California Redlining Examples Updated

1. California Redlining ExamplesUpdated Grant Vergottini 10/24/2012

2. Akoma Ntoso Modifications • Active Changes • Changes to be made in another document • Passive Changes • Changes within a document relative to prior version • Changes within a document relative to prior version reflecting execution of active changes from another document (per Fabio’s explanation)

3. California Redlining • Similar to change tracking in MS Word • But changes shown are not literal • Information is encoded in the meaning of changes • Two different contexts for the changes • Relative to the prior version of the bill (passive mods) • Relative to the law (informative mods – my definition)

4. Redlining vs. Passive Mods • Redlining may reflect underlying passive mods • Redlining need not literally represent passive changes • Redlining may represent forms of changes other than passive mods. • Redlining showing changes relative to the law within active changes can be considered informative (??) redlining

5. Version One of a Bill That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute A statutemay not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Active Modification Breaking into two paragraphs Redlining is showing the effect of the proposed legislation – these are neither active nor passive mods. It’s informative only.

6. Version One (Akoma Ntoso-like) <section> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. <del>A statute</del> <ins></p><p>A statute</ins> may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> Not valid XML – insertion ends para and then starts a new one

7. Version One (Akoma Ntoso) <section> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. <span period=“a1”>A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</span></p> <p period=“a2”>A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> Akoma Ntoso representation is very different from the printed presentation

8. Joining two paragraphs and then splitting into two paragraphs lower down Version Two of a Bill Section numbering is being added due to the addition of a second section – entire num is added The net effect of the first section relative to existing law is no longer apparent. First– That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. Avoid. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 510 days before and after a session. Passive Modifications Active Modifications Adding a second bill section and showing initial effect of amendment at the same time. The strike out and insert from 5 to 10 is not a passive Mod

9. Instruction Amendment for Version 2 Amendment 1: At the beginning of page 1, line 1, insert “First-” Amendment 2: On page 1, line 4, strike out “void.” and on line 5, strike out the first “A” and insert: void. A Amendment 3: On page 1, line 5, strike out “A section” and insert: A section Amendment 4: On page 1, after line 7, insert: Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 510 days before and after a session. Note the redlining in the instruction amendment – this is an informational mod! The instruction amendment describes four active mods

10. Version Two (Akoma Ntoso-like) Insertion adds a num <section id=“sec1”> <ins><num>First</num></ins> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is <del>void.</p> <p>A</del><ins>void. A statute</ins> may not be amended by reference to its title. <del>A section</del> <ins></p><p>A section</ins> of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> <section id=“sec2”> <num><ins>Second</ins></num> <content> <p> <mod id="mod2"><ins>That section 14 of Article IV is amended to read:</ins> <quotedStructure id="mod2-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for <del>5</del><ins>10</ins> days before and after a session. </p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> Not valid XML – deletion ends para and then starts a new one

11. Version Three Note that the net effect in Sec. 9 is now hidden. First-- That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 10 days before and after a session. Passive Modification Active Modifications

12. Version Three (Akoma Ntoso-like) <section id=“sec1”> <ins><num>First</num></ins> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title.</p> <p>A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> <section id=“sec2”> <num><ins>Second</ins></num> <content> <p> <mod id="mod2"><ins>That section 14 of Article IV is amended to read:</ins> <quotedStructure id="mod2-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 10 days before <del>and after</del> a session. </p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section>

13. “As Amends the Law” – the net effect First-- That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 510 days before and after a session.

14. Enacted Law <section id=“cons-sec9“> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content period=“p1”> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-1958chp10-sec1”/> </content> <content period=“p2”> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title.</p> <p>A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec1”/> </content> </section> … <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 14.</num> <content period=“p1”> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 5 days before and after a session.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-1958chp10-sec2”/> </content> <content period=“p2”> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 5 days before a session.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec2”/> </content> </section> LAF Text modeled as a noteRef???

15. Complex Redlining SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. … SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 10days before a session. <section id=“cons-sec9“> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title.</p> <p>A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec1”/> </content> </section> … <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 14.</num> <content> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 5 days before a session.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec2”/> </content> </section> A strike that starts within on bill section and ends somewhere within another. How do you deal with this? It’s easy on paper!

16. Redlining Issues • Split Merge paragraphs • Solution provided I believe? • Redlining relative to a source other than prior version • Don’t model informative redlining as passive mods • Complex (non XML conformant redlining) • ??? Rely on change tracking intrinsic to editor + lots of custom code.