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Western Composition

Western Composition. Jonathan Watts. WELCOME BACK TO CLASS! Today's objectives: The four basis for revising essays More about 'Comparison and Contrast' essays Review/Edit our Introductions FIRST, I will collect your essay introductions! (Checking for completion. I am not grading these.).

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Western Composition

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  1. Western Composition Jonathan Watts

  2. WELCOME BACK TO CLASS! • Today's objectives: • The four basis for revising essays • More about 'Comparison and Contrast' essays • Review/Edit our Introductions FIRST, I will collect your essay introductions! (Checking for completion. I am not grading these.)

  3. Today, we will have a quote. Nothing goes by luck in composition. It allows of no tricks. The best you can write will be the best you are. • Henry David Thoreau

  4. Last week... Last week we talked about the 4th step in writing an essay. What are the 4 steps? 1. Begin with a Point or Thesis 2. Support your Thesis with Specific Evidence 3. Organize and Connect the Specific Evidence 4. Revising Sentences

  5. Last week... What are the 6 different ways of revising sentences that we talked about last week? Parallelism Consistent point of view Specific words Active verbs Concise words Varying sentences

  6. Why is revision important? • Today we will talk about ways to evaluate your work by using: • Unity • Support • Coherence • Sentence Skills

  7. Base 1: Unity 统一 • If you advance a single point and stick to that point, your paper will have Unity. • The point here is to see how clearly and effectively you deliver your point. Is it easy to understand. • Take 10 minutes and read the first 2 paragraphs (only) of the two essays on pages 136 & 137. • The point is to see which is more unified.

  8. Unity • Why is Essay 1 more effective? • Because it is unified. It supports and develops each of the three main topics. • Essay 2 has a lot of irrelevant (not important) details that do not relate to the topic. This makes it confusing for the reader. • To have unity, it must be related to your main topics. Ask yourself, does this relate and provide support?

  9. Base 2: Support 支援 • If you support the point with specific evidence, your paper will have support. • Take 15 minutes and read both of the support essays. • Which essay has better support? Why? • Essay 2 makes its point more clearly and effectively because it has better support for its thesis

  10. Support Why is essay 2 more effective? -it offers specific examples of the ways people deal with disappointment When writing, be as specific as possible! Use vivid details. (Paint a picture for the reader) Essay 1 is not more effective because it lacks specific evidence (凭证).

  11. Base 3: Coherence 相干性 • If you organize and connect the specific evidence, your paper will have coherence. • Again, take 10 minutes and read the two essays on page 142 & 143 (Only read the first 3 paragraphs) • Which has more coherence? • Essay 2! • Essay 2 is more effective because it is more clearly organized.

  12. Coherence Essay 2 is more effective because the information given is organized clearly and logically (逻辑) Essay 1 is unified and supported, BUT there is no consistency in the way the writer wrote their essay. It is not consistent.

  13. Base 4: Sentence Skills • If you write clear, error-free sentences, your paper will demonstrate effective sentence skills. • Take a few minutes and read the essays on page 145 &146. Which has clear, error free sentences? • Essay two is free of errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. It shows great use of sentence skills.

  14. Revising Activities • Become familiar with the 4 different ways to revise that we just talked about. • Do the activities this week on pages 148-160 • This is not your homework assignment this week, I just believe doing these activities will give you a much better understanding of proper revision.

  15. Let's talk about this essay... • You should already have your topic chosen, your thesis and your introduction written. If we have time today, I would like to look at some of your introductions with the whole class. • You should have at least 3 supporting details to go along with your topic. If you do not, you need to figure these out today.

  16. My brother Joey is like a taxi in three ways. Bu hao.

  17. Even though my brother Joey is twenty years younger, we have much in common. Yeah :D

  18. Two Columns:. Person 1: Amy Carmichael • Went to India! • Some time ago... • Worked with kids. Rescued girls. • Became “mom” to many. • Didn't get married. • Died in India.

  19. Two Columns:. Person 2: Katie Davis Went to Uganda at a really young age. Current...she's 23 now? Work with poor kids. Has 14 girls! Gave up a relationship Still alive in Uganda

  20. What's Your Point?Guidline #2: Determine your point. • The purpose of a compare or contrast essay is to make a point by showing readers that two items are similar or different.

  21. My sister and I look alike, dress alike, and like the same foods. What's your point?

  22. Even though Vennis and Serena Williams are both professional tennis stars, they differ in their opinions about men, movies, and music. Better.

  23. What's Your Point? • In making comparisons, you should move beyond the obvious. • If the similarities are obvious, maybe you should choose to contrast.

  24. Compare or Contrast?Guideline #3: Determine whether to compare or contrast. • Ask yourself which one (comparing or contrasting) will help you convince readers of your main point.

  25. Compare or Contrast? Main point: Home-cooked dumplings are superior to street dumplings. Contrast: price, taste, and nutrition.

  26. Compare or Contrast? Main point: Dating a village boy is just as good as dating a city boy. Compare: _____ , _____ , _____.

  27. Free-write: Why do you want to write about these people? What point would you be making through showing their similarities or dissimilarities. _______ Which would help you best make the point? To compare or contrast? What's your point?

  28. Sub-pointsGuideline #4: Determine similar elements as sub-points • Make sure you discuss the same (or similar) elements for each person. • Do not discuss entirely different elements for each person.

  29. Katie D: Lived in Uganda Gave up a relationship and college education. Adopted 14 girls. Similar Sub-points? Amy C: • Lived in India • Had brown eyes, but wished she had blue ones. • Died in India.

  30. Student Example: USA Sports c/c China Sports China Sports

  31. Uniforms are common or simple. More skillful. Parents encourage academics over sports. Student Example: • Individual style to express their personality • Really strong! • Sports are overly important. USA Sports c/c China Sports

  32. Student Example:

  33. Student Example: • Uniforms • Performance • Attitude (support from society) Three Sub-points:

  34. Sub-points? As you look over your list, decide how the things you've written down--and others that occur to you-- could fit into three categories that can serve as your supporting points.

  35. Point by Point? Essay StructureGuideline #5: Determine the best structure. • Subject by Subject?

  36. Point by Point: Introduction Element A - subject 1 - subject 2 Element B - subject 1 - subject 2 Element C - subject 1 - subject 2 Conclusion

  37. Subject by Subject: Introduction Subject 1 Sub-points A, B, and C Subject 2 Sub-points A, B, and C Conclusion

  38. Student ExampleScratch Outlines

  39. Scratch Outline Prepare a scratch outline for your essay based on these three supporting points. MAIN IDEA: ________________________ I. First sub-point II. Second sub-point III. Third sub-point

  40. Homework • Write the body of your essay. • You should have at least 3 paragraphs in your body, with 5-7 sentences in each paragraph. • Each paragraph should highlight a specific supporting detail from your topic. • Type your body(with introduction) and bring it to class next week. (Have the proper format) • (Your midterm essay should only be 2-3 pages when you are finished writing) 500-700 words! • Pg. 147 Revising Sentence skills. Edit the essay (pt. 1)

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