Hurdle Feedback

1. Hurdle Feedback Goal: To improve understanding of how to structure a text response essay

2. Remember… • Yesterday – what were some important bits of advice you were given? • Talk to a partner about what you remember

3. “I’m just the carbon copy you read when you can’t find the original.” Is this an accurate appraisal of Eve Harrington? Step One: Unpacking a Question • Underline the key words in the question • Quotation: who? when? where? why? to whom? • What do you know? Mind-map, dot points, PMI, Ask and Answer questionsRefine– what’s relevant / irrelevant? • Establish a contention / interpretation and key points (at least 4)

4. “I’m just the carbon copy you read when you can’t find the original.” Is this an accurate appraisal of Eve Harrington? Step Two: Writing an Introduction • Engage with the promptstraight away. If it’s a quotation, who says it, to whom, when, where, why? • DO NOT RETELL THE STORY or GIVE GENERAL FACTS. • Repeat key question words (synonyms of) to ensure that you are engaging with the prompt. • Clearly establish your contention / interpretation. What is your response to the prompt? • Outline your key points / arguments (a minimum of four) • Make a link to the context (social / cultural / historical values)

5. In the film ‘All About Eve’, the audience observes the lengths the antagonist, Eve Harrington, will go to replicate the success of Margo Channing, a star of the 1950’s theatre world, togain acceptance and a sense of belonging. Following her performance as Margo’s understudy, Eve tells Addison that she is simply a ‘carbon copy’ of Margo, ‘the original’. To an extent, Eve is a replica of Margo; she too enters the theatre world and strives to imitate Margo’s style and take her position within the group. However, this is a limited evaluation of Eve Harrington. In many ways she is much more than a carbon copy. Addison, Bill and Lloyd all recognise her notable talent as a performer and she achieves significant success, gaining the Sarah Siddons award. On the other hand, Margo is far superior to Eve. She has clear morals, is a true star and is irreplaceable. This contrast between Margo and Eve highlights changes in culture at the time, where celebrity culture was beginning to replace old-fashioned stardom.

6. Introduces key ideas • Red= words linked to the topic • Green= contention and arguments • Blue= context

7. In the film ‘All About Eve’, the audience observes the lengths the antagonist, Eve Harrington, will go to replicate the success of Margo Channing, a star of the 1950’s theatre world, togain acceptance and a sense of belonging. Following her performance as Margo’s understudy, Eve tells Addison that she is simply a ‘carbon copy’ of Margo, ‘the original’. To an extent, Eve is a replica of Margo; she too enters the theatre world and strives to imitate Margo’s style and take her position within the group. However, this is a limited evaluationof Eve Harrington. In many ways she is much more than a carbon copy. Addison, Bill and Lloyd all recognise her notable talent as a performer and she achieves significant success, gaining the Sarah Siddons award. On the other hand, Margo is far superior to Eve. She has clear morals, is a true star and is irreplaceable.This contrast between Margo and Eve highlights changes in culture at the time, where celebrity culture was beginning to replace old-fashioned stardom.

8. “I’m just the carbon copy you read when you can’t find the original.” Is this an accurate appraisal of Eve Harrington? Step Three: TEEL paragraphs • Topic sentences present a supporting point to support your interpretation. • Evidence: You refer to a key scene and provide quotations and cinematic devices from that scene. • Make links to other key scenes. QUOTATIONS AND CINEMATIC DEVICES. • In total you should have 4 INTEGRATED, short and snappy quotations and AT LEAST one cinematic device. • Cinematic devices are described IN PRECISE DETAIL. • Explain the effect of cinematic devices and quotations. How does the audience respond? What is the audience’s interpretation? • Link – to values at the time (occasionally this may not be relevant) • Link – link your ideas back to the topic sentence and the prompt.

9. Eve’s goal is to become Margo and Karen, as the weak link and outsider, provides Eve with the opportunity to achieve this goal by inviting her into the group. From the moment of this introduction, Eve manipulates those around her, fuelled by her desire for a “new[path]… paved with stars”, one where she is both accepted and adored, just like Margo. Her motivations are revealed at Bill’s party where she explains that the knowledge that”‘different hundreds of people love you... and want you… is worth anything.” To achieve this, she sets studying Margo “like a set of blueprints”, exemplified by her choice of drink: a “martini, extra dry”, just like Margo. Mankiewicz demonstrates Eve’s journey towards her goal through the use of costuming. Eve first appears looking like a down-trodden naïve girl. She is dressed in a floppy hat and a dowdy trench coat, striking a stark contrast to the rest of the group. However, by the time of the party scene, Eve has been seen in Margo’s clothes, a “new suit” which only needed a bit of “taking in here and letting out there”. Moreover, Eve attends the party dressed in a very similar off-the-shoulder, long black dress, which is perhaps less glamorous, yet nevertheless a clear imitation, symbolising her efforts to impersonate Margo. This is further emphasised by the mise-en-scene when Margo rebukes Eve for treating her like the Queen Mother. The characters are positioned opposite each other in the shot, adopting an almost identical stance. Theaudience is left in no doubt as to Eve’s ultimate goal and begins to see the more manipulative, sinister side to her as she begins to become a copy of Margo Channing. This serves to highlight the 1950’s ideal that ruthless ambition held by women detracted from their traditional role and therefore represented a corruptive force.

10. Body paragraph 2: TASK: Highlight:1) topic and linking sentence2) integrated quotations 3) analysis of cinematic devices 4)audience response / interpretation 5) context

11. However, Eve is not ‘just’ a copy of Margo; she is a great talent and achieves significant success in her own right. This talent is noted by Addison and Lloyd following Eve’s reading with Miss Casswell. Addison describes her reading as “brilliant, vivid, something made of music and fire.” and Lloyd labels it a “revelation” Consequently, she rapidly outgrows the role of understudy, gained through her exploitation of Margo and Karen, and becomes an enormously successful Broadway actress in her own right. This is confirmed when Eve gains the Sarah Siddons award for Distinguished Achievement. During the ceremony, the presenter comments on her journey to success, explaining that Eve “has had one wish, one prayer, one dream - to belong to [the theatre]”. She has achieved her dream and now, the theatre world “shall dream the same of her.” This success is confirmed by Addison, our narrator and commentator in this scene, when he states that “no brighter light has ever dazzled the eye than Eve Harrington.” Clearly, this suggests to the audience that Eve is more than a mere replica and, for her talent, she deserves recognition and success in her own right. This success is highlighted by Eve’s costume during the awards ceremony which is both dazzling and glamorous; she has come a long way from the dowdy young girl who engineered an entry into the group to showcase her talent and achieve success. The presentation of the Sarah Siddons award acts as a symbol of recognition by the theatre world and Mankiewicz uses a freeze frame of this moment to ‘bookend’ the film. Consequently, the audience is aware of Eve’s talent and success from the outset. However, the use of flashback in this circular structure serves indicate to the audience early on that there is more to Eve’s personal success than pure talent.

12. However, Eve is not ‘just’ a copy of Margo; she is a great talent and achieves significant success in her own right. This talent is noted by Addison and Lloyd following Eve’s reading with Miss Casswell. Addison describes her reading as “brilliant, vivid, something made of music and fire.” and Lloyd labels it a “revelation” Consequently, she rapidly outgrows the role of understudy, gained through her exploitation of Margo and Karen, and becomes an enormously successful Broadway actress in her own right. This is confirmed when Eve gains the Sarah Siddons award for Distinguished Achievement. During the ceremony, the presenter comments on her journey to success, explaining that Eve “has had one wish, one prayer, one dream - to belong to [the theatre]”. She has achieved her dream and now, the theatre world “shall dream the same of her.” This success is confirmed by Addison, our narrator and commentator in this scene, when he states that “no brighter light has ever dazzled the eye than Eve Harrington.” Clearly, this suggests to the audience that Eve is more than a mere replica and, for her talent, she deserves recognition and success in her own right. This success is highlighted by Eve’s costume during the awards ceremony which is both dazzling and glamorous; she has come a long way from the dowdy young girl who engineered an entry into the group to showcase her talent and achieve success. The presentation of the Sarah Siddons award acts as a symbol of recognition by the theatre world and Mankiewicz uses a freeze frame of this moment to ‘bookend’ the film. Consequently, the audience is aware of Eve’s talent and success from the outset. However, the use of flashback in this circular structure serves indicate to the audience early on that there is more to Eve’s personal success than pure talent.

13. Choose a topic sentence • Eve can never be a ‘carbon’ copy of Margo due to the significant difference in moral values between these performers. • Margo is irreplaceable due to her star qualities. Eve can only copy Margo’s performance on stage and is an inferior celebrity.

14. Application In your TEEL paragraph you must: *Use the topic sentence provided to you and include a strong linking sentence at the end of your paragraph that relates your discussion back to the topic *Reference a relevant key scene and analyse quotes and cinematic devices *Consider the audience’s interpretation *Consider the values which are being represented

15. Review and Reflect • Read your partner’s paragraph & score it