Antigone Essay

1. Antigone Essay Corrections for Mrs. Michel

2. Some General Comments: • A good title shows your reader the direction of your essay. • Write about literature in the present tense (even if the story happened a long time ago.) • You do not (and should not) write about yourself or your essay within your essay.

3. Don’t talk about yourself • My character is Antigone. I chose her because she is the character I relate to the most in the story. • I think Ismene is being a better sister than Antigone because she doesn’t want Antigone to be hurt, and Ismene isn’t speaking to hurt her feelings.

4. Don’t Talk about your essay • In my essay I am going to talk about how Creon is a king who is cold-hearted and stubborn but by the end a better man. • Antigone is a bold and confident character as proven by the quotations in this paragraph.

5. Adding Quotations • “You are unwise [Antigone], but a loyal friend indeed to those who love you” (Prologue 82-84). This comes from Ismene as Antigone is trying to convince Ismene to help bury her brother. • When Antigone tries to convince Ismene to help bury their brother, Ismene says, “You are unwise [Antigone], but a loyal friend indeed to those who love you” (Prologue 82-84).

6. Major Errors Corrections due next week

7. MLA Errors • Format: Blah blah blah, “Quotation” (scene #, line #). • Example: In his opening speech, Creon shows his hotheadedness when he exclaims about Polyneices, “he shall lie on the / plain, unburied; and the birds and the savaging dogs / can do with him whatever they like” (1, 47-49).

8. Subject / Verb Agreement • The quotation “this girl is guilty of a double insolence, breaking the given laws and boasting of it “ (2, 81-82) is proof that Antigone is brave enough to do what she believes in. Bravery, along with other things, are what drive Antigone to break the law. • My character is Creon, the newly-made king who has just been crowned after a siege on his city, where one of his nephews were on the defending side and the other on the attacking side.

9. Ambiguous Pronoun Reference • Her sister just said she wants to bury her brother, which the laws do not allow. • He is telling Creon that because he is king, he will obey his laws. • When she and her sister are discussing burying their brother, she is convinced and says, “he is my brother, and he is your brother, too” (Prologue 33).

10. Ambiguous Pronoun, Continued • Antigone doesn’t want her sister to die for nothing; she wants her to live on even though she can’t.

11. Comma Splice • She will not be afraid of burying her brother, she knows that it is right. • “and yet you dared defy the law” “I dared / It was not god’s proclamation” (2, 56-8), these quotes were from a conversation between Creon and Antigone, in the conversation Creon is the one who asked and Antigone answered.

12. Run-On Sentences & Sentence Fragments Run-On Sentences Sentence Fragments She cares for both of her brothers so she wants both to be honored the same. Creon soon discovers what she had done and yet again Antigone displays her courage. When she tells the king, “Creon, what more do you want than my death?” (2, 93).

13. Corrections Major Errors New Final Draft (Optional) On separate, lined paper: copy the original sentence that contains the major error (sentences marked with “X” in the left margin), name the error the sentence contains, and write a corrected version of the sentence. Hand in a new final draft of your essay, changing as much or as little as you see fit. Make sure that all of your changes (even major errors) are highlighted in your new final draft. You will hand in your first final draft with the new final draft by class on Thursday.