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Dr. David Blakesley Professor of English, Purdue Brought to you in cooperation with the Purdue Online Writing Lab

The Paramedic Method. Dr. David Blakesley Professor of English, Purdue Brought to you in cooperation with the Purdue Online Writing Lab. The problem. How can two sentences that say virtually the same thing communicate differently?

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Dr. David Blakesley Professor of English, Purdue Brought to you in cooperation with the Purdue Online Writing Lab

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  1. The Paramedic Method Dr. David Blakesley Professor of English, Purdue Brought to you in cooperation with the Purdue Online Writing Lab

  2. The problem • How can two sentences that say virtually the same thing communicate differently? • An evaluation of the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures for use in concrete pavements was undertaken and is presented in this paper. (36 words!FAT! The “Official Style”) • This paper evaluates the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures in concrete pavements. (26 words! LEAN! “Clear and Readable Style”) • Lard content of sentence 1: 10/36 = 28%

  3. What’s the difference? • The “Official Style” (Sentence 1) uses . . . • Lots of prepositions and prepositional phrases • “To be” verbs • Nominalizations • The passive voice • A long ‘wind-up’ or introductory phrase

  4. What Is the Paramedic Method? • Developed by Richard Lanham, the paramedic method is a set of clear steps for analyzing and revising wordy sentences. Writers use the paramedic method to improve clarity and readability so that their meaning is communicated concisely and effectively.

  5. Paramedic Method Step 1 • Underline the prepositional phrases* in • the sentence. • An evaluation of the effectof Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixturesfor use in concrete pavements is presented in this paper. • * Prepositions are words that indicate relationships between nouns and pronouns. Words like at, in, on, of, to, about, around, below, above, from, into, near, since, through, against, after, and outside are prepositions.

  6. Paramedic Step 2 2. Circle the ‘to be’* verbs. An evaluation of the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures for use in concrete pavements was undertaken and is presented in this paper. * “To be” verbs are conjugations of “to be”: am, is

  7. Paramedic Step 3 3. Put a box around nominalizations* and (thus) identify the primary action. An evaluation of the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures for use in concrete pavements was undertaken and is presented in this paper. * Nominalizations are nouns that used to be verbs or adjectives, such as evaluation (n) for evaluated (v)

  8. Paramedic Step 4 • Write the nominalization/primary action as • a simple verb. • An evaluation… • becomes • evaluate or evaluates

  9. Paramedic Step 5 • 5. Ask, “Who or what performs the action?” Then write the new base clause with the agent in the subject position. Use the simple verb form from step 4. • …for use in concrete pavements is • presented in this paper. • This paperevaluates… agent agent action

  10. Paramedic Steps 6 and 7 • 6. Keep the base clause near the beginning of the sentence, if possible. • 7. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases.

  11. The Final Product Original An evaluation of the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures for use in concrete pavements was undertaken and is presented in this paper. Revised This paper evaluates the effect of Class C fly ash and ground granulated blast furnace slag (GGBFS) on the properties of ternary mixtures in concrete pavements.

  12. Samples for Papers Original From the beginning, the writing of this research article was marked by reluctance. Revised I wrote the research article reluctantly.

  13. Sample for Practice • Original • As a means of providing scientists with appropriate tertiary • data, the conference is intended to serve as a • communication medium for everyone involved. • Revised • The conference will provide scientists with appropriate tertiary data and a way to share their research.

  14. Sample for Practice • Original • It was decided that the committee for road improvement would cease their activity for the term by the managers. • Revised • The managers decided that the committee for road improvement would cease activity for the term.

  15. Sample Practice Original After the process of mixing the chemicals, cooking the substances at an appropriate temperature, filtering the remaining silt, and pouring them into the moulds, the brackets are ready to be used. Revised The brackets are ready for use after the chemicals are mixed, cooked, filtered, and fit into the moulds

  16. The End Adapted by Joshua Prenosil and David Blakesley from The Thomson Handbook by David Blakesley and Jeffrey L. Hoogeveen Brought to you in cooperation with the Purdue Online Writing Lab

  17. For More Information • Contact the Purdue Writing Lab: • Drop In: Heavilon 226 • Call: 765-494-3723 • Email: owl@owl.english.purdue.edu • On the web: http://owl.english.purdue.edu

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