Writing the Draft

1. Writing the Draft What Do I Do Now?

2. Length • Make the first draft longer than the original • Write the first draft in stages

3. Outline • Use your notes to create a working outline centered around your thesis • Divide up each major point into smaller papers • Introduction 100 words / 2 sources+ • Passage 1000 words / 6+ sources • Conclusion 100 words / 1 source • TOTAL: 1200 words

4. Paragraph Pattern • Use a variety of paragraph patterns • Narration • Cause and Effect • Comparison and Contrast • Definition • Description • Illustration

5. Research Template • Use a research “template” incorporating claims, evidence, and commentary. Many have blamed the rise in obesity on a more sedentary life style, including the move to the suburbs, where people drive instead of walk, and increased viewing of television.One study of children watching television found a significant drop in the average metabolic rate during viewing (Klesges, Shelton, and Klesges). Another study reports that viewing also affects their eating behavior (Robinson and Killen). No doubt that children who exercise less tend to weigh more, but the couch potato argument does not explain why the enormous weight gains have occurred over the past twenty-five years. {The Penguin Handbook, page 399]

6. Quotation • John Doe views that site as a probable burial pit: “The artifacts of the L2 site were all bunched together within a rough circle approximately three meters in diameter”(233).

7. Summary • A product recall might be more accurately known as a product repair. As Jane Doe notes, most recalled products never leave the consumer’s home (456). • Using Sources Effectively by Robert Harris

8. Paraphrase • A product recall might be more accurately known as a product repair. As Jane Doe notes, most recalled products never leave the consumer’s home. In many cases, she states that when a defect is discovered by the manufacturer, a repair kit is sent to the consumer. In other cases, she adds that the product must be taken in for repair (456-57). • Using Sources Effectively by Robert Harris

9. Lead-Ins • According to Jane Doe, • A State of California geologist says • In A History of the Secret Codes, we learn • A recent article about the design of room lighting tells us • As evidence of this, Dr. Smith strongly believes

10. Verbs of Lead Ins • Adds, believes, comments, describes, explains, mentions, notes, observes, offers, points out, argues, asserts contends, demonstrates, holds, illustrates, indicates, alleges, accepts, agrees, concurs, acknowledges, admits, agrees, grants, attacks, criticizes, denies, differs, disagrees, implies, suggests, concludes, decides, finds, continues,

11. Position of Lead Ins • John Doe views that site as a probable burial pit:“The artifacts of the L2 site were all bunched together within a rough circle approximately three meters in diameter” (233). • “The artifacts of the L2 site were all bunched together within a rough circle approximately three meters in diameter”, states John Doe (233). • “The artifacts of the L2 site”, argues John Doe, “ were all bunched together within a rough circle approximately three meters in diameter” (233).

12. Position of Lead Ins • As John Doe states, the development of the video camera “has been toward the smaller, until we now have a camera that can be swallowed” (132). • As John Doe states, the development of the video camera is becoming smaller to the point where a camera “can be swallowed” (132).

13. Plagiarism

14. Plagiarism • Buy a paper from a commercial paper mill (lazystudents.com).

15. Plagiarism • Download a free paper from the Internet (freeesay.com).

16. Plagiarism • Copy an article, in part or in whole, from the Internet.

17. Plagiarism • Translate a foreign Web article into English (http://babelfish.altavista.com).

18. Plagiarism • Borrow a paper, in part or in whole, from another individual.

19. Plagiarism • Cut and paste from several sources to create a paper.

20. Plagiarism • Falsify a citation.

21. Plagiarism • Fail to place quotation marks around all copied words, phrases, or four sentences or less with or without a citation. (Or fail to indent more than four copied sentences, with or without a citation).

22. Plagiarism • Change only a few words within a copied section without quotation marks or indentation, with or without a citation.

23. Plagiarism • Paraphrase or summarize without a citation.

24. Examples of Plagiarism

25. Plagiarism: Phrases Original: The date of the composition may be early post-Exile…. Gath was one of the five principal cities of the Philistines. Note: Anderson says the date of Psalm 5 may be early Post-Exilic. Psalm 5 takes place in the city of Gath, which was one of the five principle cities of the philistines (420).

26. Plagiarism: Sentence Structure This should fill us with awe, so that we sin not; with courage, so that we fear not; with delight, so that we mourn not. …should fill us with wonder to prevent our sin; with boldness, to prevent our trembling; and with joy, so that we have no sorrow.

27. Plagiarism: Sentences This word is sometimes translated “compassions.” It indicates intimate affection like that of a mother for her infant child. The physical idea back of the word is to glow, to feel warm. According to Robert Daniel this word is sometimes translated “compassions.” It indicates intimate affection like that of a mother for her infant child. The physical idea back of the word is to glow, to feel warm (Daniel, 220).

28. Plagiarism: Sentence Structure Yahweh values highly those who are devoted to Him, and when they die He suffers loss. To the Psalmist this meant that He would not casually let their death pass unheeded, but would heal and preserve them. The Lord highly values those who are loyal to Him. When they die, He endures a loss. The Psalmist is not necessarily saying the Lord rejoices when one of his beloved servants dies, but that the Lord does not take the death of those servants lightly—but beholds it in high regard.