California Redlining Examples

1. California Redlining Examples Grant Vergottini July 26 2012

2. Version One Breaking into two paragraphs That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute A statutemay not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Active Modification Redlining is showing the effect of the proposed legislation • Note: • Redlining changes shown are relative to law and not a prior version

3. Version One (Akoma Ntoso-like) Not valid XML – insertion ends para and then starts a new one

4. Version One (Akoma Ntoso) <section> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. <span period=“a1”>A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</span></p> <p period=“a2”>A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> Akoma Ntoso representation is very different from the printed presentation

5. The net effect of the first section relative to existing law is no longer apparent. Version Two Section numbering is being added due to the addition of a second section Joining two paragraphs and then splitting into two paragraphs lower down First – That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. Avoid. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 510 days before and after a session. Passive Modifications Active Modifications Adding a second bill section and showing initial effect of amendment at the same time • Note: • Redlining is a combination of passive mods and initial net effects • Addition of numbering to first section is a passive mod • Second active modification is also a passive modification • Second section is added, but only the first line is shown inserted

6. Version Two (Akoma Ntoso-like) Insertion adds a num <section id=“sec1”> <ins><num>First</num></ins> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is <del>void.</p> <p>A</del><ins>void. A statute</ins> may not be amended by reference to its title. <del>A section</del> <ins></p><p>A section</ins> of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> <section id=“sec2”> <num><ins>Second</ins></num> <content> <p> <mod id="mod2"><ins>That section 14 of Article IV is amended to read:</ins> <quotedStructure id="mod2-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for <del>5</del><ins>10</ins> days before and after a session. </p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> Not valid XML – deletion ends para and then starts a new one

7. Version Three First-- That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 10 days before and after a session. Passive Modification Active Modifications • Note: • Redlining shown is a passive modification • Net effect of the active modification is hidden

8. Version Three (Akoma Ntoso-like) <section id=“sec1”> <ins><num>First</num></ins> <content> <p> <mod id="mod1">That section 9 of Article IV is amended to read: <quotedStructure id="mod1-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec9"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title.</p> <p>A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section> <section id=“sec2”> <num><ins>Second</ins></num> <content> <p> <mod id="mod2"><ins>That section 14 of Article IV is amended to read:</ins> <quotedStructure id="mod2-qs1"> <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 10 days before <del>and after</del> a session. </p> </content> </section> </quotedStructure> </p> </content> </section>

9. “As Amends the Law” – the effect First-- That Section 9 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 9. A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended. Second– That Section 14 of Article IV thereof is amended to read: SEC. 14. A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 510 days before and after a session. • Note: • Artificial rendition of the bill showing the net effects as redlining

10. Enacted Law <section id=“cons-sec9“> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content period=“p1”> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title. A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-1958chp10-sec1”/> </content> <content period=“p2”> <p>A statute shall embrace but one subject, which shall be expressed in its title. If a statute embraces a subject not expressed in its title, only the part not expressed is void. A statute may not be amended by reference to its title.</p> <p>A section of a statute may not be amended unless the section is re-enacted as amended.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec1”/> </content> </section> … <section id=“cons-sec14"> <num>SEC. 9.</num> <content period=“p1”> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 5 days before and after a session.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-1958chp10-sec2”/> </content> <content period=“p2”> <p>A member of the Legislature is not subject to civil process during a session of the Legislature or for 5 days before a session.</p> <noteRefhref=“note-amd-2012chp32-sec2”/> </content> </section> LAF Text modeled as a noteRef???