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Enhancing medical body area network services. Amendments redefine MAC support for a new physical layer. Detailed comments and suggestions for each PAR aspect.
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Comments for 802-15 PARs for Nov 2010 Authors: Date: 2010-11-09 Jon Rosdahl, CSR
Abstract Comments from the 802.11 PAR AdHoc to 802.15 WG regarding 802 PARs under consideration: 802.15.4j and 802.15.4k. Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for medical body area network (MBAN) services, PAR and 5C 5.2 Scope: Add “new” prior to physical layer. Remove “current revision”, Add “IEEE” prior to 802.15.4. Spell out the Acronyms “FCC MBAN” and “MAC”. Split the end of the sentence into a new sentence as follows: delete “and any” end sentence: “This amendment defines modifications to the MAC that support the new physical layer” Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for medical body area network (MBAN) services, PAR and 5C 5.4 Purpose: The Scope says that you are describing a new PHY not services. Redo sentence. Delete “The definition of” in the 3rd sentence. Expand what “15.4” and “15.4e” really are “IEEE 802.15.4 and IEEE P802.15.4e” would be better not having them specifically there to begin with. Consider deleting the Purpose Text and replace with “This amendment will not have a Purpose Statement.” Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for medical body area network (MBAN) services, PAR and 5C 5.5 Need: Put in “IEEE” in front 802.15.4. and expand “15.4” to “IEEE 802.15.4”. Expand acronyms “NPRM”. Suggest change “FCC has made a” to “FCC has issued an” Change “This amendment” to This Project in the last sentence. Change 3rd sentence: Delete “may”. Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for medical body area network (MBAN) services, PAR and 5C • 5.6 Stakeholders: change stakeholders statement as follows: “The stakeholders include Medical equipment manufacturers, patients and healthcare providers both within hospitals and in residential environments along with service providers that offer remote support facilities.” 7.1: similar scope: Expand the Yes description. Include a minimum of the missing “IEEE” Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for medical body area network (MBAN) services, PAR and 5C • In the 5C, make it the “Low Rate Wireless Personal Area Networks (WPAN-LR)” match…throughout the 5C. Consider (LR-WPAN). • Update the 5C requirements to those found in LMSC OM 12.5. • 3. Distinct Identity: 802.15.6 is listed in 7.1, but not explained the Distinct Identity. The current wording indicates that 15.6 is similar, and it is not clear as to the differences. • c) it is easy for readers….if it is a MBAN spectrum, how is that different from the 802.15.6 MBAN uses. • Missing coexistance statement Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for low energy critical infrastructure monitoring (LECIM) networks, PAR and 5C 5.2 Scope: the scope statement should be what would be included in the final document. It should be in present tense and describe the document contents. 5.4 Purpose: Consider deleting the Purpose Text and replace with “This amendment will not have a Purpose Statement.” 5.5 Need for project: The text here looks like it should be included in the 5c responses. This should be a clear statement of the need for the project. 5.6 Stakeholders: remove “government agencies, non-government agencies with equivalent interest and “ move “Location Based Services Suppliers and Users” to the front, and delete “in addition to “ Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for low energy critical infrastructure monitoring (LECIM) networks, PAR and 5C • 8.1 Additional Notes: clean-up and remove extraneous information that should be in the 5c – Uniqueness and Distinct Identity. • 5C, WPAN-LR make consistent use of the if LR is before or after WPAN. • 2.1 title: Add acronym “LECIM” • 5c-3-a) the first statement does not seem correct. Suggest remove “uniquely”. Change “will not adequately support the” to “does not support specific” • Remove “SCADA” and just say proprietary technology. • 5c-5a) make consistent the naming of the other WG. Jon Rosdahl, CSR
802.15.4 amendment for low energy critical infrastructure monitoring (LECIM) networks, PAR and 5C • 5c-5b) remove “the estimates” from the first sentence. Jon Rosdahl, CSR
References • PAR AdHoc meeting notes: 11-10-1321r0 - Comments for Nov 2010 EC PAR proposals. Jon Rosdahl, CSR