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Writing Reflection. Metamorphosis Unit Test: In-Class Timed Essay. 1. Put a next to your thesis.
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Writing Reflection Metamorphosis Unit Test: In-Class Timed Essay
1. Put a next to your thesis. We (humans) want what we don’t have, & a basic want that every one has is to be successful. So transformation is a thing that most people dream of. Magically waking up as someone or something new & going off on an adventure is a theme that is very popular. But the want to be thrust into danger & the unknown should be a scary thing. So why is it something we dream of.
1. Is your thesis L2? Lots of people, like Gregor and Io, don’t realize how people and things see the world in a different way until they see it for themselves.
1. Is your thesis L2? Humans have always been fascinated with the notion of change because it lets them change into something better or something they have always wanted to be, and it can symbolize what the world is like but in a twisted way.
2. Is your thesis the last sentence in your intro? Even though everyone is fascinated with the idea of change, it isn’t always accepted in everyday life. Examples are found in Kafka’s Metamorphosis and Ovid’s “Metamorphoses.” Gregor, in the Metamorphosis, turns into a massive vermin and is rejected by his family. Daphne, from “Apollo and Daphne,” turns into a tree to avoid Apollo, who has been change to love her.
3. Do you address both parts of the prompt? In Kafka’s Metamorphosis, Gregor had changed into a bug. In history he represented the industrial revolution. His family represented the people who did not want the change. This shows that change needed to happen but a lot of people were scared of it like when Gregor’s family was scared of him being a bug. When Gregor died his family was very happy about it. In history this was a representation of when the Industrial Revolution ended. Like his family a lot of people were ready for it to be over.
3. Do you address both parts of the prompt? In Kafka’s Metamorphosis, Gregor had changed into a bug. In history he represented the industrial revolution. His family represented the people who did not want the change. This shows that change needed to happen but a lot of people were scared of it like when Gregor’s family was scared of him being a bug. When Gregor died his family was very happy about it. In history this was a representation of when the Industrial Revolution ended. Like his family a lot of people were ready for it to be over.
4. Does L2 (blue) outweigh L1 (green)? Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” and Ovid’s “Metamorphoses” show the what if scenario in their book/books. In Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” he tells the story of a young man named Gregor who undergoes a mysterious transformation waking up one morning. Gregor tries multiple times to try and give the family signs that he has transformed into a bug but each time he does he scares everyone, and runs back into his room or gets beaten back into the room. Even when members of his family know it’s him they still alienate him showing that transformations can be a tragedy. The family no longer treats him like a son anymore they treat him like a vermin or a burden they have to live with.
4. Does L2 (blue) outweigh L1 (green)? Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” and Ovid’s “Metamorphoses” show the what if scenario in their book/books. In Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” he tells the story of a young man named Gregor who undergoes a mysterious transformation waking up one morning. Gregor tries multiple times to try and give the family signs that he has transformed into a bug but each time he does he scares everyone, and runs back into his room or gets beaten back into the room. Even when members of his family know it’s him they still alienate him showing that transformations can be a tragedy. The family no longer treats him like a son anymore they treat him like a vermin or a burden they have to live with.
5. Do you avoid L3 in your body ¶s? Another idea why people are so fascinated is because some people are just plain out scared of change. Many people are afraid of what they might become physically and mentally. When you’re a kid you think your life will go perfectly as planned but not much later, stand in front of a mirror asking yourself, “What have I become?” Another reason is because they don’t want to be something they don’t want to be. For example, in Kafka’s Metamorphosis, Gregor transformed into a bug. That was not something planned nor something he wanted. Last, people doubt the thing they will become. They’ve hoped for so much only to get something they didn’t deserve. Like when [Daphne] turned into a tree because Apollo was chasing her.
5. Do you avoid L3 in your body ¶s? Another idea why people are so fascinated is because some people are just plain out scared of change. Many people are afraid of what they might become physically and mentally. When you’re a kid you think your life will go perfectly as planned but not much later, stand in front of a mirror asking yourself, “What have I become?” Another reason is because they don’t want to be something they don’t want to be.For example, in Kafka’s Metamorphosis, Gregor transformed into a bug. That was not something planned nor something he wanted. Last, people doubt the thing they will become. They’ve hoped for so much only to get something they didn’t deserve. Like when [Daphne] turned into a tree because Apollo was chasing her.
6. Do you prove your 1st topic sentence? Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” and Ovid’s “Metamorphoses” show the what if scenario in their book/books. In Kafka’s “The Metamorphosis” he tells the story of a young man named Gregor who undergoes a mysterious transformation waking up one morning. Gregor tries multiple times to try and give the family signs that he has transformed into a bug but each time he does he scares everyone, and runs back into his room or gets beaten back into the room. Even when members of his family know it’s him they still alienate him showing that transformations can be a tragedy. The family no longer treats him like a son anymore they treat him like a vermin or a burden they have to live with.”
8. Do you prove your thesis? (In other words, do you address every partof your thesis in your essay?)
9. Do you avoid “walking the fence”? Based off of the examples listed in this essay, it is clear that the theme of change and transformation briefly seen in both Ovid’s Metamorphoses and Kafka’s The Metamorphosis is an intriguing topic that equally possesses both many pros and many cons.
10. Is your 1st topic sentence L2? In Kafka’s Metamorphosis, Gregor had changed into a bug. In history he represented the industrial revolution. His family represented the people who did not want the change. This shows that change needed to happen but a lot of people were scared of it like when Gregor’s family was scared of him being a bug. When Gregor died his family was very happy about it. In history this was a representation of when the Industrial Revolution ended. Like his family a lot of people were ready for it to be over.
12. Does everything in your 1st ¶ relate to your 1st topic sentence? In Ovid’s metamorphases there is a tale of a man called Pygmalia. Pygmalia is a bachelor and is in love with a statue that he made. One day he is kissing the statue and he feels warmth. Suddenly the statue is alive She is called Galatea. In another story by Ovid Appollo is chasing after Daphne. Daphne is turned into a tree. She is saved from Apollo because he cannot move a tree. In the book Metamorphosis by Franz Kafka the main character GregorSamsa wakes up suddenly and is terrified to find out that he is indeed a bug. There is no explanation as to why he is a bug. All of these stories demonstrate how unpredictable change is. No one can foresee change.
12. Does everything in your 1st ¶ relate to your 1st topic sentence?
13. Does everything in your 2nd¶ relate to your 2nd topic sentence? To start off, change deeply affects Pygmalion and Galatea for the better.
13. Does everything in your 2nd¶ relate to your 2nd topic sentence?
14. Circle all the 1st& 2ndpersonpronouns. Through reading “Metamorphoses” by Ovid and Kafka’s “Metamorphosis” one thing was extremely apparent; humans as a species are never content. Enough is never enough. Basically what it said to me was being human is good and all but how cool would it be if I was a… Often though there is nothing wrong with us we always strive to become something we aren’t. Whether it’s being another person or a tree it shows just being human just isn’t good enough.”
14. Circle all the 1st& 2ndpersonpronouns. Through reading “Metamorphoses” by Ovid and Kafka’s “Metamorphosis” one thing was extremely apparent; humans as a species are never content. Enough is never enough. Basically what it said to me was being human is good and all but how cool would it be if I was a… Often though there is nothing wrong with us we always strive to become something we aren’t. Whether it’s being another person or a tree it shows just being human just isn’t good enough.”
15. Circle all your linking verbs. Do you avoid them whenever possible? In The Metamorphosis the setting was during the timed period of the Industrial movement. In that time period everyone had to be aware of change because it was happening everywhere. They had acquired trains and new machines requiring human maintenance as little. GregorSamsa was a traveling salesman of his time before he was transformed into a bug. The author could be showing an interest of change towards the movement that had been happening.
15. Circle all your linking verbs. Do you avoid them whenever possible? In The Metamorphosis the setting was during the timed period of the Industrial movement. In that time period everyone had to be aware of change because it was happening everywhere. They had acquired trains and new machines requiring human maintenance as little. GregorSamsawas a traveling salesman of his time before he was transformed into a bug. The author could be showing an interest of change towards the movement that had been happening.
15. Circle all your linking verbs. Do you avoid them whenever possible? • be being am is are was • were shall be will be has been • have been had been shall have been • will have been should be would be can be could be • should have been would have been could have been • appear become feel grow look • remain seem smell sound stay taste
16. Underline all your “oatmeal” adjectives. Do you avoid them? Whether good or bad, new adaptations came along with change. In Kafka’s The Metamorphosis, GregorSamsa turns into a vermin. Clearly, this is a big shock, but many adaptations that come along with change are unavoidable or unexpected.
16. Underline all your “oatmeal” adjectives. Do you avoid them? Whether good or bad, new adaptations came along with change. In Kafka’s The Metamorphosis, GregorSamsa turns into a vermin. Clearly, this is a big shock, but many adaptations that come along with change are unavoidable or unexpected.
17. Is there variety in your sent. lengths? Count the number of words you have in the first 14 sent. & record this # for each sent. in the margin. Optional challenge: Count the number of words in each sentence in your entire essay.
18. Do you avoid beginning 2 successive sent. w/ the same word? People deal with change in many different ways, one of them is separating yourself from society, which isn’t the best way but it works for some people. People want change for many different reasons, but one of the biggest reasons is to make their lives more interesting. People want an interesting life so they have something to do or something to talk about.
18. Do you avoid beginning 2 successive sent. w/ the same word? Peopledeal with change in many different ways, one of them is separating yourself from society, which isn’t the best way but it works for some people. People want change for many different reasons, but one of the biggest reasons is to make their lives more interesting. People want an interesting life so they have something to do or something to talk about.
19. Is your analysis in present tense? In Ovid’s “Narcissus and Echo,” it showed how Narcissus only wanted the best. He rejected the nymph Echo and only was interested in his physical beauty. Narcissus sought bigger and better things.
19. Is your analysis in present tense? In Ovid’s “Narcissus and Echo,” it showed how Narcissus only wanted the best. He rejected the nymph Echo and only was interested in his physical beauty. Narcissus sought bigger and better things.
20. Do you follow MLA format? • Did you underline the book’s title (not the author’s name!)? • Did you put the short stories in quotation marks?
Is your shrunken essay smooth and cohesive? • See Word document
Is your shrunken essay smooth and cohesive? The captivation that humans have had with change, can be traced back to the irrefutable fact that when change does occur, consequences, whether good or bad, are put into place. On one hand, change can be a glorious occurrence that brings about better times in the future. On the other hand, change can be an unfortunate event that few await in anticipation. Change can not only affect a person’s counter moves, it can alter humans’ perception of the world in which they live in. Change, good or bad, has always been, and will always be, a terrifying, yet remarkable event.
2nd Semester Writing Goals • Reread your goals from first semester. • Check off any goals you have achieved. • For every goal you check off, create a new goal, so you have 3 goals total (2 of which have to be directly connected to the 6+1 traits).
Ticket Out • Turn in both your goals as well as your 6+1 traits graph. • (You will turn your timed essay back in on Monday since you may need it for homework.)
