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Exercise 5. No.1. (Worse) Product and operational procedures are significantly influenced by design parameters and noise factors. (Better) Design parameters and noise factors significantly influence product and operational procedures. [Note 2.7].
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No.1 • (Worse) Product and operational procedures are significantly influenced by design parameters and noise factors. • (Better) Design parameters and noise factors significantly influence product and operational procedures.
[Note 2.7] • Depending on the sentence‘s context, influenceand impactcan be used as alternatives to affectwhen the Chinese meaning is 影響.
No.2 • (Worse)More than one feature in most manufactured products is normally made in customer consideration. • (Better) A customer normally considers more than one feature in most manufactured products.
[Note 2.8] • To increase word variety in a sentence, normally, typicallyand generallycan be used as alternatives to usuallywhen the Chinese meaning is 通常/經常
No.3 • (Worse) Determination of the parameter settings should be made by the manufacturer. • (Better) The manufacturer should determine the parameter settings.
No.4 • (Worse) SN ratios are analyzed in the following section so that the optimal settings of the design parameters can be determined. • (Better) The following section analyzes SN ratios to determine the optimal settings of the design parameters.
No.5 • (Worse) A thorough review of the multi-response problems in the Taguchi method is made in Section 2. • (Better) Section 2 thoroughly reviews the multi-response problems in the Taguchi method.
No.6 • (Worse) Accurate measurement of a multi-response performance is required by the designer. • (Better) The designer must accurately measure a multi-response performance.
No.7 • (Worse) A series of steps is included in the proposed optimization procedure for when the Taguchi method is applied by an engineer. • (Better) The proposed optimization procedure includes a series of steps for when an engineer applies the Taguchi method.
[Note 2.9] • Depending on the sentence‘s context, apply/applied, employ/employed, and utilize/utilizedcan be used as alternatives to use/usedwhen the Chinese meaning is 使用/被使用.
No.8 • (Worse) Selections among some courses of action must be made by the user in the presence of multiple attributes. • (Better) The user must select a course of action in the presence of multiple attributes.
No.9 • (Worse) Subjective assessment of the importance of each response by the useris allowed by the proposed method. • (Better) The proposed method allows the user to subjectively assess the importance of each response.
No.10 • (Worse) Assessment of a desirability value is impossible by a user under some circumstances. • (Better) A user can not assess a desirability value under some circumstances.
No.11 • (Worse) Specification of suitable operations is required by a user so that the responses can be simultaneously optimized. • (Better)A user must specify suitable operations to simultaneously optimize the responses.
No.12 • (Worse)An adjustment in the temperature can be made by the engineer. • (Better)The engineer can adjust the temperature.
No.13 • (Worse) Relevant statistics are examined in the following section so that the underlying factors can be assessed. • (Better) The following section examines relevant statistics to assess the underlying factors.
[Note 2.10] • Depending on the sentence‘s context, examines, investigates, exploresand elucidatescan be used as alternatives to studieswhen the Chinese meaning is 研讀.
No.14 • (Worse) A detailed description of the economic situation is made in Section 2. • (Better) Section 2 describes the economic situation in detail.
No.15 • (Worse)Objective assessment of the workplace is required by the supervisor. • (Better) The supervisor must objectively assess the workplace.