Curriculum planning

1. Strategies at teaching and learning level • Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task Curriculum planning Curriculum planning Teaching & learning Example: Story at a Theme Park Assessment Assessment S1

2. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task Expected learning outcomes for the writing task details

3. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task Expected learning outcomes translated into :

4. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task

5. Self assessment • Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in previous work before starting a • new task • Plan • Planning before writing • Title • Interesting title • Setting • Where • When • Character • Main characters, names • Description using adjectives • Plot • Beginning, middle, ending • Details • Others • Paragraphing • Language : past and past continous tense • Spelling and grammar • Length of writing Yes / No reflection questions on:

6. Self assessment An example… • Lack of an interesting title • Not satisfied with her ending • Use of past and past continuous tense • Spelling and grammar

7. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in previous work before starting a • new task Indicators of excellence Peer assessment Description

8. An example… Peer assessment Setting/Character/ Plot/Ending  The story is short! Language/Organisation/ Features [ Your story (is) interesting and fun! ] I love your story.

9. Reflection guidelines from teachers before students submitting their revised work Common mistakes Content

10. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task Draft 2 Draft 1

11. A closer look… Draft 2 Draft 1

12. Further description about John Use of dialogue to add details One day, mother Ann went to “Learning Park” with her son, John. When Ann was buying ice-cream to John, he was lost. Ann was worried about her son and scary. Next, she found her son near the sea. However, she didn’t know he was not her son. He was an alien, called Bob, just only same with John. Then, Bob wanted to eat Ann . “No, help! Here is an alien!” After Ann said that, John came to save his mother with some police. Finally, Alien Bob was dead. John and his mother went home happily. One day, mother Ann went to “Learning Park” with her son, John. He was ten years old and liked going out with his mother. “ Mum, I want to eat ice-cream. Can you buy one for me?” asked little John. “Ok, but you can’t go away. You must wait here, ok?” When Ann was buying ice-cream for John, John ran away and got lost. Ann was worried about her son and felt scared. Next, she found her son near the sea. “Son...Son! Where are you going to? I am worried about you. You can’t go away any more, ok?” Ann was crying. “Ok.” said little John. However, everyone didn’t know he was not Ann’s son. He was an alien, called Bob. He came from another planet. He was a killer, he liked killing people, but no one could catch him, because he was an alien and had a special power. However, there was one thing that can make Bob die. It’s “love”. Love could kill all aliens. Then, Bob said, “He..heee… Ann, no one will save you. Your honey son has died…. Hahahhaa!” “Mum, I will save you!” John was taking a special gun. “Oh, no! It is love. I will die!” Bob cried. “Boom”, John shot Bob. Finally, Bob died. John saved all people. He and Ann went home happily. Use of dialogue to elaborate idea Additional detail Further information about a key character Use of dialogue to assist characterisation Additional clue Giving details of how John saved Ann Giving details of how John saved Ann At a closer look… Draft 2 Draft 1

13. Use of dialogue to elaborate idea Giving details of how John saved Ann At a closer look… Draft 2 Further description about John Use of dialogue to add details One day, mother Ann went to “Learning Park” with her son, John. When Ann was buying ice-cream to John, he was lost. Ann was worried about her son and scary. Next, she found her son near the sea. However, she didn’t know he was not her son. He was an alien, called Bob, just only same with John. Then, Bob wanted to eat Ann . “No, help! Here is an alien!” After Ann said that, John came to save his mother with some police. Finally, Alien Bob was dead. John and his mother went home happily. One day, mother Ann went to “Learning Park” with her son, John. He was ten years old and liked going out with his mother. “ Mum, I want to eat ice-cream. Can you buy one for me?” asked little John. “Ok, but you can’t go away. You must wait here, ok?” When Ann was buying ice-cream for John, John ran away and got lost. Ann was worried about her son and felt scared. Next, she found her son near the sea. “Son...Son! Where are you going to? I am worried about you. You can’t go away any more, ok?” Ann was crying. “Ok.” said little John. However, everyone didn’t know he was not Ann’s son. He was an alien, called Bob. He came from another planet. He was a killer, he liked killing people, but no one could catch him, because he was an alien and had a special power. However, there was one thing that can make Bob die. It’s “love”. Love could kill all aliens. Then, Bob said, “He..heee… Ann, no one will save you. Your honey son has died…. Hahahhaa!” “Mum, I will save you!” John was taking a special gun. “Oh, no! It is love. I will die!” Bob cried. “Boom”, John shot Bob. Finally, Bob died. John saved all people. He and Ann went home happily. Additional detail Further information about a key character Use of dialogue to assist characterisation Additional clue Giving details of how John saved Ann Draft 1 2 paragraphs  4 paragraphs

14. What led to the remarkable improvement?

15. Strategies at teaching and learning level •  Setting clear teaching objectives and assessment criteria for writing tasks • Explaining assessment criteria before students write • Introducing formative assessment practices • More feedback from teacher and/or students at an early stage • Collating students’ work in writing files • Reminding students to review the compliments and recommendations in • previous work before starting a new task Teacher’s feedback on the previousstory writing task kept in the writing file Recommendation: Write short paragraphs to highlight the change in time! Compliment : Good use of dialogues

16. That is not the end… Teacher’s detailed feedback You can change the “love” gun into something else  do something very difficult to save his mother to show his love to his mother. That could be more touching.

17. Final work

18. Changed to a touching happy ending Draft 2 One day, mother Ann went to “Learning Park” with her son, John. He was ten years old and liked going out with his mother. “ Mum, I want to eat ice-cream. Can you buy one for me?” asked little John. “Ok, but you can’t go away. You must wait here, ok?” When Ann was buying ice-cream for John, John ran away and got lost. Ann was worried about her son and felt scared. Next, she found her son near the sea. “Son...Son! Where are you going to? I am worried about you. You can’t go away any more, ok?” Ann was crying. “Ok.” said little John. However, everyone didn’t know he was not Ann’s son. He was an alien, called Bob. He came from another planet. He was a killer, he liked killing people, but no one could catch him, because he was an alien and had a special power. However, there was one thing that can make Bob die. It’s “love”. Love could kill all aliens. Then, Bob said, “He..heee… Ann, no one will save you. Your honey son has died…. Hahahhaa!” “Mum, I will save you!” John was taking a special gun. “Oh, no! It is love. I will die!” Bob cried. “Boom”, John shot Bob. Finally, Bob died. John saved all people. He and Ann went home happily. “Oh, no! It is love. I will die.” Bob was crying, “Don’t shoot me. I was very sad because no one plays with me. I was very solitary, so I want to have a mother. Although I am a killer, I am very nice. I kill someone who is bad.” John and Ann felt Bob was poor, so he brought him home and played with Bob happily. Final work  empathetic characters