Poetic and Descriptive Writing

1. Poetic and Descriptive Writing

2. Basic toolkit: - • Good words – powerful and new choices • Alliteration – sound effects • Similes, metaphors and personification

6. wings legs eyes Thin wings quiver like lined nets Match stick legs tremble The bee stares, eyes like dark goggles Build the poem

7. Cloudy petals lie, drowsy, sleeping.Pollen rests, consciousOf its fragile beauty.Delicate wings dream dormant, frozen in the chilly wind.Legs weak like the strokeOf a fine, meandering brush.Glaring eyes powerfully dartIn all directions staring, wondering.The bee is a master of disguise,Hiding in the autumn brown of a fragile leaf.Camouflaging himself in theGold of the sleeping pollenSecretly lying in the coverOf blossoming flowers.Reid, 10 yrs.

8. Cloudy petals lie, drowsy, sleeping.Pollen rests, consciousOf its fragile beauty.Delicate wings dream dormant, frozen in the chilly wind.Legs weak like the strokeOf a fine, meandering brush.Glaring eyes powerfully dartIn all directions staring, wondering.The bee is a master of disguise,Hiding in the autumn brown of a fragile leaf.Camouflaging himself in theGold of the sleeping pollenSecretly lying in the coverOf blossoming flowers.Reid, 10 yrs.

9. Extended metaphor • Think of a simple metaphor: The bee is a …. thief, acrobat, pilot, busybody, secret, idea, fury, wizard, trick, sleight of hand, promise, soldier, magician…

10. Extended metaphor 2. Extend - saying what the metaphor does: The bee is a busybody, bustling from flower to flower, bristling with questions, incessantly worrying, gathering every scrap of nectar….

11. Story writing using images • Rehearse paragraphs by using images – brainstorm ideas and language to create a bank of possibilities. • Just use the image. • Or use the image, the brainstorm and a model.

13. Carefully, Jake turned the page and pointed at the photograph. Jenny leaned forwards. She could just see the old log cabin where they still lived. Standing in front of it was a man, holding two small children by the hand. She recognised her brother immediately. But who was the man? Was it their father?

14. Writing Task Toolkit • Who they are and where they are. • What are they looking at – introduce a mystery. • Start with an ‘ly’ opening. • Use at least one ‘ing’ chunk. • Vary sentences. • Use a question to introduce the mystery, e.g. What did the message mean?

15. Story Plot From Images • Provide character bank. • Develop character ideas. • Use a sequence of images to suggest a story. • Provide story clues. • Or interwoven with sample paragraphs.

16. Choose 2 contrasting characters. • Decide on names. • How are they feeling and why?

21. Setting opening The sun slipped behind the distant hills, painting the mountains red and black. Shadows lengthened, deepening the darkness. Wind whispered through the grass as if praying.

23. Build up Wearily, Tom and Jez picked up their fishing gear. It was late and they knew that they would be in trouble. But holidays only came once a year and they were just a mile from the cottage where they were staying. “Come on,” mumbled Jez, picking up his rod and turning to go.

25. Problem - suspense At that moment the boys froze. From somewhere overhead they heard a low whirring sound. Half a mile away a glowing light appeared above the forest. It streaked towards them and then hovered, casting streaks of brilliant light down into the dark trees. The boys turned to stare at each other. They were both thinking the same thing…. Aliens!

27. Problem – it gets worse Without thinking, they ran into the forest. It was dark and quite silent. As they neared the lights, they tiptoed, peering through the branches. Tugging them deeper and deeper into the forest, the strange lights shone down like silvery ropes. Without warning, there was a rush of roaring wind that tore at the trees. Then the lights disappeared. There was silence. It was quite dark and the boys knew they were hopelessly lost!

28. Problem – and even worse “Come on,” hissed Jez, “It’s no good standing here. If we walk in a straight line we’ll soon be out.” Tom followed his older brother but he kept thinking that he could hear something moving nearby. Something heavy, like a dark shape lumbering along. At that moment, it growled. The boys screamed and ran.

29. Choose an ending

31. How do they escape? Get them home. How have they changed? What have they learned?