Wednesday, October 24 Wr iting Workshop Day! Please have your QW out to work on.

1. Wednesday, October 24 Writing Workshop Day! Please have your QW out to work on. Due Date Reminders: Mon. Oct. 29 - grammar quiz (review Fri.) Weds. Oct. 31 - Writing Workshop & QWs Mon. Nov. 5 - Reading Workshop (book project)

2. WRITING WORKSHOP 1. Do the quick writes each day they are assigned! 2. REVISIONS! *Keep them & attach them, this is where all your points are earned! *Revising & editing are different! *Highlight your revisions for easy identification. 3. WRITER'S CRAFT *points for figurative language (similes & metaphors) *imagery (5 senses - show, don't tell) *other literary devices (symbolism, foreshadowing,etc.) 4. Final copy should be typed & publishable.

3. ·Writing Workshop - due Weds. Oct. 31 o Must keep ALL stages of drafts (even if they’re messy) - if you don’t turn these in you have no evidence that you worked on your original & your score will suffer! o Don’t forget the reflection journal! o Make your final piece look ready for publishing - you can include graphics or artwork if you would like.

4. Making Your QW Better with Brush Strokes

5. 1. Paint with a PARTICIPLE Look at your QW & find a place to: Participle = "ing" word * add it on to the beginning or the end of a sentence to paint a better picture Original The diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey. Better with a Participle Hissing, slithering, and coiling, the diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.

6. 2. Paint with an ABSOLUTE Look at your QW & find a place to: Absolute = noun + "ing" particple Original The mountain climber edged along the cliff. Better with an Absolute Hands shaking, feet trembling, the mountain climber edged along the cliff. Feet trembling on the snow-covered rocks, the mountain climber edged along the cliff.

7. 3. Paint with an APPOSITIVE Look at your QW & find a place to: Appositive = noun or pronoun that identifies or renames a noun Original Mrs. Loomer hopes to help you improve your writing this year. Better with an Appositive Mrs. Loomer, a stellar teacher, hopes to help you improve your writing this year.

8. 4. Paint with ADJECTIVES OUT OF ORDER Look at your QW & find a place to: Adjective = describes a person, place, or thing (Don't put too many in a row!) Original The large, red-eyed, angry bull charged the intruder. Better with Adjectives out of Order The large bull, red-eyed and angry, charged the intruder.

9. 5. Paint with ACTION VERBS Look at your QW & find a place to: Action Verbs = verbs that are not "is," "was," "were," or any other forms of "be" Original The gravel road was on the left side of the barn. The grocery store was robbed by two armed men. Better with Action Verbs The gravel road curled around the left side of the barn. Two armed men robbed the grocery store.

11. Brooklyn Bridge By Caroline Loomer A glowing golden morning following a day of torturous rain. Brilliant shallow puddles reflect the light like diamonds. We marvel at its cathedral peaks together, hand in hand. We stroll, make new plans, laugh. The comfort of five married years pads the souls of our feet as we let bikers, runners, and hurried pedestrians buzz by. I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling - or are those your eyes? You indulge your affinity for photography - your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objects into worthy subjects - two leaves embrace as they ease through a puddle, algae topped ponds sheathed in a skyscraper sky, me. We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is much to appreciate. Miles of glistening cable spun tightly and strung like harp strings, a song of support vibrating from their chords. The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nestled together; its smooth silhouette the result of weathering wayward storms. The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers. The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all. My message to you? Keep this memory tucked in your back pocket to protect you when storm threatens to unravel the cable. Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when it seems like dreams teter on the pier. And most importantly, remember Brooklyn Bridge By Caroline Loomer A warm sunny morning following a day of torturous rain. Brilliant shallow puddles reflect the light like diamonds. We marvel at its cathedral peaks together, hand in hand. We stroll, make new plans, laugh. The comfort of five married years pads the souls of our feet as we let bikers, runners, and other hurried pedestrians rush by. I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling - or are those your eyes? You indulge your affinity for photography - your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objects into worthy subjects - the leaves gliding in the puddle, the ? central park, me. We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is much to appreciate. Miles of glistening cable weave together - like our lives - to form an inseparable web of strength. The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nuzzled together, the smooth silhouette a result of weathering wayward storms. The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers. The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all. My message to you? Keep this memory tucked in your back pocket for those days you sense the storm might unravel the cable. Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when it seems like our dreams teter on the pier. And most importantly, remember VERSION 1 VERSION 2

12. VERSION 4 Brooklyn Bridge By Caroline Loomer A glowing golden morning warmly greets us, absorbs the drenching downpour until all that remains are brilliant shallow puddles that reflect the light like diamonds. We marvel at its cathedral peaks together, hand in hand. We stroll, make new plans, laugh. The comfort of five married years pads the souls of our feet as we let bikers, runners, and hurried pedestrians buzz by. I take in the waters, greenish-blue and fresh and sparkling - mirrors of your eyes. You indulge your pleasure of photography - your sensitive eyes transform the most unexpected objects into worthy subjects - two leaves embrace as they ease through a puddle, skyscraper skies hug an algae topped pond, me. We take our time, enjoy each other - the bridge is long and there is so much to appreciate. Miles of glistening cable spun tightly and strung like harp strings, a song of support vibrating from their chords. The stone masonry, perfectly shaped and nestled together; its smooth silhouette the result of weathering wayward storms. The expanse of the Manhattan skyline, its breadth a source of optimism and possibility for all dreamers. The merging of grace and muscle - a message for all. My message to you? Seek shelter in the strength of the overpass to protect you when storms threaten to silence your song. Absorb the skyline for safekeeping when dreams teter on the pier. And most importantly, believe the bridge will take us where we need to be, for we have put all we have into it. That is enough.