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Multiparagraph Essay

Multiparagraph Essay . English I Ms. Linville. Essay Terminology. Introduction - the first paragraph which includes the thesis. Body Paragraph- a middle paragraph in an essay which develops the main idea(s) you want to convey and supports the thesis.

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Multiparagraph Essay

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  1. Multiparagraph Essay English I Ms. Linville

  2. Essay Terminology • Introduction- the first paragraph which includes the thesis. • Body Paragraph- a middle paragraph in an essay which develops the main idea(s) you want to convey and supports the thesis. • Concluding Paragraph- the last paragraph which sums up the main idea(s) of the essay. It may also add more commentary about the subject of the essay or include a personal statement. IT MUST BE ONLY COMMENTARY.

  3. 4) Thesis- a sentence with a subject and opinion (also called commentary) which comes at the end of the introductory paragraph. 5) Concrete Details-specific details that form the backbone of your body paragraphs. These are the facts, specifics, examples, descriptions, illustrations, textual evidence, quotations, paraphrasing, or plot references in the essay. Transition Words for Concrete Details Consequently, Moreover, Even so, Of course, For example, On the other hand, Furthermore, Still, In addition, Therefore, In fact,

  4. 6) Commentary- Your opinion or comment about something. Commentary is insight, analyses, interpretations, inferences, personal responses, feelings, evaluations, or reflections on the topic. 7) Topic Sentence- the first sentence in a body paragraph. This MUST have a subject and opinion (commentary) for the paragraph. It is like the thesis for the paragraph. 8) Concluding Sentence- the last sentence in a body paragraph which is all commentary and gives a finished feel to the paragraph.

  5. Ratio and Word Count Ratio- The ratio for writing is 1 part concrete detail (CD) to 2 parts commentary (CM). Ex. Playing piano is a therapeutic pastime (TS). For example, when I feel stressed I play Beethoven and the stress disappears. Beethoven reminds me of quiet evenings at home. These evenings were typically calm and stress free, and thus playing Beethoven’s music leads me to a relaxed place. Word Counts- the minimum length per paragraph to earn a “C.”

  6. Steps in the Writing Process • Prewriting • Shaping the Essay-it is an outline of the thesis, topic sentences, concrete details, and commentary • First Draft • Peer Response • Revision • Final Draft

  7. Parts of the Essay • Introductory Paragraph • Thesis • Body Paragraph • Topic Sentence • Concrete Detail • Commentary • Chunk • Concluding Sentence • Conclusion Paragraph

  8. Format of the Essay Paragraph #3: 1st body paragraph 100+ words 8 sentences Format: #1: Topic Sentence #2: CD (For example) #3: CM #4: CM #5: CD (In addition) #6: CM #7: CM #8: CS Paragraph #1: Introduction 40+ words 3+ sentences thesis at the end Paragraph #2: 1st body paragraph 100+ words 8 sentences Format: #1: Topic Sentence #2: CD (For example) #3: CM #4: CM #5: CD (In addition) #6: CM #7: CM #8: CS Paragraph #4: Concluding paragraph 40+ words 3+ sentences finished feeling to the essay

  9. Thesis • Thesis=subject and opinion • Example: Australia is the best country of all for a vacation. • Practice (Identify which are thesis statements) • My high school is the best one around. • I have gone to East High School for three years. • I hate going to the mall for Christmas shopping. • My family went to Disneyland last summer. • We have four required courses to take this year. *Now, create two of your own thesis statements. Pick a subject and create an opinion.

  10. Prewriting Outline • The title is the subject of the prewriting. • The lines that start with Roman numerals (I,II,IV) are the sub-headings off the main idea (topic sentences). • The lines that start with capital letters A and B) are the concrete details about the Roman numerals. • Each capital letter has at least five words in it. • The different ideas are indented.

  11. Getting a Computer (Title of Subject) I. Picking one out (Topic Sentence) A. Shopping around at different stores to compare (Concrete Detail) B. Talked to salespeople about what I needed. II. Setting it up A. Tried to read the manual but gave up B. Friend came to get it started and helped me *Must have at least 2 items per Roman Numeral and letter.

  12. Commentary • Commentary is opinion, insight, analysis, personal response, feelings, evaluation, or reflection about a concrete detail. • You are “commenting” on the point you have made.

  13. Driving in the fog to Sacramento was a frightening experience. For example, no signs were visible from the freeway, so I couldn’t see if there were any gas stations nearby to fill my empty tank. I panicked at the thought of being stranded along in a strange place. I kept hoping to see a station materialize in the fog and felt incapable of making a decision.

  14. In addition, it was 12:00 noon, and the fog was so thick that I couldn’t read the exit signs until I started passing them. I realized I had driven on for hours, dreading the never-ending blurring lines on the horizon. I was afraid that the weather would never lift and let me get back on schedule.

  15. Commentary Practice I. Sentence #1 (Topic): The walls in this classroom are dull and boring. Sentence #2 (CD): For example, ____________ Sentence #3 (CM): Sentence #4 (CM):

  16. Commentary Mistakes 1) Commentary is generic: Ex. Camping is the best vacation. For example, the air is clean and clear. It sure is good being there. I like it a lot. 2) Commentary drifts from the topic sentence: Ex. I like camping more than anything. For example, the air is clean and clear. It feels good to breathe it after the smog of El Cajon. I wonder if the Native Americans appreciated the clean air they had.

  17. Commentary Mistakes 3) Commentary is really concrete detail Ex. I like camping more than anything. For example, the air is clean and clear. There isn’t any smog up in the mountains. There isn’t the usual brown haze in the sky that I see most days. 4) Commentary Repeats Ex. Football is a fun sport. For example, we get to play in front of lots of people. It’s fun to do that. I like to play in front of a crowd a lot.

  18. Commentary Mistakes 5) Commentary contradicts the topic sentence Ex. I like camping more than anything. For example, I like the fresh air the most. I hate the bites I got there. In addition, my family argued the whole weekend.

  19. More Commentary Practice Unexpected Proposal I. Surprising date is planned A. The day started with a brunch at his house. B. Then went on a date to the zoo. II. The actual proposal A. He handed me a leather-bound copy of Shakespeare’s works CM: It really caught me off guard that he had gotten me a present, considering it wasn’t my birthday or our anniversary. CM: I was actually starting to feel bad since I hadn’t gotten him anything special B. Asked me to open it to Romeo and Juliet, found the ring CM: Honestly, I had no clue that he was going to propose that day, and his question took me by surprise CM: It took me forever to answer him because the shock hadn’t quite set in!

  20. Introductions There are several ways to begin your essay…

  21. #1: Begin with an Anecdote • An anecdote is a story that will interest your reader and lead to the point you want to make. Ex. In a home with four boys and two working parents, tensions and anxieties tend to rise at alarming rates. Especially in my family, the never-ending questions of “Who ate the last bowl of Cheerios?, and “Who wiped toothpaste on the counter?” are always among the nerve-wracking. However, I wouldn’t trade life with a crazy family for anything in the worl.

  22. #2: Use Dialogue • When you use dialogue, you indent each time another person says something. Ex. “Like, oh my gosh! He is like so cute!” “Yeah, and those legs!” “Ooh, let’s kick some sand on him by accident or something.” These are familiar sounds of a typical conversation by a couple of typical girls at the beach in search of some friends to go walking with. The art of scamming on the boardwalk is one mastered by more girls and is a much more popular pastime than swimming in a salty and freezing ocean. These days the beach serves as a teenager’s coolest hangout.

  23. #3: Use Startling Information • An introduction with startling information could include interesting facts or statistics. Ex. It’s alive! This 70-something acre piece of land that used to be a boring, hilly dirt and grass pile has come to life with lively young bodies and staff members who will change the community for the better. We’ve waited a long time for East Side High to open, and now we’re off and running to a wonderful future.

  24. #4: Have an all-commentary introduction It has been many years since my family had the privilege of becoming yet another divorce-stricken statistic. I cannot even begin to recover any of the broad details lost in the nooks and crannies of my mind that concern life with my father. Save the infrequent Christmas visits, he was an alien to me-not quite an intruder in my life, but more like an intermittent visitor. The moment my parents told me they were getting a divorce my world was shattered, and I knew my life would never be the same.

  25. When writing your conclusion… • Remember that your conclusion: • Is all commentary (NO CONCRETE DETAIL) • Gives a finished feeling to your paper

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