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My Dreams: 2022. Comments from Coffin: “A very interesting paper. While you’re not entirely specific about your goals, you certainly were consistent! Great writing!”. Why this piece of writing?. It showed a point of progress in my writing.
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My Dreams: 2022 Comments from Coffin: “A very interesting paper. While you’re not entirely specific about your goals, you certainly were consistent! Great writing!”
Why this piece of writing? It showed a point of progress in my writing. It made me come to the realization that I have no idea what I want to do with my life except have fun. It was a piece of writing that I related to and enjoyed writing about.
My Dreams: 2022 “You only get one chance. I don’t want to waste it. I want to have fun, be crazy, be weird, do things that earn dirty looks and make every day different. When the moment comes that my life flashes before my eyes, I want to make sure it’s worth watching. I want to see everything I possibly can in this world. I love PEI, but sometimes you need to step outside and see what you’re missing. I’m in love with people I’ve never met and places I’ve never been. I want adventure and to explore. In ten years, I will not be here. If you try and stop me, good luck. I’m a girl with a dream; a force to be reckoned with. In 2022, I will be anywhere but here.”
How did I write it? What needs to be done to be doing this in the future? What do I see myself doing in the future? What can I do to start planning for my future? What is an interesting aspect I can add to this piece of writing? Grammar, punctuation, sentence fluency, etc. Peer Edit
Movie Review Comments from Coffin: “Very strong effort Carley. All concepts were fully explored and developed. Good writing, as usual.”
Why this piece of writing? • Definitely the most fun to write. • It was proofread more than everything else. • I could add humour to it. • Another major progress point in my growth as a writer.
Movie Review “Annie is my all-time favourite movie. It’s a classic. It has changed the musical industry forever. Comparing the 1982 version to 1999 version is inevitable. They both have their pros and their cons. But after much consideration, I enjoyed the 1982 version much better. It seemed more real, even if the acting wasn’t portrayed the best. There was more action and more drama. It was quirkier and funnier. This movie gets four bottles of Miss Hannigan’s whiskey out of five. The other one has gone to the acting. As an avid Annie fan I recommend watching the original before the 1999 version. If you have not seen this film, you poor, poor soul. Get your bahookey into gear, pop some corn and watch Annie. You will not regret it!”
How did I write it? • Watch the movie • Take notes and paid close attention to details. • Compared the original to the newer version. • Was it good, was it bad? • recommendations, rating, would I watch it again? • Proofread, proofread, proofread!
What I learned from Writing 421D: • Commas should be used sparingly. • Finish a sentence when you start it. • Keep the sentence like me; short. • Never fuse a sentence. • It is possible to write about nothing. • Baldness is always questioned.
