February 12, 2013 Essay #1 Review Essay #2 Peer Critique Assignment

1. ENGLISH 091 February 12, 2013 • Essay #1 Review • Essay #2 Peer Critique • Assignment

2. Revision Review • Writing should be parallel: • Not Parallel: The girl ran and was jumping all around. • Parallel: The girl was running and jumping all around. • SHOW instead of TELL. • Avoid ambiguous words such as STUFF, VERY and THINGS. • There are no such words as: theirself, hisself, alright. Write themselves, himself, all right. • Do not capitalize subjects like biology, math, science, history.

3. Revision Review • A-lot is two words – very, thing, you, I • Avoid beginning sentences with conjunctions (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) • Avoid contractions, but if it fits the style, you may use them. • There are no such words as: theirself, hisself, alright. Write themselves, himself, all right. • The party would (of, have) made me happy. • Use the word “finish” instead of “done” • Use “who” when referring to people.

4. Revision Review Avoid overusing these adjectives: • Many • Pretty • Nice/Kind • Pleasant • Tall/short/fat/skinny • Big/little • Shimmering • Absolutely • Same exact • Truly unique • Quite • Funny • Many • Incredible • A lot • Bad/good • Roaring • Interesting • Amazing • Any

5. Revision Review Avoid overusing these adverbs: • Suddenly • Probably • Could have • Hopefully • Just • Perfect • Viciously • Usually • Very • So • Kind of • Really • Totally • Actually • Seems

6. Revision Review College writing is different from creative or journalistic writing! • Do not write the way you speak (should of vs should have) • Do not use slang, text-speak, or short-hand • Do not expect your reader to know what you mean. • Do not write in fragments. • Use complete sentences. • Do not omit articles and pronouns. • Always use Standard Written English (SWE)

7. Revision Review Bad Habits to Avoid in Academic Writing • Second person “you” • Inconsistent person • Inconsistent tense • Abbreviations • Do not use: ya, thru, wanna, gonna • Do not use: etc., & • Avoid ending verbs with “en” or “in” instead of “ing”: waitin, watchen

8. Pronoun/Antecedent Agreement and Reference Revision Review • Pronouns take the place of nouns (he, she, it, they, I, you) • The antecedent is the word to which the pronoun refers. For example: Mary went to the store and she bought candy. (Mary is the antecedent for the pronoun she.) • Who or That. Who refers to a person, that to a thing/object. “Angela is the girl WHO likes to shop.”

9. Revision Review Mechanical Rules • Numbers – Never begin a sentence with a number.(Spell it out.) • MLA and APA style guides state that you spell out numbers 0-9.

10. Revision Review Commonly Misspelled Words • your you’re • to too two • there their they’re • its it’s • quite quiet • than then • whose who’s

11. Unnecessary Repetition Revision Review • A round circle • Refer back • An eyewitness present at the scene • The whole entire world • Repeat that again

12. Peer Critique The Four-Step Peer Critique PART II Review the comments from your peer reviewer. Meet with your peer reviewer for 5 minutes to ask any clarifying questions. TAKE 2: Take 10 minutes and review your comments and add/revise based on what you learned today. Return the paper back to its owner.

13. Assignment Assignment#1: Based on the feedback from your peer reviewer, revise ESSAY #1. Include a paragraph that explains the changes you made and why. Your essay MUST be in final draft form. Attach your previous draft and peer critique when you turn it in. DUE: February 19, 2013 (in class) Assignment #2: You will exchange ESSAY #2 (TRAIT) with a classmate and complete the Four-Step Peer Critique. Your peer critique MUST be detailed, specific, and constructive in order to receive full credit. DUE: February 19, 2013 (in class) We will NOT have class on February 14th. Take this time to revise your paper and complete your peer critique.