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2012 中考作文训练 1 有关情感体验的话题. What makes you happy?. 词语匹配. 1 )帮助他人 2 )取得好成绩 3 )克服困难 4 )与家人共处 5 )经过努力后获得成功. e. help others c. get good grades b. get over the difficulties stay with one’s family d. be successful after working hard. Topic: What is happiness?. 1 . 你心中的幸福是什么?
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词语匹配 • 1)帮助他人 • 2)取得好成绩 • 3)克服困难 • 4)与家人共处 • 5)经过努力后获得成功 • e. help others • c. get good grades • b. get over the difficulties • stay with one’s family • d. be successful after working hard
Topic: What is happiness? • 1. 你心中的幸福是什么? • 2. 描述一件令你感到幸福快乐的事(要交代时间,地点,过程与感受) • 3. 你认为应该如何创造幸福(至少两点)
Pre-writing:Outline … 点题:What is happiness? Beginning Process Result Feelings 事件:A happy thing 1…. 2…. 观点:How to create happiness? … 归纳升华
1.点题:What is happiness Happiness is helping others. Happiness is staying with people you love. Happiness is living in a warm family. Helping others is an important way to (achieve) happiness. I think happiness is just giving others a helping hand. Happiness is helping people (who are) in trouble.
2.事件讲述:A happy thing I can’t forget I helped my classmate last month. My classmate Lily was ill and she had to stay at home. She was worried about her studies. When I heard about that, I went to her home and helped her with her lessons. She wasthankful to me and I felt happy.
3.观点:How to create happiness ----How can we create a happy society? There are some ways. First of all, we should know the importance of helping others. Furthermore,we’d better help people who are in trouble. ----I think we should get on well with our parents and help them in the daily time.
4.归纳升华 • Let’s create happiness and make happiness around the world. • In a word, if we often help others, we will feel very happy. Let’s make our life more and more beautiful . • One for all, all for one. If you want to create happiness, it’s important to enjoy the life and help others.
While-writing What is happiness? Happiness is the feeling while ____________. One night, I ____________________________ _______________________________________ _______________________________________ At that time, I felt _________. In my opinion, creating happiness is not difficult in the slightest. First of all, we should ___________. Besides, ____________. After that, ______________________. Let’s create happiness and make the society more harmonious.
Post-writing:Self evaluation 评价要点: • 时态有没有用对? • 拼写有没有错? • 句型是不是正确? • 所举的例子是否与你的观点匹配? • 句子与句子之间的衔接是否自然? • 文章的结构是不是完整? • 要点是不是齐全? • 最后有没有升华点题?
美文欣赏 Happiness is the feeling while helping others. One night, I saw a boy carrying his bike upstairs in the dark. Because the light was dim, it was difficult for him to do so. I turned on the light at once and helped him to carry the bike. The boy thanked me a lot. At that time, I felt extremely happy. In my opinion, creating happiness isnot difficult in the slightest. First of all, we should have a warm heart. Besides, help others when they are in trouble. After that, I’m sure that all of us will feel happy. • Let’s create happiness and make the society more harmonious.
美文欣赏 Happiness is helping others. As we all know, helping others is important to us. I can’t forget I helped my classmate last month. My classmate Lily was ill and she had to stay at home. She was worried about her studies. When I heard about that, I went to her home and helped her with her lessons. She wasthankful to me and I felt happy. How can we create a happy society? There are some ways. First of all, we should know the importance of helping others. Furthermore,we’d better help people who are in trouble. In a word, if we often help others, we will feel very happy. Let’s make our life more and more beautiful .
Useful expressions: 表示定义的句型:Happiness is… /…is happiness. 表示时间的词语:one day, a few days ago, the other day 表示感受的句型:I was tired but happy.我很累但很开心。 be thankful to sb. 对某人感激不尽 表示顺序的词语:At the beginning/ At first 开始 First of all/ First 首先, Then 然后 Furthermore/Moreover 再者,还有 At last/ Finally 最后 表示总结的词语: In a word,…总之一句话 表示提升主题的句子:One for all, all for one. 我为人人,人人为我。
Homework 请在“压力”“感恩”“代沟”“愉悦感”等四个主题中挑选一个写一篇90词左右的小短文。 (具体要求请看《学案》) Don’t write what you want to, just write what you are able to!