Chapter 10

1. Chapter 10 Keeping Your Distance: Third-Person Objective Point of View, Suspense, and Tone Tracy and Martha

2. Third-Person Point of View • Be an omniscient. Write as if you know everything, but it’s important to not tell too much. • Focus on the storytelling, refrain from commentating on the characters and events. • Be objective, and not biased when writing. Present each character equally, exactly the way they are.

3. Suspense • Be descriptive but still leave enough information out to leave the reader guessing. • Provide enough to keep the reader happy, and withhold enough to keep the reader hooked. • Start from the middle of the action so the reader is hooked. Flashback if necessary to include prior information.

4. Tone • The revision process is where tone comes into play. When you revise, edit your story to incorporate an appropriate tone. Express character emotions through actions and dialogue. • Avoid writing things like, “Bob felt sad when his toy was taken away.” Instead try writing, “Bob hung his head and tried not to cry when his toy was taken away.”

5. The following is taken from Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets, by J.K. Rowling "Hello, Nick," said Harry. "Hello, hello," said Nearly Headless Nick, starting and looking round. He wore a dashing, plumed hat on his long curly hair, and a tunic with a ruff, which concealed the fact that his neck was almost completely severed. He was pale as smoke, and Harry could see right through him to the dark sky and torrential rain outside. "You look troubled, young Potter," said Nick, folding a transparent letter as he spoke and tucking it inside his doublet. "So do you," said Harry.

6. Analyzing the passage • Uses dialogue to portray emotions • "You look troubled, young Potter,” • There is an uneasy tone in the passage, like something is just not quite right. • The passage builds suspense because the reader does not know why Harry is uneasy.

7. Writing Exercise Use the character given to you to create a scenario written in 3rd person. At the start of your story, your character is in a funhouse at an amusement park. You must incorporate all the items. • Briefcase • Miniature shoe • Universal remote control

8. Make up a story of an extreme event that happened at lunch today. Be sure to write in 3rd person and build suspense. Create a story of what happens when the whole front parking lot of the school disappears, and students are left with nowhere to park. Make sure you portray all characters equally and without bias. Journal Ideas