English 105, Dec 9, 2010

1. Heald College Teri Tosspon English 105, Dec 9, 2010

2. Respond to ONE of the articles you read • 50 minutes to write, worth 80 points • 2-3 pages long • Address ALL of these questions • Summarize (tell what happened) • What kind of intro (look at your textbook)? • What was the main point? • How did the author support his/her point? • Write (at least 2 paragraphs) about what YOU think: did you like it? Was it a powerful story? Did it remind you of anything? Can compare to others.

3. Chapter 3: Body Paragraphs • In groups of 3-4, you will be assigned to create a graphic or symbol to represent one of the following areas: • Paragraph Development • Paragraph Length • Paragraph Unity • Paragraph Coherence • Paragraph Sequence • Transitions

4. Body Paragraphs (pg 47 –both books) • Planning • Thesis essay map: can include a basic “map” in your introduction paragraph

5. The Topic Sentence (pg 50) • Must support the THESIS of the paper • The most GENERAL sentence in your paragraph • Announces what your paragraph will be about

6. Focusing/Placing your Topic Sentence (pg 53 –both books) • Focus! Revise so they are specific and • Unfocused: too many people treat animals badly in experiments. • Focused: The cosmetic industry often harms animals in unnecessary experiments. • Placing your sentence • Put it where it FEELS natural • Can go 1st in paragraph, 2nd, or even last.

7. Paragraph Development(pg 59 new, 58 old) • Include enough supporting evidence to make readers understand the topic • Make the infoclear and specific • Avoid vaguegeneralities and repetitious ideas

8. Paragraph Length(pg 62 new, 61 old) • Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting • Avoid the one- or two-sentence paragraph • Divide longish paragraphs at a logical point; use transitional phrases

9. Paragraph Coherence(pg 65 new, 64 old) • Recognizable order • Time, space, deductive, inductive • Use transitional words/phrases • Give examples • Comparison/Contrast • Sequence • Results • Repeat key words (substitute pronouns too) • Avoid whiplash – maintain coherence!

10. Sequence and Transitions(pg 77 new, 77 old) • Sequence • Consider logic and effect • Transitions • Use to link paragraphs and/or ideas • Vary the type and placement to avoid boredom

11. Fragments (pg 564, Old: 536) • A complete sentence requires: • Subject: someone or something doing the action • Verb: the action • Complete thought • How can you check? • Add the words “It is true that…” before your sentence. Fragments won’t make sense • Intentional fragments • used for emphasis or to convey a tone. Francis named her new mutt Super Dog because he could leap fences in a single bound. Subject Verb

12. Practice Fragments (565 B, 537B) 1. According to Lawrence M. Ausbel, author of “Credit Cards,” in the McGraw-hill Encyclopedia of Economics, the idea of a credit card first appeared in 1887. B. 1. The idea of a credit card first appeared in 1887. According to Lawrence M. Ausbel, author of “Credit Cards,” in the McGraw-hill Encyclopedia of Economics. 2. Originally an imaginary concept in a futurist novel by Edward Bellamy. The card allowed characters to charge against future earnings. 3. Around the turn of the twentieth century some American stores issued paper or metal “shoppers’ plates.” Although they were only used by retailers to identify their credit customers. 2. Originally an imaginary concept in a futurist novel by Edward Bellamy, the card allowed characters to charge against future earnings. 3. Around the turn of the twentieth century, some American stores issued paper or metal “shoppers’ plates,” although they were only used by retailers to identify their credit customers.

13. Practice Fragments (565 B, 537B) 4. The first real credit card was issued in 1947 by a New York bank and was a success, despite the fact that customers could charge purchased only in a two-block area in Brooklyn. 4. The first real credit card was issued in 1947 by a New York bank and was a success. Despite the fact that customers could charge purchased only in a two-block area in Brooklyn. 5. Travel and entertainment cards soon appeared that allowed customers to charge items and services across the country. For example, the American Express card in 1958 and Carte Blanche in 1959. 5. Travel and entertainment cards soon appeared, including the American Express card in 1958 and Carte Blanche in 1959, that allowed customers to charge items and services across the country.

14. Run-on (or Fused) Sentence (566 new, 538 old) • Run on= 2 sentences together w/out any punctuation. • Use a period • Use a semicolon • Use a comma + coordinating conjunction (FANBOYS) • Inserting a comma only makes the sentence a different kind of fragment: a comma splice! • Instead you need to fix it through a method above. Subject Verb The indicted police chief submitted his resignation the mayor accepted it gratefully. Subject Verb Subject Verb Victoria Woodhull was the first American woman to run for the presidency, she was defeated in 1872 by Ulysses S. Grant.

15. Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B) 1. My mother is very politically conservative; she’s written in King George III for president in the last two elections. 1. My mother is very politically conservative, she’s written in King George III for president in the last two elections. 2. Mary Lou decided not to eat the alphabet soup the letters spelled out “botulism.” 3. A dried gourd containing seeds probably functioned as the first baby rattle, ancient Egyptian wall paintings show babies with such gourds clutched in their fingers. 2. Mary Lou decided not to eat the alphabet soup because the letters spelled out “botulism.” 3. A dried gourd containing seeds probably functioned as the first baby rattle. Ancient Egyptian wall paintings show babies with such gourds clutched in their fingers.

16. Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B) 4. Opportunists who came to the South after the Civil War were often called “carpetbaggers,” because they carried their belongings in cheaply produced travel bags made of Belgian carpet. 4. Opportunists who came to the South after the Civil War were often called “carpetbaggers,” they carried their belongings in cheaply produced travel bags made of Belgian carpet. 5. A friend of mine offers a good definition of nasty theater critics on opening night , according to him, they’re the people who cant wait to stone the first cast. 6. When English scientist James Smithson died in 1829 he willed his entire fortune to the United States to establish a foundation for knowledge, that’s how the Smithsonian Institution was started. 5. A friend of mine offers a good definition of nasty theater critics on opening night . According to him, they’re the people who cant wait to stone the first cast. 6. The Smithsonian Institution was started when English scientist James Smithson died in 1829 he willed his entire fortune to the United States to establish a foundation for knowledge.

17. Run On / Splices (568 B, 540B) 7. The word “jack-o’-lantern” may have come from the legend of Irish Jack. A mean old man in life, he was condemned after death to wander the earth carrying a hollow turnip with a lump of burning coal inside. 8. People forget how large the blue whale is. It has a heart as large as a Volkswagon Beetle and can hold an elephant on its tongue. 9. Correct! 10. The famous Eiffel Tower, built for the 1889 Paris Exposition, has inspired many crazy stunts: in 1891, SilvainDomon climbed the 363 steps on stilts.

18. Homework: • Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5)

19. Reviewing Chapter 20– Identify Fragment or Run-On Sentence Baseball

20. Quick review • To be a complete sentence- • Subject • Verb • Express a complete thought • Watch for words like “although” and “because”! Run on = combined incorrectly linked w/ only a comma = comma splice

21. Baseball • Teams stand in “batting order” in the dugout (each team should have a row). • Answer the questions on the worksheet to “hit” • A Single – identify if it is a Fragment (F), Run On (R) or Sentence (S) (take 1 base) • A Double– correct the F or R (2 bases) • 2nd Inning Home Run : identify Subject AND Verb • Strike Out: incorrectly identify (F/R/S or Subject/Verb), incorrectly correct the sentence.

22. Process Analysis (Bottom of 209- new; 197- old) • Giving directions (not informing)

23. Problems to avoid • Include a thesis! • What is your topic and what are you going to tell us about it? • Pay special attention to the conclusion • Tell us the significance, or end with a story – just don’t abruptly end!

24. Partner Up: Read! To Bid the World farewell Preparing for the Job Interview Pg 227 (old 212) Answer questions 1-10 • Pg 218 (old: 207) • Answer questions 1-10 • Assign 1 person to each story (if you finish early, answer your questions then begin reading your partner’s story). • Each of you answer 1-10 (end of your story0 on your own paper. • Then, talk through your answers. • Each of you write your own response: • How are these articles similar? • How are they different? • What do you think about them (like/dislike, understood/didn’t)?

25. Choose your topic & Pre-Write • Pg 212 (old: pg 200) • Once you’ve chosen a topic, use the Process Analysis Topic Starter • Rough Draft (2 copies) due 12/16/2010 • @ beginning of class next week • Final draft due 01/06/2011 • (though I would appreciate it via email by 01/01/2011

26. Homework • Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5) • Write first draft – Process Analysis Essay (50 points, 2 copies due @ beginning of next week) • Write a reflection/journal about anything you want (1-2 pages)