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Developing Your Ideas. How exactly to you make your writing better?. 2009 Persuasive Writing Topic. Writing Situation
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Developing Your Ideas How exactly to you make your writing better?
2009 Persuasive Writing Topic Writing Situation Your principal would like to add a new class that is not currently offered in your school. The principal has asked students to make recommendations about new classes. Decide what class you would recommend for your school. Directions for Writing Write a letter to convince the principal that your new class is the best one for the school. Be sure to include detailed reasons. General Topic Context for the Topic Format, purpose, audience, & task
Example of Depth of Developmentin a Paragraph Sample Body Paragraph We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. When you approach a female you don’t just say “Can I have your phone number.”You should tell them a little about yourself. I always tell girls that I’m sensitive and a good listener. Also, try to make up a good topic to talk on.Ask her whether she watches shows like The Office. If she does, you can talk about how lame Michael Scott is around girls in his office. That will probably make for some laughter. From a student’s response to prompt 112. Why not add a class called Talkin’ to Girls? It will help prepare young men for this important task. Controlling Idea: Supporting Idea Clearly Explained Major Examples Specific Experience Details
Example of Depth of Developmentin Score Point 1 I would like to recommend that we have a class for the boys. The name of this class is Talkin’ to Girls. This class will help prepare young men to be able to talk to females. We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. The problem now is that boys are totally uncomfortable around girls.This class would help boys feel more confident. Plus, this class won’t require a lot. So lots of boys will take it.
Example of Depth of Developmentin Score Point 2 I would like to recommend that we have a class for the boys. The name of this class is Talkin’ to Girls. This class will help prepare young men to be able to talk to females. We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. When you talk to girls, you should tell them a little about yourself. Try to make up a good topic to talk on. The problem now is that boys are totally uncomfortable around girls.This class would help boys feel more confident.It will have lots of lessons that are hands-on that put boys in real-life situations talking to girls. This class won’t require a lot. All you have to do is sign up for it and bring a few basic supplies. The class will require lots of reading and studying, which will help boys succeed. In no time, you will be confident enough to go talk to the girl of your dreams.
Example of Depth of Development in Score Point 3 I would like to recommend that we have a class for the boys. The name of this class is Talkin’ to Girls. This class will help prepare young men to be able to talk to females. The reason why we need this class is so that we can prepare the boys for all of the emotions they are going to experience. We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. When you approach a female you don’t just say “Can I have your phone number.”You should tell them a little about yourself. Try to make up a good topic to talk on.Be interested in what she likes and does. Always be confident and look your best. Girls like it when boys pay attention to them. The problem now is that boys are totally uncomfortable around girls.This class would help boys feel more confident.It will have lots of lessons that are hands-on that put boys in real-life situations talking to girls.Me, I have this stuff down pat. I just want to help some friends out. This class won’t require a lot. All you have to do is sign up for it and bring a few basic supplies, like a pencil and notebook. This class is open to all males.The class will require lots of reading and studying, but as I said, it also requires some participation. Boys will be able to practice by talking to a mannequin. In no time, you will be confident enough to go talk to the girl of your dreams.
Example of Depth of Development in Score Point 4 I would like to recommend that we have a class for the boys. The name of this class is Talkin’ to Girls. This class will help prepare young men to be able to talk to females. The reason why we need this class is so that we can prepare the boys for all of the emotions they are going to experience. We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. When you approach a female you don’t just say “Can I have your phone number.”You should tell them a little about yourself. Try to make up a good topic to talk on.Ask what she likes to do out of school or work.Be interested in what she likes and does. Always ask if she wants your number. If we had this class boys would be eager to talk because they would know what to say. The problem now is that boys are totally uncomfortable around girls.When I am with my fiends and one of them spots a girl that we likes we all say, “I bet you won’t go over and talk to her.” That’s when I say in the back of my mind, “If only we were taught that in school.”This class would help boys be more comfortable around girls.Me, I have this stuff down pat. I just want to help some friends out. This class won’t require a lot. All you need is a notebook, and a pencil. All you have to do is sign up for it. This class is open to all males.The class will require lots of reading and studying.In the classroom there is a female mannequin that responds to any comment made by a male. If the male says something stupid, the dummy will say “get lost.”This class requires some participation. All you to do is work hard and you’ll do great. In no time, you will be confident enough to go talk to the girl of your dreams.
Example of Depth of Development in Score Point 5 For most boys, it is pretty nerve-wracking to let a girl know that you like her. So, I was thinking, why not add a class called Talkin’ to Girls? It will help prepare young men for this important task. We really need this class so girls won’t think we are total idiots. When you approach a female you don’t just say “Can I have your phone number.”You should tell them a little about yourself. I always tell girls that I’m sensitive and a good listener. Also, try to make up a good topic to talk on.Ask her whether she watches shows like The Office. If she does, you can talk about how lame Michael Scott is around girls in his office. That will probably make for some laughter. Oh, and always ask if she wants your number. If we had this class boys would be eager to talk because they would know what to say. The problem now is that boys are totally uncomfortable around girls.When I am with my fiends and one of them spots a girl that he likes we all say, “I bet you won’t go over and talk to her.” That’s when I say in the back of my mind, “If only we were taught that in school.”This class would help boys be more comfortable around girls.Me, I have this stuff down pat. I just want to help some friends out. This class won’t require a lot. All you need is a notebook, and a pencil. All you have to do is sign up for it. This class is open to all males.The class will require lots of reading and studying and there will be hands on activities.In the classroom there is a female mannequin that responds to any comment made by a male. If the male says something stupid, the dummy will say “get lost.”Or, if you have bad breath, the mannequin's face will turn green and she’ll fall down. Yikes!This class requires some participation. Everyone will get a change to talk to the mannequin at least once a week, on a variety of topics, like sports, movies, and Facebook. In no time, boys will be confident enough to go talk to the girl of their dreams. Then, I can assure you that your students will freer and happier.