记叙文

1. 记叙文 --期中书面表达分析

2. 平均分17.19 • 最高分23分（张彬豪）

3. 试题 请以“One thing I’m satisfied with” 为题，用英语写一篇100-120个词的短文，记述一件你自己认为满意的事情。要求如下： 1 记述事情经过 2 简要说明你感到的满意的原因或从中得到的启示。 注意： 文章的标题已给出（不计入词数）

4. I still remember the day when I took part in the 5000-meter race. It was a Friday afternoon. I felt tired because of the 1500-meter race which I joined in on Thursday. Worse still, the ground was wet after a light rain. Every player was well-prepared including me. Every player rushed out without delay except me. I ran very slowly as if I walked. I was the last one. I couldn’t help crying. But every classmate thought I was great. Although I was the last one, I am satisfied with it. From where I stand, as long as you try your best, the result is not important. 赵忠义

5. Tip 1 使用副词来修饰事件、动作或心情(adv.) Para. 1 • My mother had just died from cancer, and I was shocked. But actually I had never cared much for her. On the way to the funeral(葬礼)suddenly my car broke down. I checked and found my tire（轮胎）was flat. Unfortunately, I didn’t have a spare one. Worse still, it began to rain. I quickly jumped back into my car, and just sat there crying to myself sadly. • My mother had just died from cancer, and I was shocked. But I had never cared much for her. On the way to the funeral(葬礼)my car broke down. I checked and found my tire（轮胎）was flat. I didn’t have a spare one. Worse still, it began to rain. I jumped back into my car, and just sat there crying to myself.

6. I still remember the day when I took part in the 5000-meter race. It was a Friday afternoon. , I felt tired because of the 1500-meter race which I joined in on Thursday. Worse still, the ground was wet after a light rain. • Every player was well-prepared including me. Every player rushed out without delay except me. I ran very slowly as if I walked. I was the last one. I couldn’t help crying. But every classmate thought I was great.

7. Tip 2 使用表达时间的词、词组、句式(time) Para. 2-4 yesterday at first, earlier Before the match,… meanwhile， during… On hearing the news,… On our arrival, I … When I was on the way to school, I witnessed an accident. 在去学校时，我目击了一场事故。 The little girl burst out crying the moment she saw her mother. 这小女孩一见到她妈妈就哭了。 then, finally, After the funeral,… later, in the end

8. Tip 2 使用表达时间的词、词组、句式(time) When standing at the starting line, every player was well-prepared including me. every player rushed out without delay except me. I ran very slowly as if I walked. I was the last one. I couldn’t help crying. But every classmate thought I was great. On hearing the gun , During the race , The moment I finished the race,

9. When standing at the starting line, On hearing the gun , every player was well-prepared including me. every player rushed out without delay except me. I ran very slowly as if I walked. I was the last one. I couldn’t help crying. But every classmate thought I was great. During the race , The moment I finished the race, Although I was the last one, I am satisfied with it. From where I stand, as long as you try your best, the result is not important.

10. Tip 3 使用具体的细节描写 (detail) Para. 2-4 • I asked her for her name and number and thanked her for her trouble, feeling a tear roll down my cheek, not for my mother, but for the kindness of the stranger I had just met. • I was so shocked that I didn’t talk for a minute or two.

11. During the race, I ran very slowly as if I walked . . I was the last one but . leg, body, breath, Feeling， thought

12. summary Tip 1 使用副词来修饰事件、动作或心情（adv.） Tip 2 使用表达时间的词、词组、句式(time) Tip 3 使用具体的细节描写(detail)

13. consolidation • One Thing I’m satisfied with • I (adv) remember what happened on that sunny afternoon. We were about to leave the shop center (突然听到一个小女孩的哭声). It seemed as if she was lost. We (adv) came up to her and (adv) asked her why she cried. According to what she said, we knew that she went shopping with her mother, but got lost because it was too crowded. (在和朋友讨论了之后) ,we made up our mind to give a hand. We took the girl to her home.(用细节改编 ) and her mother was very grateful to us. At that moment, we felt .（用细节改编） • Helping other is a great thing. You must do your best to help others and share your love. In order for us to be truly happy and useful to world, we all must love others and help others. • （潘枫余）

14. Homework • Polish your article and hand it in tomorrow.