福清第三中学 何秀琼

1. 如何使高考英语作文“亮”起来 福清第三中学 何秀琼 How to enrich your writing

2. Teaching Procesure • Ⅰ. 单词 • Ⅱ.美化句子 • Ⅲ.精彩片断 • Ⅳ.连段成文 • Ⅴ.改头换面 • Ⅵ.写作要领 • Ⅶ.课后作业

3. Ⅰ.天天单词 • argument • 财政的 • burden • afford • 减轻,缓解 • 获得, 得到 • occupy • advantage • ordinary family • social experience • meet the expectation of the college • benefitfrom 英汉互译 1.争论,论点 • 2. financial • 3.担子, 负担 • 4. 承担得起 • 5. relieve • 6. obtain • 7. 占用 • 8. 优势 • 9.普通家庭 • 10.社会经验 • 11.满足大学的要求 • 12.从...中受益

4. Give the words according to the first letters or Chinese meaning given • . • 2. Try to use recycled paper because it saves energy. • 3. The Forbidden City in Beijing is the biggest ancient palace in the world. • 4. You are not allowed to take food into the library. • 5. The museum is very familiar to Tom. He has been there many times.

5. 高考阅卷启示 基本句型 • S + V + P 【主 + 系动词 + 表】 • S + Vi. (+A) 【主 + 不及物动词 (+ 状语)】 • S + Vt. + O 【主 + 及物动词 + 宾语】 • S + Vt. + IO + DO【主 +及物动词 + 间宾+直宾】 • S + Vt. + O + OC【主 + 及物动词 + 宾语 + 宾补】 从这五种最简单的基本句型 可以演变出许多意义更加丰富生动的句子！ 主从复合句、感叹句、倒装句、 强调句、省略句 ……

6. Ⅱ.美化句子 • 一.合并简单句 • 1.简单句--简单句 • She has knowledge. She has experience. • She has not only knowledge but also experience. • 或She has experience as well as knowledge. • 2.简单句--复合句 • 1．用名词性从句 • 1）用主语从句结合 • You didn’t go to see such a wonderful play. It’s a pity. • It’s a pity that you didn’t go to see such a wonderful play.

7. 2)用表语从句 • We should stick to our original plan. This is my idea. • My idea is that we should stick to our original plan.

8. 3)用宾语从句结合 • He will be back tomorrow.We hope so. • We hope that he will be back tomorrow.You have done an excellent day’s work. • I am much pleased to see it.I am much pleased to see what an excellent day’s work you have done

9. 2、用定语从句结合 • 1）用关系代词把前后两个简单句结合成一个复合句型： • He is a teacher. He often helps us. • He is a teacher who often helps us. • The day will come. People of the world will live a peaceful and happy life. • The day will come when people of the world live a peaceful and happy life.

10. 3、用状语从句。状语从句包括时间状语从句、原因状语从句、目的状语从句、结果状语从句、让步状语从句、条件状语从句等3、用状语从句。状语从句包括时间状语从句、原因状语从句、目的状语从句、结果状语从句、让步状语从句、条件状语从句等 • We’re in school. We must keep fit,study well and work hard. • While we’re in school, we must keep fit, study well and work hard.(时间状语从句) • John studied very hard. He answered all the questions correctly. • John answered all the questions correctly because he studied very hard. (原因状语从句) • You must work hard. Then you can fulfil your plan ahead of time. • You must work hard in order that you can fulfil you plan ahead of time.（目的状语从句）

11. It was raining cats and dogs. We could not go out. • It was raining cats and dogs, so that we could not go out. • He has had great success. He remains modest and prudent. • Even if he has had great success, he remains modest and prudent. (让步状语从句 • You work hard at English. You will make progress. • If you work hard at English, you will make progress.(条件状语从句)

12. Have a try 1. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句） 2. Though I’m weak, I’ll make the effort. (使用倒装句) 3. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 4. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气） What surprises him is thatthe little girl knows so many things. Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort. It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened. I couldn’t have passed the physics exam but for your help.

13. 5.She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词) 6. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式) 7.I won’t believe what he says. （使用状语从句） 8.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句） 9．He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装句) Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab. Singing and laughing, they went back to school. No matter what he says, I won’t believe. Study hard and you’ll make rapid progress. No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.

14. 英语书面表达是对学生的英语综合能力的考查，难度高，这要求学生要有扎实的基础知识，要熟练掌握简单句的五种基本句型、并列句句型以及复合句句型。在完成基础写作时，基础差的同学可先用简单句把提供的信息完整地表达出来后，运用各种句型进行拆分和组合，简单句、并列句和复合句有机结合，长句和短句交插，更好地把写作内容表达完整。

15. 以下面这篇描写某个地方的短文为例： • （1）We can imagine the beautiful surroundings（2）There are many trees along the streets（3）There is a clean river in the city．（4） There are many fishes in the river．（5）There are willow trees on the one side．（6）There are some pieces of grassland on the other side．（7）There are many flowers on them．文中七个句子都是简单句，句型结构单一，而且句子长短同一，都在七、八词左右，十分单调。请运用句型转换修改：

16. （1）Just imagine the beautiful surroundings if we make our cities greener.（2）Green trees line the streets.（3）A clean riverwindsthrough the city，in which a lot of fishes abound．（4）On the one side stand rows of willow trees．（5）On the other side lies a stretch of grassland sprinkled with many yellow and red flowers．

17. 改写后的这段文字，有长句（1）、（3）、（5），也有短句（2）和（4），一长一短，抑扬顿挫的节奏感就出来了。不仅句子长短交插，而且句型结构变化也很大，使文章流畅自然，生动活泼。改写后的这段文字，有长句（1）、（3）、（5），也有短句（2）和（4），一长一短，抑扬顿挫的节奏感就出来了。不仅句子长短交插，而且句型结构变化也很大，使文章流畅自然，生动活泼。

18. 二.主变被动句 • Our hometown has changed a lot in the past few years. • Great changes have taken place in my hometown in the past few years. • I searched all my pockets,but I found • nothing. • I searched all my pockets,but nothing. was found .

19. 三.采用倒装句 • Though he is a well-known scientist,he is easy-going. • Well-known scientist as he is ,he is easy-going. • A young girl stood by the raodside , • selling flowers. • By the raodside stood a young girl , selling flowers.

20. 四.运用强调句 • With the teacher’s help,I have made great progress in English. • It is with the teacher’s help that I have made great progress in English. • I didn’t realize I had left the bag on the shop counter until I arrived home . • It was not until I arrived home that I realized I had left the bag on the shop counter.

21. 五.善用复合句 • I was attracted by the beauty of the West Lake. • What attracted most is the beauty of the West Lake. • He gave me not only a Christmas present but also a heart full of love and a mind of my existence in it • What he gave me, which I knew, were not only a Christmas present but also a heart full of love and a mind of my existence in it

22. 六.巧用非谓语 • When she heard that, the driver’s wife quickly added that her husband often talked nonsense after drinking. • Hearing that, the driver’s wife quickly added that her husband often talked nonsense after drinking. • If weather permits, we’ll go hiking. • Weather permitting , we’ll go hiking.

23. Ⅲ.精彩片段 1.表原因 • There are three reasons for the changes that have taken place in our life．Firstly，people’s living standard has been greatly improved．Secondly，most people are well paid， and they can afford what they need or like．Last but not least，more and more people prefer to enjoy modern life．

24. 2.表长处与短处（优缺点，好处与坏处） • Books are like friends．They can help us know the world better，and they can open our minds and widen our horizons． Therefore，reading extensively is of great benefit to us． • Computers make our life much easier and entertains us in many different ways . • Firstly, computers make our life easier. People can store a lot of files in the computers, such as documents, photos, even books.

25. This saves our space at home and makes people easy to manage their documents. Also people can buy or know anything they want without going out on the internet through computers. In addition, many computers software benefit us a lot. For example, the Microsoft Word Processer makes you write an article much easier than you write with your hand. Secondly, computers entertain our life in many different ways. There are many entertainments we can do on the computers. Such as playing computer games, chatting with friends, E-mailing others, and so on. These entertainments all enrich our life.

26. 3.表坏处 • However，everything divides into two． The radiation of the computer screen hurt our eyes a lot. In addition, computers are bad for the growth of teenagers sometimes. Many teenagers lose themselves in the computer games or the internet. All these affect their daily study and waste their time. Some students play computer games overnight or for several days, this not only affect their study, but also their body health.

27. 4.表现状 • We cannot ignore the fact that industrialization brings with it the problems of pollution．To solve these problems， we can start by educating the public about the hazards of pollution．The government on its part should also design stricter laws to promote a cleaner environment．

28. 5.表比较 • Compared with cars，bicycles have several advantages besides being affordable．Firstly，they do not consume natural resources of petroleum．Secondly，they do not cause the pollution problem．Last but not least，they contribute to people’s health by giving them due physical exercise．

29. 6.表看法 • People have different attitudes towards failure．Some believe that failure leads to success． • Every failure they experience translates into a greater chance of success at their renewed endeavor．However， others are easily discouraged by failures and put themselves into the category of losers．

30. 7.表结论 • From what has been mentioned above，we can come to the conclusion that examination is necessary，however， its method should be improved . • To sum up, computers make our life much easier and entertains us in many different ways, but long time use of the computers may affect our health and daily life. So it’s better to control the time of using computers and have a rest after use computer for several hours. .

31. Ⅳ.连句成段 • My family was very large. • My family met at my grandparents’ every holiday. • There were never enough chairs. • I always had to sit on the floor. • My family met at my grandparents’ every holiday. Because my family was very large, there were never enough chairs. As a result, I always had to sit on the floor.

32. She wanted to be successful. • She worked day and night. • She worked for a famous advertising agency. • She became the manager. • She worked for a famous advertising agency. Because she wanted to be successful, she worked day and night. • Finally, She became the manager.

33. He really wants to go swimming. • He has decided to go to the beach in California. • His sister lives there. • He hasn’t seen her for six years. • He really wants to go swimming, so he has decided to go to the beach in California, where his sister lives. He hasn’t seen her for six years.

34. Ⅴ .连段成文 • 一方面，打工可以给学生以经济上的支持。 父母的负担将会大大减轻。 • On one hand, doing part-time jobs can bring financial support to the students. The burden of the parents will be greatly relieved.

35. 同时，他们将会获得一些社会经验，而这对于他们将来的工作是非常必要的。同时，他们将会获得一些社会经验，而这对于他们将来的工作是非常必要的。 At the same time, they will obtain some social experience which is necessary for their future work. 另一方面，这将会占用学生的很多时间。结果是这将难以使他们达到大学的要求。 On the other hand, it will occupy the students a lot of time. As a result, it will be hard for them to meet the expectation of the college.

36. Nowadays，there are arguments on the part-time job in college. In my opinion, it has two sides. • On one hand, doing part-time jobs can bring financial support to the students. The burden of the parents will be greatly relieved. At the same time, they will obtain some social experience which is necessary for their future work. • On the other hand, it will occupy the students a lot of time. As a result, it will be hard for them to meet the expectation of the college. • Therefore, we should take the advantages of the part-time job and avoid its disadvantages. Only in this way can we really benefit from it.

37. Ⅵ.改头换面(妙笔生辉) • Trees are very important to us. They can not only take in carbon dioxide but also make our city beautiful.Planting trees can even change the climate. • To our disappointment,although we plant a great number of trees every year,few of them can survive because no one cares about them after planting.The government advocates every resident donating 25 to buy young trees and care for each tree.25 yuan is a small sum of money fou you,but it can help a tree a lot. • I think it is a good thing for everyone as well as our environmemt. Please jion us in the campaign as soon as possible.

38. As we all know,trees are of vital important to us.Not only do they absorb carbon dioxide to produce oxygen,which isessential to the healthof human beings,but also they can makeourcity morebeautiful.Furthermore,the climate can even be changed by planting trees. • However, to our disappointment,in spite of the fact that a great number of trees are planted in spring and autumn every year, few survived for lack of care.Therefore,our government is appealing to every resident to donate 25 yuan to buy young trees and care for each tree.25yuan ,which is a small sum of money for you,makes a difference to a tree.

39. As far as I’m concerned ,this is a good chance to make contribution to our city .At the same time,we can enjoy a greener and clearer environment ,So why not join in our campaign?

40. Ⅶ.写作要领 • 1 细读提示——明白写什么，日记、信函、报导或叙事描写 • 2 写全要点——了解核心内容，非重要情节，图画作文应认真分析判断才能分清主次。表格类原则上一个不能少 • 3 卷面干净——事先打草稿然后誊改是使文章通畅的关键 • 4 书写认真——不求文字隽秀力保规范工整，这是给人留下好印象的起码条件 • 5 层次分明——为使短文令人感到赏心悦目分成2甚至3段为好 • 6 承上启下——简而言之是连接词、过渡句他们是组成文章粘和剂，上下沟通的纽带

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