How to Shorten Lengthy Quotes – Please copy everything in green!

1. How to Shorten Lengthy Quotes – Please copy everything in green! Use Eclipses to shorten long quotes! • “Before Kino and Juana and the other fishers had come to Kino's brush house, the nerves of the town were pulsing and vibrating with the news- Kino had found the Pearl of the World” (715). • "Before Kino and Juana and the other fishers had come to Kino's brush house...Kino had found the Pearl of the World"(715). This is called an eclipse!

2. Transitional Words and Phrases – Please copy everything in green! • Transitional words/phrases link ideas together. It creates flow in your essay. Think of them as bridges! • Use your transitional chart to help you! • Practice! • "Once a user has tweeted once, there is a 65% chance that they will tweet again. After that second tweet, ___________, the chance of a third tweet goes up to 81%." —The Guardian’s Technology Blog • Complete the sentence by choosing one of the following transition words: • a) therefore b) however c) furthermore

3. Transitions from Body to Body When transitioning from one body paragraph to another, it is important to use transitional words and phrases to connect your ideas. Kino is heroic when he defies the Pearl buyers' offer. When Kino tried to sell his 'pearl of the world,' the dealers offered him a mere 1500 pesos and told him that "The pearl is like fool's gold"(721) and "this is not a pearl- it's a monstrosity" (722). As the narrator stated, "That is a great deal of money, more than he had ever seen" (722). However, Kino chose to stand his ground, and not give in to their small offers for he knew the dealers were not being honest. Kino spurned the pearl buyers offers and declared "It is worth fifty thousand...you know it. You want to cheat me" (723). Finally Kino felt he had an opportunity to make a better life for his family and cashing the pearl in for a large sum of money was the only way Kino could change his life. Kino displays a great deal of heroism here because he had the courage to do what none of his people could do in the past. While he acted on behalf of his family and himself, many of Kino's people could have profited from his bravery. Kino stood up for himself and defied the pearl buyers low offer for his 'pearl of the world.‘ Furthmore, Additionally, Moreover, Kino is also heroic when......... OR... Meanwhile, Nevertheless, Later on in the novel, however, .....

4. Diction – Word Choice • Strong word choice gives your paper power! • Choose one paragraph to reread circle any words that… • Are weak words that you could make stronger! (good, bad, mad, nice, cool glad, etc) • Repeated words that you can switch out (That, he, she, they, repeated vocabulary, etc) • Delete and replace vague words (some, a lot, a little, etc) • Absolutely no = I think, I feel, my opinion, In this paragraph I am going to write about etc…