We’re tough. We’re strong. We can endure anything.

1. We’re tough. We’re strong. We can endure anything.

2. 高 三 英 语 写 作 指 导 江苏省靖江高级中学 宋海英

3. Tasks • To learn about some requirements for an excellent composition • To know how to write a good open-ending part • To know how to write a good essay

4. 五档作文评分标准: • 完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。 • 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 • 语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 • 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 • 完全达到预期的写作目的。

5. Main points of a beautiful composition: • 1. 要点齐全 • 2. 词句优美 • 3. 开放部分思想深刻，内容丰富 • 4. 过渡恰当 • 5. 书写认真

6. Steps of writing a composition: • 1 审题 体裁，人称，时态； 篇章框架 • 2 写点 6-10个得分点，千万不可遗漏； 写出动词短语 • 3 连词成句，连句成文 • 4 用短文改错的精神修改作文 疏于审题，随意动笔，涂改严重，等于自杀

10. How to write good sentences 1. 使用较高级词汇 She doesn’t like sports. She cares nothing for sports. When he heard she died, he went pale with sorrow. At the news of her death, he went pale with sorrow. She can’t pronounce the word correctly. She has difficulty in pronouncing the word.

11. 2. 运用较复杂结构：被动语态，非谓语动词，从句，倒装句，强调句，虚拟语气等 People suggest that the conference be put off. 被动语态 It is suggested that the conference be put off. Shewalked out of the room and many students followed her. 非谓语动词 Followed by many students, she walked out of the room To his surprise, the little girl knew so many things. What surprised him was that the little girl knew so many things. 从句

12. The couple was so curious about wild plants that they decided to travel to the forest. 倒装 So curious was the couple about wild plants that they decided to travel to the forest. Regular radio broadcasts began in 1920. It was not until in 1920 that regular radio broadcasts began. 强调句 Many lives were saved because there were the efforts of firefighters. 虚拟语气 But for the efforts of firefighters, many lives would not have been saved.

13. How to use linking words 表示平行、对等或选择关系 and, as well as, together with, not only…but also... 表示转折关系 but, however, in spite of, although, otherwise, while 表示对比关系 on the contrary, instead of, on one hand…on the other hand... 表示因果关系 so, therefore, as a result (of), because, owing to, due to, thanks to.

14. How to use linking words 表示时间、顺序关系 first, second …, then, next, finally, for one thing ... for another, in the end, 表示递进、强调关系 besides, what’s more, in addition, worse still, above all 表示解释、说明关系 such as, for example, for instance, in other words, and so on 表示结论 in short, in brief, in a word, in general, on the whole, in conclusion

15. What is an open-ending？ To make comments To give suggestions To continue a story

16. 得分亮点 江苏省考试说明书面表达样题 • 也就是要干什么，用什么措施来解决以上问题

17. Open-ending： Yet problems have appeared as well. Water and air have been polluted. Too much energy has been wasted. Traffic Jams often happen during the rush hours. Facing the problem, our city government has decided to take some measures according to the 11th Five-Year Plan. Some factories which cause serious pollution will be closed. More trees and flowers will be plantedandmore roads will be built or widened. 尽量一一对应

18. How to write open-endings 1. 要紧扣主题，首尾呼应，使文章有一定的完整性。 2. 思想健康，积极向上。“建议”和“意见”不要混淆。 3. 逻辑清晰，用英语进行思维, 语言准确。 4. 字数要合理，一般是五句话，50个词左右，过多了显得罗嗦，太少了又无法表明意思。

19. 严重偏题

20. 不知所云

21. 观点不明

22. 有观点, 有思想

23. An example 假如你是高中三年级的学生张明,在学校组织了一项“有烦恼向谁说”的调查活动。请用英语给校报编辑写一封信，反映相关情况。内容包括：调查结果（如图所示）、持相应想法的理由及你对调查结果的建议、看法。

24. 61% turning to friends and schoolmates 同龄人容易交流和理解 The majority of the students surveyed select their friends or schoolmates as their ideal listeners when they have troubles and want to getawayfrom them.

25. 22% going to teachers and parents 阅历丰富,有生活和教育经验 Another 22% choose their teachers and parents to talkto.

26. 17% keeping to themselves 不愿与别人说自己的事或难以与别人沟通 There are 17% who don’t share their troubles at all. They either think that their troubles are none of others’ business or find it hard to communicate with others.

27. 假如你是高中三年级的学生张明,在学校组织了一项“有烦恼向谁说”的调查活动。请用英语给校报编辑写一封信，反映相关情况。内容包括：调查结果（如图所示）、持相应想法的理由及你对调查结果的建议、看法。假如你是高中三年级的学生张明,在学校组织了一项“有烦恼向谁说”的调查活动。请用英语给校报编辑写一封信，反映相关情况。内容包括：调查结果（如图所示）、持相应想法的理由及你对调查结果的建议、看法。

28. A sample From my point of view, students should share their troubles with their friends and schoolmates since they are ofthesameage and can understand each other well. Besides, they can also benefitfrom turning to their teachers and parents who should carefor teenagers and help them in their life and studies. However, if one shuts himself away from others, he will find he has more and more troubles.

29. Practice 人类已经进入一个崭新的世纪，不同的人有不同的幸福感。某期刊正在中学生中进行幸福感的调查，请你根据下表的提示，用英语写一篇标题为“Happiness”的短文，表达自己的观点。 注意：1、不能照抄表中的内容； 2、注意行文流畅； 3、必须阐明自己的观点或看法； 4、词数150左右。

30. How to express your ideas or make your comments: I agree/disagree that… I think/don’t think it’s proper to… In my opinion, … From my point of view, … So far as I’m concerned, …

31. Happiness Happiness means different things to different people.For example, some students believe that if they have a lot of money or large possessions, they will be happy. They believe that they will be able to do anything they want to if they have much money. Some students think that they should be in good health, and do whatever they like. Many students wish to have much wealth from their parents. In this way, they don’t have to work hard, and they can own everything.

32. Asample I don’t quite agree with the above points. I don’t think money means happiness. We can’t buy everything with money, such as health, love and knowledge. I value knowledge, which makes me happy, for I can make great contributions to our society with knowledge. Although different people value happiness differently, my “wealth” of happiness is in my study.

33. Homework 假设你是李华。最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论太空探险的意义。以下是你所在班级的讨论情况。请你用150字左右给该报写一封信，客观地介绍讨论结果，并简要地表达你自己的观点。

34. Thank you!