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Writing 1 Day 4
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!
Topic Sentences • Topic • Explain what the whole thing is about • Normally first sentence (second or third is ok) • Process topic sentences – explain steps • By doing this, I follow these steps. • Very important part of your paragraph!!!!
Prompt 1 An achievement is something you have already done. It is something you are proud of. It is something others wish they did but may not do it or may want to do it but need more time to do it. What is your greatest achievement? Write a paragraph about the steps you took to accomplish your greatest achievement.
Topic Sentences • One of my greatest achievements in my life is to become a police officer. • One of my greatest achievements is when I received a my certification of cosmetology. • My greatest achievement was when I bought my first car. • I want to open my own bakery.
Topic Sentences • To be part of Bergen Community College I have to follow these steps. • These steps are my achievement steps. • My achievement is to be a teacher. • For me my achievement was when I met a family member.
Prompt 2 Abraham Lincoln once said, “Everyone is as happy as they choose to be.” How do you stay happy? Write a paragraph about the steps you take each day to live a happy life.
Topic Sentence • To stay happy you have to take consideration of these steps. • I take each day to live a happy life by following these four steps. • I am lucky that I was born.
Topic Sentence • This is how I live happy each day. • What do I do everyday to be happy? • A few steps can make a happy life.
Read the prompts. Make topic sentences. • What things do you need to do to make new friends? • How did you obtain your driver’s license? • What steps must you take to find a new home? • How do you get ready quickly in the morning?
Amazing Writing! My greatest achievement was when I received certificate of cosmetology. First, I went to the academy of a beauty artist. The class was from 9-6 during the weekdays. It was hard for me but I am happy that I chose it. Next, I studied hard and practiced repeatedly. I learned techniques and training skills. I had to practice for hours and sometimes much more than others. After that, I had to practice on people by myself. I was brave and needed courage. Sometimes I practiced with my daughter. My oldest daughter gave me her hair so I could practice changing the colors. It was difficult in the beginning but it became easier with time. It was important that I believed myself and wasn’t afraid. Finally, I passed the exam. I got a certificate of cosmetology. It was great thing for me. I want to get a new job with it!
Amazing Writing! My greatest achievement was when I received certificate of cosmetology.First, I went to the academy of a beauty artist. The class was from 9-6 during the weekdays. It was hard for me but I am happy that I chose it. Next, I studied hard and practiced repeatedly. I learned techniques and training skills. I had to practice for hours and sometimes much more than others. After that, I had to practice on people by myself. I was brave and needed courage. Sometimes I practiced with my daughter. My oldest daughter gave me her hair so I could practice changing the colors. It was difficult in the beginning but it became easier with time. It was important that I believed myself and wasn’t afraid. Finally, I passed the exam. I got a certificate of cosmetology. It was great thing for me. I want to get a new job with it!
Six Types of Paragraphs • Process – steps to achieve something • Descriptive • Narrative • Argument
Six Types of Paragraphs • Process – steps to achieve something • Descriptive • Narrative • Argument
Six Types of Paragraphs • Process – steps to achieve something • Descriptive Being descriptive is painting a picture with words.
Descriptive Paragraph Requirements • Topic Sentence • Transitions • Facts and Opinions • Adjectives • Thesis Statement
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR FACTS
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR FACTS
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR OPINIONS
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR OPINIONS
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR ADJECTIVES
What did you do this weekend? I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Bubleis such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time! LOOK FOR ADJECTIVES
A Biological Treasure Read pg 25 in “Engaging Writing 1”. Let’s look for adjectives, opinions, and facts.
What are some facts in Paragraph 1? What are some facts in Paragraph 2?
What is the paragraph about? What is an opinion in paragraph 4? Name some adjectives.
General vs Specific Topics Baseball game Phillies vs Mets 2008 World Series 2010 August 27, 2013 game Specific topic General topic
Topic Sentence Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place. • State the place or event and it’s location • Give an adjective that describes that place or event.
Prewriting Using a Bubble Map Mapping • Pick an event or place and write down all the words you can think about on that topic. busy magical Little children characters Magic Kingdom Amusement park music vacation Good food laughing hotdogs Long lines family
Prewriting Using a Bubble Map Mapping • Group things that go together. characters Long lines busy magical laughing Little children Amusement park Magic Kingdom music Good food family hotdogs vacation
Choose two or three focus points. characters Long lines busy magical laughing Little children Amusement park Magic Kingdom music Good food family hotdogs vacation All these things are fun!!
Topic Sentence with Focus Point Statement • Topic sentence: Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place. • Focus Point Statement: Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun.
Good Topic Statements Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun. Topic Controlling Ideas/Focus Points
Outline • Topic: Magic Kingdom • Magical • Fun • Magical • Laughing children • Music • Characters • Fun • Food • Rides • Vacation • Closing Sentence: Recommend or suggest
Choose focus points and make an outline • Topic: ______________ • Focus Point 1 ______________ • Focus Point 2 ______________ • Focus Point 1: _____________ • Detail 1 • Detail 2 • Detail 3 • Focus Point 2: ________________ • Detail 1 • Detail 2 • Detail 3 • Closing Sentence: Recommend or suggest
Write It! Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun. First, Magic Kingdom is a magical place. When you first walk into the park, you see children laughing. They are having such a wonderful time. You can also hear loud music from the rides that makes you feel you are in a different country. Characters like Mickey Mouse and Donald Duck are walking around with real people too. It makes you feel like you are in a fairytale. Secondly, Magic Kingdom is a lot of fun. It has great rides. It also has amazing food. It is a wonderful vacation spot for the family. In conclusion, I recommend Magic Kingdom for a wonderful vacation. This is not finished. However, I want to get my ideas down, so this is the product you see.
Homework • Write your paragraph. • Bring with you next week for additional information and discussion.