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Improving Essays

Improving Essays. Titles Thesis Statements Support Citing References. Titles. short capital letters on main words only should reflect the topic/theme of essay but not necessarily the main idea The Korean attitude towards safety needs to change for several reasons

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Improving Essays

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  1. Improving Essays Titles Thesis Statements Support Citing References

  2. Titles • short • capital letters on main words only • should reflect the topic/theme of essay • but not necessarily the main idea • The Korean attitude towards safety needs to change for several reasons • Korea’s Attitude Towards Safety

  3. Hooks • According to an OECD report, ….. • Everyone needs a job. • A terrible incident occurred recently. • In Korea, most people like to do things fast.

  4. Thesis statements • What is your clear and simple opinion? • Korea must change to be a country that prepares coping plans ahead. • Korea must prepare emergency response plans for the following situations. • I think the captain should receive the death penalty for three reasons. • We have to improve our safety awareness.

  5. Support • Children must be educated to improve safety. If they do not receive the training they will be in danger……. • Children must be educated in safety awareness. For example, school should start to carry out regular safety drills. In the event of a fire, students and teachers would have the skills needed to evacuate in an orderly way and hopefully save as many lives as possible. In my elementary school…. (experience? anecdote) In Seoul at the moment, (fact? statistic?)

  6. Citing • If you write “At the moment, there are 5,000 elementary school teachers in the Seoul school system.” • You must write how you know this fact! • According to a 2012 report by the Seoul Metropolitan Office of Education there were 5,000 elementary school teachers in the Seoul school system as of 2012.

  7. Citing • According to Roger Cohen’s April 24 New York Times editorial, Korea “is one of the more rambunctious of Asian societies”. • Notice the punctuation! • Now change this to begin with: As Roger Cohen claimed in his ….. • As Roger Cohen claimed in his April 24 New York Times editorial, Korea “is one of the more rambunctious of Asian societies”.

  8. Citing • Or you can paraphrase…say the same thing with different words. • Roger Cohen, in his April 24 New York Times editorial, described Korea as a very “rambunctious” society.

  9. References • If you have quoted or cited or used any information from another book, article, survey etc, you must list these “sources” as references at the end of your essay! • p. 56 • Notice punctuation and format

  10. References/Web article • References • Cohen, Roger. (2014) The case for disobedience. New York Times. Retrieved April 30, 2014, fromhttp://www.nytimes.com/2014/04/29/opinion/cohen-the-case-for-disobedience.html?_r=0 • What do you notice about punctuation and style? • Last name, First name . (year) Title in italics. Name of publication. Retrieved (date) from (url)

  11. Your turn • Cite and reference this sentence from “conglomerates” • The Samsung Group has decided to return to its earlier method of screening resumes to find new employees. • Writer: Sandra Ward • Article: Conglomerates hiring practices are out of date • Date: Jan 17, 2014 • Source: The ChosunIlbo • URL: http://english.chosun.com/site/data/html_dir/2014/01/17/2014011701757.html

  12. Answer • According to a ChosunIlbo editorial, “The Samsung Group has decided to return to its earlier method of screening resumes to find new employees”. • Ward, Susan. (2014). Conglomerates hiring practices are out of date. The ChosunIlbo. Retrieved April 30, 2014, from http://english.chosun.com/site/data/html_dir/2014/01/17/2014011701757.html

  13. Your turn • Cite and reference this sentence from a Gallup survey. • Nine of the world's 10 happiest countries are from Latin America. • Gallup World • 2014 • Article: People worldwide are reporting a lot of positive emotions • Retrieved May 28, 2014 • http://www.gallup.com/poll/169322/people-worldwide-reporting-lot-positive-emotions.aspx

  14. Answer • According to a Gallup poll, “Nine of the world’s ten happiest countries are from Latin America”. • A Gallup poll found that nine of the world's ten happiest countries are in Latin America. • Gallup, (2014). People worldwide are reporting a lot of positive emotions. Retrieved May 28, 2014, from http://www.gallup.com/poll/169322/people-worldwide-reporting-lot-positive-emotions.aspx

  15. So…. • If you use any info from the articles we’ve read in class or other sources you must cite and reference in your 2nd draft! • I’ll help you! • Check my editing sheet for 2nd draft expectations. • Clear up your thesis statements! • Strong support..examples,

  16. Final Exam • Part 1 • June 10…textbook quiz (20 pts) • Part 2 • June 17…essay (80 pts)

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