Scientific Writing, HRP 214

1. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Recap from last time (quick quiz):

2. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 • "Data doesn't lie, but in raw form, it often doesn't speak clearly, either." • "Data don't lie, but in raw form, they often don't speak clearly, either."

3. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 • "Data doesn't lie, but in raw form, it often doesn't speak clearly, either." • "Data don't lie, but in raw form, they often don't speak clearly, either." (Choice A was the tag line on the webpage of a math software company!)

4. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The war profoundly affected her views. B. The war profoundly effected her views.

5. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The war profoundly affected her views. B. The war profoundly effected her views.

6. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The affects of the war were devastating. B. The effects of the war were devastating.

7. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The affects of the war were devastating. B. The effects of the war were devastating.

8. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The psychiatrist found the patient’s effect worrisome. B. The psychiatrist found the patient’s affect worrisome.

9. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The psychiatrist found the patient’s effect worrisome. B. The psychiatrist found the patient’s affect worrisome.

10. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. She resolved to affect a change in the healthcare system. B. She resolved to effect a change in the healthcare system.

11. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. She resolved to affect a change in the healthcare system. B. She resolved to effect a change in the healthcare system.

12. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The negotiators effected an agreement. B.The negotiators affected an agreement.

13. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The negotiators effected an agreement. B.The negotiators affected an agreement.

14. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her personal effects were stolen. B.While she waited to be seen in the ER, her personal affects were stolen.

15. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. While she waited to be seen in the ER, her personal effects were stolen. B.While she waited to be seen in the ER, her personal affects were stolen.

16. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The bacteria that I was trying to grow died. B. The bacteria which I was trying to grow died.

17. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The bacteria that I was trying to grow died. B. The bacteria which I was trying to grow died.

18. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. There is limited data. B. There are limited data.

19. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. There is limited data. B. There are limited data.

20. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The car, which I didn’t particularly like, finally died. B. The car, that I didn’t particularly like, finally died.

21. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. The car, which I didn’t particularly like, finally died. B. The car, that I didn’t particularly like, finally died.

22. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. He owed over $1000 to the doctor. B. He owed more than $1000 to the doctor.

23. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. He owed over $1000 to the doctor. B. He owed more than $1000 to the doctor.

24. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. Her dresses weren’t worth very much compared with her shoes. B.Her dresses weren’t worth very much compared to her shoes.

25. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 A. Her dresses weren’t worth very much compared with her shoes. B.Her dresses weren’t worth very much compared to her shoes.

26. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : HOMEWORK ANSWERS Many possibilities, of course! Here are my suggestions..

27. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : • 1. The terms genetic predisposition and susceptibility are not entirely satisfactory terms because they are not independent concepts, but we use the terms to distinguish the extent of increased risk that arise from the inherited genetic alterations, calling very high individual risk, predisposition, and lower risk, susceptibility. What were your rewrites?

28. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : My rewrite: • We call inherited genetic alterations ‘genetic predisposition’ if they confer a very high risk of disease and ‘genetic susceptibility’ if they confer a lower risk.

29. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : 2. Certain etiologic factors might be more likely to lead to certain types of molecular changes, so defining tumors based on molecular changes might lead to formation of more etiologically homogeneous subsets of tumors than are apparent solely through histologic categories.

30. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : My rewrite: Tumors caused by a particular environmental or genetic factor undergo predictable molecular changes; thus, classifying tumors by molecular rather than histologic changes may give more etiologically homogenous subsets.

31. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : 3. It is interesting to note that the new organism is green in color, round in shape, 5x10 mm in size, and active with respect to motility.

32. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : My rewrite: The new organism is green, round, 5x10 mm long, and mobile.

33. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : 4.In view of the fact that solar energy is not yet fully developed at the present time, we will have to continue utilizing fossil fuels well into the next century.

34. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK ANSWERS : My rewrite: Because solar energy is underdeveloped, we will have to use fossil fuels into the next century.

35. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK: 1. Adjacent to near 2. Assuming that if 3. Big in size big 4. Clearly evident evident **5. Demonstrate show 6. Doctorate degree doctorate

36. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK: 7. Disseminate send out, distribute 8. Endeavor (verb) try 9. Evaluate test 10. Finalize finish 11. Facility office, plant **12. Have an effect on affect

37. Scientific Writing, HRP 214HOMEWORK: **13. Has no lacks 14. New development development **15. In order to to 16. It is probable that probably 17. Terminate end 18. Total number number **19. Utilize use 20. With regard to about, regarding

38. Scientific Writing, HRP 214WARM-UP: On a scrap of paper, revise… Clinically and pathologically, a focal neurologic deficit may be considered a stroke if that deficit is thought to be caused by a local disturbance affecting the cerebral circulation.  A stroke is a focal neurologic deficit caused by a local disturbance in cerebral circulation.

39. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 • Lecture Two: News Writing News writing… News-writing is the art of maximizing information and minimizing words; it’s the barest-bones form of writing. The fundamentals of good writing can be learned by dissecting news articles.

40. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 When you write news, you are trying to inform your reader in the quickest, most interesting way possible.

41. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 What scientific writers can learn from journalists… • That a clear, succinct, informative writing style is best and… • That holding your reader’s attention matters!

42. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 What scientific writers can learn from journalists… • That a clear, succinct, informative writing style is best and… • That holding your reader’s attention matters!

43. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 • That a clear, succinct, informative writing style is best and… We were introduced to many of these principles last time.

44. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Writing in news style:  Just the facts, Ma’am.

45. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Some principles of news writing… • Don’t use a complicated word when a simple one will do. • Avoid jargon, clichés, and euphemisms. • Don’t cram too much into one sentence. • Avoid redundancy and repetition. • Use active verbs and follow the usual conversational flow of words • Use facts, not opinion. • Be specific.

46. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Some principles of news writing… • Don’t use a complicated word when a simple one will do. see last week’s lesson. • Did anyone count average number of letters per word in the newspaper?

47. This is a single sentence… • Because septin filaments mark the site for cytokinesis, and because there is a specific cell cycle checkpoint that monitors the state of septin filament assembly, that we also discovered such knowledge may allow, ultimately, the development of therapeutic agents and clinically valuable strategies, on the one hand, to impose a permanent checkpoint arrest as a means of halting the growth of malignant cells in various cancers, including breast cancer, and, on the other, to overcome such checkpoints to re-activate proliferation of quiescent differentiated cells (for example, to stimulate multiplication of the residual beta-cells in patients suffering from Type 1 diabetes as a means to repopulate the pancreatic islets with insulin-producing cells).

48. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Some principles of news writing… • Avoid jargon, clichés, and euphemisms.

49. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Avoid clichés like the plague…

50. Scientific Writing, HRP 214 Euphemisms accept the resignation of economically disadvantaged limited success pre-owned underachiever expire collateral damage