Revising and Editing Practice

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Revising and Editing Practice Roadrunners The Haunted Museum

Revising Practice • Revising means looking for better ways of wording what you’re trying to say. Read Rachel’s essay about her favorite animal, then look at the ways her essay could be revised. Use what you learn from this practice in your writing to make it more interesting and fun to read . . . .

1Rachel wants to replace the title of her composition with one that will create more curiosity for the reader. Which of the following could BEST replace her title? • AClick! Click! Brrrrrrrrrrrip! • BMy Favorite Animal • CUnusual Birds • DAn Interesting Animal • Correct answer - A

2 Rachel wants to improve her opening sentence with a new sentence that will add voice to her paper. Which of the following could BEST replace sentence 1? • F I like all kinds of different animals, but my favorite is the roadrunner. • GSome people’s favorite animals are horses, but mine is roadrunners. • HWhat’s my favorite animal? That’s easy. It’s the roadrunner. • JThere are a lot of different animals, but my favorite one is the roadrunner. • Correct answer - H

3What is the BEST way to revise sentence 10? • AWe saw an adult walking along with babies and so we knew we didn’t have just one roadrunner we knew we had a family of roadrunners. • BWe thought there was just one roadrunner at first, but there wasn’t there was a family of roadrunners because we saw an adult walking along with babies. • CAt first we thought we only had one roadrunner. We saw an adult walking along with babies. So we had a family. • DAt first we thought we only had one roadrunner, but after seeing an adult walking along with babies, we knew we had a family. • Correct answer - D

4Rachel wants to use a more expressive word than interesting in sentence 14. Which of the following could BEST replace this word? • F fascinating • Gconfusing • Hordinary • J wild • Correct answer - F

5What is the BEST way to combine sentences 16 and 17? • ARoadrunners hardly ever fly, and so that’s why I assumed roadrunners would build their nests on the ground. • BI assumed roadrunners would build their nests on the ground and that’s because roadrunners hardly ever fly. • CRoadrunners hardly ever fly I assumed they would build their nests on the ground. • DSince roadrunners hardly ever fly, I assumed they would build their nests on the ground. • Correct answer - D

6What is the BEST way to combine sentences 19 and 20? • FBoth the male and female sit on the eggs, but they take turns. • GThe male and female take turns sitting on the eggs. • HThe male and the female both sit on the eggs they take turns. • JThe male sits on the eggs and the female sits on the eggs and they take turns sitting on the eggs. • Correct answer - G

7Rachel wants to add the following detail to sentence 24 to clarify the meaning of the word omnivore.animals that eat both plants and other animalsHow should Rachel rewrite sentence 24 to include this detail? • A Omnivores are animals that eat both plants and other animals and roadrunners are omnivores, so they’ll eat just about anything including rattlesnakes. • BThey’re omnivores, animals that eat plants and other animals, so they’ll eat just about anything, including rattlesnakes. • CThey’re omnivores, so they’ll eat just about anything, including rattlesnakes because omnivores are animals that eat plants and other animals. • DRoadrunners will eat plants or other animals so they’re omnivores, so they’ll eat just about anything, including rattlesnakes. • Correct answer - B

8Which of the following sentences should be deleted from the composition? • F sentence 8 • Gsentence 22 • Hsentence 28 • Jsentence 43 • Correct answer - H

9What is the BEST way to combine sentences 35 and 36? • AWhen she turned around to see what was about to devour her, it was a roadrunner! • BShe turned around and it was a roadrunner and it was about to devour her. • CShe turned around to see what was about to devour her it was a roadrunner. • DWhat she saw when she turned around to see what was about to devour her was a roadrunner. • Correct answer - A

10Rachel wants to add a closing sentence to her paper. Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 44 and bring her paper to a close. • F THE END • GRoadrunners have little crests on top of their heads and stripes near their eyes. • HRoadrunners don’t really say, “BEEP!BEEP!”. • J I hope he’s right because I want to learn more about them. • Correct answer - J

Editing Practice Editing means looking for mistakes in grammar and mechanics; in other words – capitalization, spelling, punctuation, and word usage. Look for mistakes Tanya made in her personal narrative, then choose the correct edits she needs to make.

11What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1? • AChange Have to Has • BChange saw to seen • C Delete the question mark • DNo change should be made. • Correct answer - B

12What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?1 • FChange happened to happen • GChange july to July • HChange Texas to texas • JNo change should be made in sentence 5 • Correct answer - G

13What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6? • AChange Their to There • BChange were to was • CChange group to grupe • DSentence 6 should not be changed. • Correct answer - A

14What is the correct way to write sentence 8? • FI noticed a room that was filled with old furniture, and decorated to look like the parlor of an old house from the 1800’s. • GI noticed a room that was filled with old furniture. And decorated to look like the parlor of an old house from the 1800’s. • HI noticed a room and it was filled with old furniture and it was decorated to look like the parlor of an old house from the 1800’s. • JSentence 8 is written correctly in the story. • Correct answer - J

15What change, if any, should be made in sentence 12? • AChange Her to her • BInsert a comma after white • CChange wore to were • DNo change needs to be made in sentence 12. • Correct answer - B

16What change, if any, should be made in sentence 16? • FChange than to then • GDelete the comma after second • HChange surtain to certain • JNo change is needed in sentence 16. • Correct answer - H

17What change, if any, should be made in sentence 24? • AChange thecomma to a question mark • BChange wanted to wants • CChange know to no • DNo change should be made. • Correct answer - A

18What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 29? • FChange I to i • GInsert a comma after corner • HChange vanished to vanish • JSentence 29 is correctly written in the story. • Correct answer - G

19What change, if any, should be made in sentence 39? • A Change she’s to shes • BDelete the comma after Millborn • CChange hear to here • DSentence 39 should not be changed. • Correct answer - C

20What is the correct way to write sentences 43 and 44? • F Yes, it was a very freaky experience. And it was not one that I ever to experience again. • GYes, it was a very freaky experience, not one I ever want to have again. • HYes it was a very freaky experience. Not one I ever want to have again ever. • JSentences 43 and 44 are written correctly in the story. • Correct answer - G

Revising and Editing Practice