Objective: To plan your descriptive writing controlled assessment

1. Objective: To plan your descriptive writing controlled assessment • Identifying our current grade and how we will take the next step • Marking a piece of work and feeding back to the student • Selecting our titles and unpicking the scenes for ourselves

2. What’s the next step? • Look at ALL your feedback from me this year • Using the purple pen, answer this question: based on your targets, how will you guarantee that you achieve your target grade in your descriptive writing? CHALLENGE: analyse your target grade on the marksheet- where’s your area of weakness?

3. Big Picture We are working on our descriptive writing skills • There are a number of key skills we need to develop • Using the senses • Similes and Personification • Describing feelings • Zooming in and out of a scene: planning • Using a variety of sentences

4. TASK: What grade would you give it? Highlight the good points in blue and the bad points in red Feed back to the student at the end using the DIY LEARNING wall New title: Bringing a Scene to Life You have been given one of two pieces of description. These are real pieces of work from the coursework titles that you will be working with!

5. Your titles (four parasat least) • The scene in a busy supermarket • The scene in a railway or bus station • The scene at a funfair • The scene on a beach in the summer • The scene in a school playground at the beginning of the morning

6. Vocabulary? Smells? Sounds? Zooming Out? Feelings? Small details? Openers? Personification? Metaphors? Sights?

7. Stage 1:

9. Stage 2: Use the grid method to pick out the four key aspects you want to describe Stage 3: With the person next to you, write the topic sentence of each paragraph

10. Home Learning • Due thursday