. For Today: • Review BA5 requirements • Lecture on Source Integration • Source Integration - Small Groups • Prep for Next Class

3. BA5 Description • To complete this assignment, choose three substantial passages (not necessarily full paragraphs, but at least 5 sentences) from your 1.1 draft that cite sources. First, in paragraph form, evaluate how well these sources are integrated into your text. For example, do the sources as currently used help strengthen your synthesis? What role do they play? Do they help show a specific viewpoint?  Have you synthesized it with other viewpoints? Have you used too many sources, or used a few sources excessively? (See section 13f of The St. Martin's Handbook for an example of excessive source use) • Next, discuss how you might integrate these sources in a manner that is more effective to your readers. For example, your readers should understand the purpose of the source material. That is, does the source help define, explain, inform, or highlight an idea? If so, consider using phrases such as “The author defines . . .” or “This article reveals…” A more complete list of these signal phrases is available in the green box at the bottom of section 13b in your handbook. • Finally, revise the passages based on your evaluations of the originals and discuss how these changes enhance the quality of your source integration. Be sure to label the original and the revised passages as original or revised.

4. BA 5: • Following directions in this assignment will be key. There is a certain layout you must follow in order to fulfill the assignment criteria. • You will need four paragraphs in each sequence for a total of twelve paragraphs.

5. BA 5: Original 1 Under the word “Original,” paste your original passage. This will include 1-2 sentences that lead to the integrated material and the sentence that follows the source use. Evaluation 1 The comments section should be a substantive paragraph where you thoroughly analyze your original passage’s source use. For example, do the sources as currently used help strengthen your synthesis? What role do they play? Do they help show a specific viewpoint?  Have you synthesized it with other viewpoints? Have you used too many sources, or used a few sources excessively? Revised 1 Paste your revised passage here. You do not have the option of not revising any of these sections. Justification 1 This section should be a substantive paragraph in which you analyze how/why your changes are in improvement. Your justification should analyze each revision specifically, not generally.

6. Keys to Success on BA 5: Include 3 – 6 sentences for the Original and Revised passages. One of the six should be the sentence that precedes the summary, paraphrase, or quote, and one should be the sentence that follows the summary, paraphrase, or quote. Be thorough and specific in the analysis of the current section and in the justification of your revisions. Name changes specifically and discuss their merit and impact. DO NOT forget to label the parts of your assignment.

7. Grading Rubric: • C1: Issue Identification and Focus: Has the student made significant revisions? In other words, did he or she do more than change the signal phrase? • C3: Sources and Evidence: Have the student’s integrations improved his/her use of sources and evidence?  Make connections to the handbook. Refer writers to specific sections to show them how to revise and how to talk about revision. The green boxes are especially helpful in this respect. • C5: Own Perspective: Does the student discuss, specifically, the changes and the impact of those changes? Students often want to write something along the lines of " . . . I incorporated more direct quotes, so now my argument is stronger." They need to discuss why a change is more effective. Students need to understand the analysis is a critical element of this assignment. • C6: Conclusion: Does the student provide an evaluative statement which identifies the stronger passage and gives good reasons for this identification? • C7: Communication: Has the student clearly labeled all of the elements of the assignment (original passage, revised passage, and analysis)?  How effective is the student’s communication at the sentence level, especially in the revised passages and the analysis?

8. Integrating quotations: • Use only the specific parts of a sentence or paragraph that you need. • Do not use quotations that are more than four lines long. • Introduce the quotation with a signal phrase. • Or use a signal phrase in the middle (or even the end). • When you need to exclude some words from a direct quotation, use ellipsis points: …ellipsis points… • Use brackets to add or substitute words: [brackets] • FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, NO STAND-ALONE QUOTES! Introduce the quote, give the quote, and then analyze why the quote has been given to the audience.

9. Integrating quotations: • DO NOT change the meaning of a quote just so that you can use it in your paper. • DO NOT use too many quotes in your paper. • What does excessive source use look like? See section 13f in your Handbook.

10. Signal verbs (13b): Acknowledge Concludes Emphasizes Replies Advises Concurs Expresses Reports Agrees Confirms Interprets Responds Allows Criticizes Lists Reveals Answers Declares Objects Says Asserts Describes Observes States This is not the ENTIRE list. See 13b!

11. In-Text Citation Basics: • Parenthetical/In-Text Citation • Author’s name should be either in sentence or in parenthetical citation • Include page number • Parenthetical citation goes between quotation marks and closing punctuation • Example: • Ms. Beavers claims that she “love[s] chocolate” (4). • The essay’s concluding statement was elegant, yet simple: “I love chocolate” (Beavers 4).

12. Sample Draft 1.1 Quotes • Dessylyn Arnold, author of the article Decline in the Traditional Family, finds it necessary to first define the traditional family before we say why it is bad that it has broken down. Arnold says, “The traditional American family is a married couple, each only married once, and their 2.3 children” where “The male is the bread winner and female stays at home to care for the home and the children” (para 5). How many of you used this quote in your Prep Assignment? What did you say about it?

13. Sample Draft 1.1 Quote • Trevor Noble, author of Family Breakdown and Social Networks, agrees with what Ritzer has to say. Noble believes that, “With a loose-knit network of relationships outside the family no new normative definition of the conjugal relationship is readily available. After all, the mechanisms of a detailed conformity are not there” (136). How many of you used this quote in your Prep Assignment? What did you say about it?

14. Sample Draft 1.1 Quote • In contrast to this idea, Arlene S. Skolnick, author of Embattled Paradise: The American Family in an Age of Uncertainty, believes that this change may not be as bad as we are making out to be after all. “The nineteenth-century version of the family now widely viewed as “traditional” was in fact the first incarnation of the modern family” (20). • How many of you used this quote in your Prep Assignment? What did you say about it?

15. Small Group Work: • Read the BA 5 example onthe handout. • In groups of 3, evaluate how well the assignment carried out each of the criteria and assign it a grade. • Assign a group secretary. • I will put the grading criteria slide back up on the projector. • To receive credit for this group work, you must fully justify the grade you give the assignment (at least a full page of commentary that (1) clearly addresses each part of criteria and (2) provides specific examples from the assignment). • Keep in mind that this was done over a 2.1 Argument, NOT A 1.1 Literature Review.

16. For Next Class: • Reading 8 – on the syllabus • YOU MUST READ ALL OF CHAPTER 10 AND BE READY FOR A READING QUIZ. • Prep for next class • Prepare for a reading quiz by taking good reading notes. • You won’t turn in your reading notes, but we’ll be having a quiz on the reading material. • In your St. Martin’s Handbook, do the specified exercises. • You’ll save this material and then print it out for next class. • Topic of Next Class • BA 6: Revisions at the Sentence Level