Complete the SKILLS TRACKER

1. Complete the SKILLS TRACKER  Highlight the emoji which best reflects the way you feel about each skill  Write the title: Language Paper 1 Practice  Stick in the question paper and Source A which goes with it.

2. LANGUAGE PAPER 1: REVISION

3. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Question 1 (AO1, 4 marks, 5mins) Explicit information Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale THE BASICS • The first question is designed to be straight forward. • You gain one mark for each piece of correct information you select from the text. • You are directed towards a specific part of the text using line numbers so only select information from these lines. • You may find more than four pieces of information – for this question any four correct pieces will gain you marks. • The information you will be asked to find for this question is likely to be explicit – in other words, clearly stated in the text.

4. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Question 1 (AO1, 4 marks, 5mins) Explicit information Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale ‘The Street of the Blank Wall’ by Jerome. K Jerome This is an extract from a short story, published in 1906…... INTRODUCTION TO THE EXTRACT • Read the steer – what do you learn about the extract? Highlight the key information to remember. • Read the extract carefully – what happens? Question 1 (AO1, 4 marks, 5mins): Read again the first part of the source, lines 1-8. • List four things we learn from this part of the text about the street[4 marks] • BUG the question • Box the command word • Underline the key words • Glance at the marks.

5. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE The BIG Picture: Developing reading analysis skills for Section A of Language Paper 1 in preparation for Mock Exams. Learning Objective: To identify, explain, comment and analyse language with relevant quotations and using appropriate terminology (AO2). Level 4 (BAND 7 , 8 and 9): ‘Perceptive and Detailed’ I can show a detailed and perceptive analysis of a writer’s choice of language; selecting judicious quotations and I use sophisticated subject terminology accurately. Level 3 (BAND 5 and 6): ‘Clear and Relevant’ I can clearly explain the effects of the writer’s choice of language. I can select a range of relevant quotations. I can use subject terminology accurately. Level 2 (BAND 3 and 4): ‘Some and Attempts’ I can identify and comment on features of language .I select some relevant quotations. I use some appropriate terminology , not always appropriately.

6. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE THE BASICS Question 2 is more demanding than question 1. This questions asks you how the writer uses language for effect. Key skills you will need to show: • Selecting relevant examples of words and phrases, language features and techniques. • Identifying effective sentence forms. • Commenting on the above and analysing them. LANGUAGE : verb, adjectives, adverbs, simile, metaphor, personification, pathetic fallacy, repetition, imagery, alliteration, juxtaposition, semantic fields, connotations, short sentences/long sentences.

7. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE • BUG the question • Box the command word • Underline the key words • Glance at the marks. QUESTION 2:  Look in detail at this extract from lines 9 to 20 of the source:  How does the writer use language here to create a mysterious atmosphere?  You could include the writer’s choice of: • Words and phrases • Language devices and techniques • Sentence forms [8 marks] • STEP 1: Read the specified extract. • STEP 2: Highlight any words, phrases, techniques, sentence forms and note the terminology. • STEP 3: Add notes that explore the effect of the language: what does it suggest about the atmosphere? How does it make you feel? What do you think Jerome intended here? • SUPPORT: Use the boxes around the extract to guide your response. • CHALLENGE: Add your own ideas to the ones identified for you.

8. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE The street curved to the right, ending in an open space through which passed a canal beneath a low arched bridge, There were still the same quiet houses behind their small gardens, and I watched for a while the lamplighter picking out the shape of the canal, that widened just above the bridge into a lake with an island in the middle. After that I must have wandered in a circle, for later on I found myself back in the same spot, though I do not suppose I had passed a dozen people on my way; and then I set to work to find my way back to Paddington. I thought I had taken the road by which I had come, but the half light must have deceived me. Not that it mattered. They had a lurking mystery about them, these silent streets with their suggestion of hushed movement behind drawn curtains, of whispered voices behind flimsy walls. Occasionally there would escape the sound of laughter, suddenly stifled as it seemed, and once the sudden cry of a child. • Do any of the words or phrases link? How and why? • What impression do we get of the place? • How do we think? • What do we feel? • What do we imagine?

9. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall WORD BANK: Silence Hiding Secretive Gloomy Suspicious Sinister Suffering Sorrow Pain Restriction Isolated Lonely Threat Guilt Vulnerability x3 • Point/Evidence: The atmosphere is presented as…. / Jerome uses...... / The atmosphere is conveyed to be..... • Explanation: This indicates that … / This implies that … /The writer is… / This creates the impression that…/ This suggests… • Extra Explanation: Also, / Furthermore / Additionally / Similarly, / On the other hand • Word/Phrases: The verb / noun / adjective ’….’ suggests / The phrase, ‘..’ implies…. • Language Features: The simile…... is used to… / Jerome uses the verb to… • Sentence Analysis: This use of a simple sentence is effective because…. / The use of long descriptive sentences could symbolise… • Effect: The effect on the reader is that… / This has an effect on the reader because … / This is an effective method because… Level 4 (BAND 7 , 8 and 9): ‘Perceptive and Detailed’ I can show a detailed and perceptive analysis of a writer’s choice of language; selecting judicious quotations and I use sophisticated subject terminology accurately..

10. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) EXAMPLE: Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall WORD BANK: Silence Hiding Secretive Gloomy Suspicious Sinister Suffering Sorrow Pain Restriction Isolated Lonely Threat Guilt Vulnerability The atmosphere is presented as mysterious because of how quiet the place seems.This is conveyed through the writer’s use of adjectivessuch as ‘hushed’ and ‘stifled’. The adjective ‘stifled’ describes the way the sudden child’s cry was restricted, creating the idea that any disturbance or noise would be stopped. Therefore the reader begins to question why people are being controlled in this way, almost as if they are being trapped. The writer also creates a mysterious atmosphere through language which implies trickery: the narrator feels like the ‘half-light’ has ‘deceived’ him. The use of the verb ‘deceived’ is effective because it created the impression that the light is deliberately misleading him and therefore adds to the sense of suspicion. Furthermore, the use of the word ‘half-light’ helps the reader to imagine the dim light and it creates a gloomy atmosphere where anything could be hiding Level 4 (BAND 7 , 8 and 9): ‘Perceptive and Detailed’ I can show a detailed and perceptive analysis of a writer’s choice of language; selecting judicious quotations and I use sophisticated subject terminology accurately..

11. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE Strength Weakness and Next Steps

12. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Bank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 2 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF LANGUAGE RESPOND TO YOUR PARTNER’S FEEDBACK Add to your response, with purple pen, to show that you have acted on their advice and therefore are improving your work and making progress. SUPPORT: use your earlier notes to help you or discuss with your partner. CHALLENGE: Try to make connections between a range of ideas in the extract specified OR add further layers of analysis to your explanations.

13. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE The BIG Picture: Developing reading analysis skills for Section A of Language Paper 1 in preparation for Mock Exams. Learning Objective: To identify, explain, comment and analyse structure with relevant quotations and using appropriate terminology (AO2). Level 4 (BAND 7 , 8 and 9): ‘Perceptive and Detailed’ I can show a detailed and perceptive analysis of a writer’s choice of structure; selecting judicious quotations and I use sophisticated subject terminology accurately. Level 3 (BAND 5 and 6): ‘Clear and Relevant’ I can clearly explain the effects of the writer’s choice of structure. I can select a range of relevant quotations. I can use subject terminology accurately. Level 2 (BAND 3 and 4): ‘Some and Attempts’ I can identify and comment on features of structure. I select some relevant quotations. I use some appropriate terminology , not always appropriately.

14. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE THE BASICS • Question 3 refers to the whole text • It assesses AO2 like question 2 but here focuses on how structure makes an impact on the reader • You might look at: • The sequence through the passage, such as: introduction, development, summary and conclusion, repetition, threads, patterns or motifs • Shifts in ideas and perspectives, such as: movement from big to small, place to place, outside to inside (and vice versa), narrative perspectives • Coherence, such as: connections and links across paragraphs, links within paragraphs, topic sentences STRUCTURE: Opening, ending, shift In perspective, zooming in on details, shifts from inside to outside/ shifts from outside to inside / gradually include more detail

15. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE Look at the whole of the source How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? [8 marks] You could write about: • What the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning • How and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops • Anything else that interests you as a reader. • STEP 1: Read the specified extract. • STEP 2: Highlight any devices and note the terminology. • STEP 3: Add notes that explore the effect of the structure: how does it interest you as a reader? How does it make you feel? What do you think Atwood intended here? • BUG the question • Box the command word • Underline the key words • Glance at the marks.

16. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? [8 marks] x3 • Point/Evidence (embedded): Firstly, Jerome has tried to interest the reader by…. • Basic explanation: This suggests / This implies / This demonstrates • Extended explanation: Also / Furthermore / Additionally • Effect: This makes the reader think / feel / imagine…… • Link to elsewhere in the extract: Throughout the extract… / This connects to later/earlier in the extract…

17. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE

18. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE Strength Weakness and Next Steps

19. Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Analyse the example response: What elements of the criteria have been met? COMPARE YOUR RESPONSE Start with an overview of the structure Specific effects on the reader related to the focus/zoom Link to whole text – needs to be developed

20. Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale TICK your strengths HIGHLIGHT any weaknesses ASSESS and EVALUATE your response

21. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE RESPOND TO YOUR PARTNER’S FEEDBACK Add to your response, with purple pen, to show that you have acted on their advice and therefore are improving your work and making progress. SUPPORT: use your earlier notes to help you or discuss with your partner. CHALLENGE: Try to make connections between a range of ideas in the extract specified OR add further layers of analysis to your explanations.

22. ‘I am Malala’ Extract Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 3 (AO2, 8 marks, 12mins) WRITER’S USE OF STRUCTURE • How has the writerstructured the text to interest the reader? • (8 marks) • You should write about: • What the writer focuses your attention on at the start (characters, setting, viewpoint) • What the writer shiftsfocus to and why • How the extractends (What is the effect of the short, isolated sentence at the end?)

23. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION Question 4: To what extent…. 20 marks / 25 minutes

24. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION The BIG Picture: Developing reading analysis skills for Section A of Language Paper 1 in preparation for Mock Exams. Learning Objective: To evaluate the effect of writers’ choices and comment, explain and analyse the effects of these choices using evidence to support ideas (AO4). Level 4 (BAND 7 , 8 and 9): ‘Perceptive and Detailed’ I can critically evaluate the effect of a range of writers’ choices, using a range of quotations in a critical, convincing and detailed way. I select a range of relevant quotations to validate (justify) my views. Level 3 (BAND 5 and 6): ‘Clear and Consistent’ I can clearly evaluate the text and explain the effect of writers’ methods, using some relevant quotations. I can clearly evaluate the text, offering clear examples from the text to support my views. Level 2 (BAND 3 and 4): ‘Some and Attempts’ I can attempt to show evaluative comment on the text. I can offer an example from the text to explain my views with at attempt to comment on writer’s methods and using some quotations.

25. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION THE BASICS Question 4 refers to a substantial part of the text and is worth 20 marks (twice the value of question 2 and 3 together) Timing is VERY important for this question • AO4 assesses your ability to evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. • This means that you will be asked to consider what the writer intended to achieve in the selected passage. then you need to say how far you feel he or she achieved it. • You must support your views with relevant quotation and references to the text. • TOP TIP • Question 4 asks for your opinion of the writer’s skill. • The passage will have been chosen because it is a skilful piece of writing. For this reason do not be too negative in your criticism: appreciate the writer’s skill.

26. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Read lines 15 to 32. Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION • Focus this part of your answer on the last part of the source, from line 21 to the end. • A student, having read this section of the text, said “The writer makes the woman’s appearance at the window very mysterious. • It makes me want to find out more about her”. • To what extent do you agree? • In your response you could: • Write about your own impression of the woman • at the window. • Evaluate how the writer has created these impressions. • Support your opinions with references to the text. • [20 marks] • BUG the question • Box the command word • Underline the key words • Glance at the marks. • STEP 1: Consider the statement. • STEP 2: Highlight ANYTHING that supports the statement. Add terminology. • STEP 3: Add notes that explore the effect of your choices and HOW they support the statement.

27. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION Read from lines 21 to the end FOCUS: the woman’s appearance at the window is mysterious It makes me want to find out more about her. Highlight phrases which create mystery regarding the woman: LANGUAGE and STRUCTURE It was in a short street of semi-detached villas facing a high blank wall that, as I passed, I saw a blind move half-way up, revealing a woman’s face. A gas lamp, the only one the street possessed, was nearly opposite. I thought at first it was the face of a girl, and then, as I looked again, it might have been the face of an old woman. One could not distinguish the colouring. In any case, the cold, blue gaslight would have made it seem pallid. The remarkable feature was the eyes. It might have been, of course, that they alone caught the light and held it, rendering them uncannily large and brilliant. Or it might have been that the rest of the face was small and delicate, out of all proportion to them. She may have seen me, for the blind was drawn down again, and I passed on.

28. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION FOCUS: the woman’s appearance at the window is mysterious It makes me want to find out more about her. There was no particular reason why, but the incident lingered with me. The sudden raising of the blind, as of the curtain of some small theatre, the barely furnished room coming dimly into view, and the woman standing there, close to the footlights, as to my fancy it seemed. And then the sudden ringing down of the curtain before the play had begun. I turned at the corner of the street. The blind had been drawn up again, and I saw again the slight, girlish figure silhouetted against the side panes of the bow window. At the same moment a man knocked up against me. It was not his fault. I had stopped abruptly, not giving him time to avoid me. We both apologised, blaming the darkness. It may have been my fancy, but I had the feeling that, instead of going on his way, he had turned and was following me. I waited till the next corner, and then swung round on my heel. But there was no sign of him, and after a while I found myself back in the Edgware Road.

29. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION What’s in the mark scheme? • The woman is mysterious • We want to find out more • The way the woman opens and closes the blinds creates mystery – we only get small glimpses of her (ambiguity, suspicion) • The blind only moves ‘half-way up’  suggests that something is being hidden • The way the narrator can’t decipher her features (‘One could not distinguish’) and the writer withholds information makes her identify deliberately ambiguous  we want to find out more • The writer juxtaposes the idea of ‘old’ and ‘young’ – her age is uncertain: if young, she could be vulnerable; if old, then fragile. • ‘delicate’ and ‘slight’ suggest vulnerability – but we don’t know why • The reference to the strange gas light that falls across the woman’s face is mysterious  the concept of a cold light seems ghostly/sinister.

30. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION What’s in the mark scheme? • The use of modal verbs ‘might’ and ‘may’  draws attention to his uncertainty and also fears she may have seen him. Creates tension • The adjective ‘remarkable’ to describe her eyes  something unusual that intrigues us • The idea of the ‘large’ eyes that are ‘uncannily brilliant’ is unearthly  sinister or ghostly • The metaphorical use of the ‘theatre curtain’ being like the blind – a play is fiction; it makes the woman – an actress.

31. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION • Adjectives • Verbs • Modal verbs • Adverb • Metaphor • Simile • Imagery • Juxtaposition • Focuses • Zooms in 4 Detailed PQAs I agree with the student that…. The writer makes the woman seem mysterious because of the way he refers to/ describes / focusses on.... This is intriguing because…. The use of <method> is effective as…. and creates the idea that… This makes me want to know more because… Furthermore, the writer…..(next PQA….) • Concealment • Uncertainty • Unnatural • Vulnerable • Fragile • Ambiguous • Suspicious • Wary • Sinister • Eerie • Disturbing

32. EXAMPLE RESPONSE to EVALUATE Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION I agree with the student’s statement the woman is mysterious because there is so much ambiguity surrounding her. The writer makes the woman seem intriguing because of the way he only allows the reader and narrator to see glimpses of her. Even when she does appear, her blind only moves ‘half way up’ so she remains partly obscured. This sense of partial concealment is developed through the narrator’s inability to tell if she is ‘a girl’ or an ‘old woman’ and modal verbs such as ‘might have seen me’ are cleverly used to enhance the impression of uncertainty and intrigue the reader. The woman also seems mysterious because Jerome makes her appear ghostly. We learn that her face is illuminated by ‘cold, blue gaslight’ which ‘would have made it seem pallid’. This image is then combined with a startling description of her ‘remarkable’ eyes which ‘caught the light and held it, rendering them uncannily large and brilliant.’ These eyes seem unnatural or unworldly, increasing the sense of mystery surrounding the woman.

33. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION Strength Weakness and Next Steps

34. Paper 1 Section AThe Street of the Blank Wall Paper 1 Section AThe Handmaid’s Tale Question 4 (AO4, 20 marks, 25mins) EVALUATION RESPOND TO YOUR PARTNER’S FEEDBACK Add to your response, with purple pen, to show that you have acted on their advice and therefore are improving your work and making progress. SUPPORT: use your earlier notes to help you or discuss with your partner. CHALLENGE: Try to make connections between a range of ideas in the extract specified OR add further layers of analysis to your explanations.

35. Paper 1 Section BCreative Writing Skills Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) The BIG Picture: Developing effectivewriting skills for Section B of Language Paper 1 in preparation for Mock Exams. Learning Objective: To write in a way that is effective and suits the audience, form and purpose whilst employing a range of linguistic and structural techniques (AO5, 6). Level 4 (BAND 7+): ‘Convincing and Conscious’ AO5: I can write convincingly and employing a range of complex linguistic features with evidence of conscious crafting of linguistic devices and extensive vocabulary.Developing writing with a range of complex ideas, consistently coherent paragraphs and varied/effective structural features. AO6: I can use a wide range of effective sentences and punctuation. Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate.High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary. Level 3 (BAND 5 and 6): ‘Clearly, Consistently and Effectively’ AO5: I can write consistently clearly and effectively, using linguistic and structural features and paragraphs and vocabulary that is increasingly sophisticated. Coherent paragraphs with a range of detailed and connected ideas. Integrated discourse markers and effective structural features. AO6: I can use a variety of sentences and punctuation for effect.Sentence demarcation is mostly secure and mostly accurate.Generally accurate spelling.

36. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) Organisation and Content Technical Accuracy This means: • Matching your writing to purpose, audience and form • Making conscious choices about language and linguistic features • Structuring, sequencing and linking your writing This means: • Showing you can use an ambitious range of vocabulary • Correctly punctuate sentences with a range of techniques. • Use standard English • Spell accurately • Use varied sentence structures for effect. These skills need to be demonstrated consistently and effectively throughout your writing.

37. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) EITHER Write a description based on this image. OR Write the opening of a story that begins with somebody looking out of a window [24 marks for content and organisation. 16 marks for technical accuracy] • BUG the question • Box the command word • Underline the key words • Glance at the marks. DESCRIPTION: Choose zooms based on the image. Limited dialogue. No action/still images/moment in time. Series of descriptive paragraphs. OPENING OF A STORY: Do not write the whole story. Use the image as support. Focus on the keywords. Engaging and detailed. Limited dialogue. Minimal characters.

38. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins)

39. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) DESCRIPTION: Choose zooms based on the image. Limited dialogue. No action/still images/moment in time. Series of descriptive paragraphs with a common theme. OPENING OF A STORY: Do not write the whole story. Use the image as support. Focus on the keywords of the task: be relevant. Engaging and detailed. Limited dialogue. Minimal characters. • WRITING SKILLS • PAIRED TASK: jot down the skills that fall under the headings below. Which techniques could you use to fulfil these expectations? • Linguistic Devices • Structural Devices • Punctuation • Sentence types INDIVIDUAL TASK Plan your response for either of the tasks above. Make sure you suit the form, purpose and audience. Include notes on the key skills above.

40. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) DESCRIPTION: Choose zooms based on the image. Limited dialogue. No action/still images/moment in time. Series of descriptive paragraphs with a common theme. Third person narrative. OPENING OF A STORY: Do not write the whole story. Use the image as support. Focus on the keywords of the task: be relevant. Engaging and detailed. Limited dialogue. Minimal characters. Third person narrative. PAIRED TASK Read through the example response. Using the skills you have noted down, tick off and label any skills that you can identify. • Strength: • Weakness: • Next Steps: • Band and reason: CHALLENGE QUESTION Is this a narrative OR a descriptive response? How do you know?

41. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting PUNCTUATION STARTER Punctuate these sentences: • Each sentence requires at least one punctuation mark: • Comma • Colon : • Semi-colon ; • Glistening in the early sunlight the pure white blanket of snow stretched across the expansive fields. • Tall skeletal branches stretched out into the dark abyss of the night. • Despite the bitter cold weather signs of wildlife emerged. • The iridescent moonlight illuminated the peculiar door it hadn’t been touched in centuries. • Creeping silently through the desolate streets the silence threatened corner every house and every living organism it was a hungry predator with a determination to succeed.

42. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting PUNCTUATION STARTER • Glistening in the early sunlight the pure white blanket of snow stretched across the expansive fields. • Tall skeletal branches stretched out into the dark abyss of the night. • Despite the bitter cold weather signs of wildlife emerged. • The iridescent moonlight illuminated the peculiar door it hadn’t been touched in centuries. • Creeping silently through the desolate streets the silence threatened corner every house and every living organism it was a hungry predator with a determination to succeed.

43. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting PUNCTUATION RULES • Rules for commas: • To separate items or adjectives in a list • After a subordinate clause • (Despite….., …..) • After a verb phrase OR adverbstart (Over in the corner,….. Suddenly,….)

44. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting PUNCTUATION RULES • Rules for colons : • To introduce a list: • The sea was bursting with life: shoals of tropical fish; millions of urchins and….. • 2. To introduce an explanation (reason – instead of because) • The leaves shuddered with fear: the wind was in a furious temper.

45. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting PUNCTUATION RULES • Rules for semicolons ; • To separate phrases in a list • The sea was bursting with life: shoals of tropical fish; millions of urchins and….. • 2. To link two similar sentences when the second doesn’t explain the first • The wind whipped the bone-dry leaves on the ground; the moonlight glared in anger at the shimmering pavement.

46. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 • Now read back through your opening paragraph from last lesson • Check your use of commas, colons and semi-colons • Are they accurate? • Have you missed any out? • CHECK AND CHANGE!

47. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) This is a place of silence. Decrepit buildings tower over the streets, their bricks discolouredby toxicsmoke. They are but shadows of their former glory days. Yesterday’s snow clings to the pavements. Locked shutters prohibit entry; their silent stares follow even the miniscule mice that scurry secretly through the streets. A white moon shines and clouds skulk across the shoulders of the factories. To the left, two street lamps project warm light onto an empty window. Their illusion of cosiness is just a foolish fancy. To the right, a metal balcony hangs over a tired gate. It lurks near the place where graffiti artists made their mark in bold, oriental swirls. Nearby, a street sign stands upright in uncomfortable snow shoes. The little grey road has thrown off her snow using grease and the passing feet of strangers. She mocks those doorsteps that still lie stifled. On the horizon, a warehouse stands guard, one eye alight with a faint reflection of the moon. This is a place of silence. A • Colour code or label key features: • Impressive vocab • Linguistic devices • Sentence variety for effect • Use of varied punctuation

48. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) It is a cold night. Tall, brown buildings stand above the snow. Blue clouds float through the sky. The street is empty. The street lights shine across the glistening pavements and piles of snow have been stacked up on these pavements and more snow sits on the slippery steps. Above this scene, a white moon casts its light. It reveals graffiti that has been scrawled on the bricks by some tearaways. Black and white spray paint covers the surface and makes it look tired and ugly. It’s unfriendly. Beside the graffiti door, a closed blind hangs as white as the snow. IT is almost translucent, suggesting that there might be some kind of life going on behind it. Shadows creep through the deserted streets and the silence waits around every abandoned corner, waiting to engulf every sound of life. The coldness bites at the bricks, the lampposts, the doorsteps and the windows. Nothing is safe. B • Colour code or label key features: • Impressive vocab • Linguistic devices • Sentence variety for effect • Use of varied punctuation

49. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting COMPLETE YOUR OWN DESCRIPTION • SENTENCE TYPES • Minor sentence: Simple. • Simple sentence: It was decided. • Switch complex: begins with a connective: As, Despite, Although, Even though. Then a comma, then the main clause. • Embedded Complex: The house, which had stood alone for years, was dilapidated. • Adverb Starter: Cautiously, /Forcefully, • Verb Phrase Starter: Taking it in turns, they edged forwards towards the danger. PARAGRAPHS! Time Place Topic People CHALLENGE: Use a one line sentence for drama! • Full stops • Capital letters • Apostrophes • Commas • Speech • Colons • Semi-colons • Dashes LANGUAGE DEVICES Extended similes and metaphors • Include a cohesive tie (include an idea that connects the start and the end of your description). • Use a flash-back or flash-forward (careful to control tense) Personification and alliteration Exciting adverbs and verbs Adjectives before the nouns

50. Paper 1 Section BCreativeWriting Question 5 (AO5: 24 marks. AO6: 16 marks. 40mins) USE THE SKILL-O-METER TO INFORM YOUR COMMENTS PEER ASSESSMENT • Strength: …....... • Weakness: …..... • Next Steps: …...... HINT: Use the criteria below to guide ALL of your comments. You must help your partner to improve. Level 4 (BAND 7+): ‘Convincing and Conscious’ AO5: I can write convincingly and employing a range of complex linguistic features with evidence of conscious crafting of linguistic devices and extensive vocabulary.Developing writing with a range of complex ideas, consistently coherent paragraphs and varied/effective structural features. AO6: I can use a wide range of effective sentences and punctuation. Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate.High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary. Level 3 (BAND 5 and 6): ‘Clearly, Consistently and Effectively’ AO5: I can write consistently clearly and effectively, using linguistic and structural features and paragraphs and vocabulary that is increasingly sophisticated. Coherent paragraphs with a range of detailed and connected ideas. Integrated discourse markers and effective structural features. AO6: I can use a variety of sentences and punctuation for effect.Sentence demarcation is mostly secure and mostly accurate.Generally accurate spelling.