How can I make sure the evidence in my persuasive essay makes my point?

How can I make sure the evidence in my persuasive essay makes my point?

In this lesson you will learn how to revise your persuasive essay by telling the reader how the evidence proves your point.

Evidence is clear to you, but not to the reader. …and that’s why turtles are awesome pets! Huh?

Let’s Review Let’s Review Writing Process 1 2 3 Generate Ideas Write Drafts Revise & Edit

Let’s Review Let’s Review Revise: To improve your writing by making changes as you get new ideas. The dog ran out of the yard yesterday. Yesterday, the sneaky dog scurried out of the yard.

Core Lesson Let’s • Identify the topic sentences. • Reread the paragraphs and ask yourself, “ Do I need to explain my evidence?” • 3. Add sentences which show how your evidence proves the topic sentence.

Core Lesson Identify the topic sentences. Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals..

Core Lesson 2. Reread the paragraphs and ask yourself, “Do I need to explain my evidence?” Readers may not understand what I mean when I say “breed”. • Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species.

Core Lesson 3. Add sentences which show how your evidence proves the topic sentence. Try… “This shows…” “I think…” “You can tell…” “Therefore…” How can I add more to prove my point?

Core Lesson Identify the topic sentences. Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals..

Core Lesson Readers may not understand what I mean by “breed”. 2 • Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species

Core Lesson 3 • Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. • Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. This shows zoos help to make sure new generations of animals are around for years.

Core Lesson 1 Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals..

Scientists do research that can be very expensive, so I’ll explain that. Core Lesson 2 Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies.

Core Lesson 3 Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. I think that many scientists would be unable to do their expensive research without money from zoos.

Core Lesson 1 Some species are endangered and need to be protected. There are hundreds of species around the world that are endangered. Once a species becomes extinct, it is gone forever. Therefore, zoos breed and raise babies of endangered species. Scientists at zoos learn new information about animals. There are many species that have never been studied in the wild. Scientists study animals in zoos to learn how to help them in the wild. The money that people spend at zoos helps the scientists pay for their studies. • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals.

Core Lesson I might want to add a sentence about “conservation”. 2 • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals.

Core Lesson • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. 3 • Conservation means saving and protecting nature. • Zoos teach kids about the importance of conservation. When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals. • When kids go to the zoo, they become curious about the animals they discover. Kids will think about why conserving animal habitats is important. Some kids that live the city will only get a chance to experience nature at a zoo. Hopefully, many kids will decide to become scientists and protect animals.

Core Lesson Let’s • Identify the topic sentences. • Reread the paragraphs and ask yourself, “Do I need to explain my evidence?” • 3. Add sentences which show how your evidence proves the topic sentence.

In this lesson you learned how to conclude your persuasive opinion essay by summarizing your key points and telling your reader to take action.

Guided Practice Let’s Review Choose a piece of persuasive writing from your notebook or writing folder. Add a “plea”, or ask the reader to do something. (Try beginning with “please”.) 3. Restate your thesis at the end of your essay. You try it!

Practice working with a partner to review each other’s writing: • How do you feel after reading your partner’s essay? • Does your partner’s essay make a “plea”?

Quick Quiz Let’s Review Write a conclusion to go with the following thesis statements. • Dolphins do not belong in aquariums because they need open water to swim. • Soda is unhealthy for kids and should be banned from all schools.

How can I make sure the evidence in my persuasive essay makes my point?