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How to make good notes. An analysis of errors in selected student work PS: Only promising examples included. Useful examples of notes for Manufacturing and services, Reader, p 18!. Manufacturing and services in the past, population worked mostly in agriculture
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How to make good notes An analysis of errors in selected student work PS: Only promising examples included
Useful examples of notes for Manufacturing and services, Reader, p 18! Manufacturing and services in the past, population worked mostly in agriculture today, only 2-3% work in agriculture MANUFACTURING → DESIGN (Paris, London, NY → important part of economy) → these changes are inevitable TEACHER’S COMMENT:- layout ok - an important element missing, which is it? - message incomplete, impossible to grasp
Useful examples of notes for Manufacturing and services, Reader, p 18! Manufacturing and services in the past, population worked mostly in agriculture today, only 2-3% work in agriculture MANUFACTURING → DESIGN (Paris, London, NY → important part of economy) → these changes are inevitable TEACHER’S COMMENT: - layout ok - an important element missing, which is it? - effect of the changes on employment → message incomplete, impossible to grasp
MANUFACTURING AND SERVICES (p 18) INTRODUCTION 1 AGRICULTURE 200 years ago → today → the wast majority of 2 -3 % of the population population 2 service industries → “the post-industrial countries” manufacturing → “the developing countries” Pg.1– loss of manufacturing industry in the advanced countries e.g. US Pg.2- industry of entertainment Pg.3- more evidence e.g. Paris, London, New York Pg. 4– conclusion: inevitable progressive change
MANUFACTURING AND SERVICES (p 18) INTRODUCTION 1 AGRICULTURE Nice structure! 200 years ago → today → the wast majority of 2 -3 % of the population population Key word is missing! 2 service industries → “the post-industrial countries” manufacturing → “the developing countries” Pg.1– loss of manufacturing industry in the advanced countries e.g. US → unemployment – mention it!!! Pg.2- industry of entertainment, design... → new jobs in services Pg.3- more evidence - evidence for what? e.g. Paris, London, New York Pg. 4–conclusion: inevitable progressive change Why? So what?
John Kenneth Galbraith EMPLOYMENT (U.S.) Once – heavy industry Nowadays: arts, music entertainment amusement PEOPLE country 1 supplied with physical objects of consumption 2 concerning with design → CITY 3 persuading people to buy * arts * entertainment * music ECONOMY Manufacturing → design, entertainment
John Kenneth Galbraith – title? EMPLOYMENT (U.S.) – only U.S.? Once – heavy industry Nowadays: arts, music entertainment amusement PEOPLE country 1 supplied with physical objects of consumption 2 concerned with design → CITY 3 need to persuade people to buy * arts * entertainment * music ECONOMY? EMPLOYMENT!!!Conclusion? Manufacturing → design, entertainment grammar issues
Student’s name Pg. 1 The decline in primary sector Two hundred years ago vs. Today Vast majority worked in agriculture - only 2-3% of ... - growth of service industries Pg. 2 Reason for the loss of manufacturing industry Larger social developments E.g. USA Pg. 3 New ideas for employment Art industry, music, entertainment, amusement, design Pg. 4 Examples of new ideas Paris, London, New York live on design and entertainment Pg. 5 Conclusion - It is inevitable to stop the changes in consumption
Student’s name – title? Pg. 1 The decline in primary sector how many pgs.? Two hundred years ago vs. Today Vast majority worked in agriculture - only 2-3% of ... - growth of service industries Pg. 2 Reason for the loss of manufacturing industry Larger social developments – explain!!! E.g. USA Pg. 3 New ideas for employment – why not join with Pg. 4? Art industry, music, entertainment, amusement, design Pg. 4 Examples of new ideas Paris, London, New York live on design and entertainment Pg. 5 Conclusion - grammar/vocabulary problem + incomplete - It is inevitable to stop the changes in consumption
GLOBAL EVOLUTION 1800 2010 agriculture vs. advanced industrialized countries post industrial countries majority in primary sector majority in higher sector II.LOSS OF INDUSTRY PAST – US depends on heavy industry • DESIGNED GOODS NOWADAYS–goods connected with arts, entertainment, music • BIG CITIES PAST NOWADAYS Manufacturing vs. Entertainment, design • OPINION: Changes are inevitable. Conclusion: When the country is developing, most people climb to higer sectors.
I. GLOBAL EVOLUTION 1800 2010 agriculture vs. advanced industrialized countries post industrial countries majority in primary sector majority in higher sector II. LOSS OF INDUSTRY PAST – US depends on heavy industry III. DESIGNED GOODS NOWADAYS–goods connected with arts, entertainment, music IV. BIG CITIES PAST NOWADAYS Manufacturing vs. Entertainment, design V. OPINION: Changes are inevitable. Conclusion: When the country is developing, most people climb to higer sectors. You should address the issue of employment more directly!
Making notes NOT MANUFACTURING ONLY Social developments → US no longer depends on heavy industry for employment II. ENTERTAINMENT – LATER STAGE OF EMPLOYMENT Consumption Arts, entertainment, music, design III MORE EVIDENCE Paris, London, NY – live on design and entertainment IV CONCLUSION Increase in demand for entertainment is inevitable Future of employment in western countries is entertainment!
Making notes NOT MANUFACTURING ONLY Social developments → US no longer depends on heavy industry for employment II. ENTERTAINMENT – LATER STAGE OF EMPLOYMENT Consumption Arts, entertainment, music, design Great thinking! III MORE EVIDENCE Paris, London, NY – live on design and entertainment IV CONCLUSION A bit ironic! Increase in demand for entertainment is inevitable Future of employment in western countries is entertainment!
Homework • loss of manufacturing ≠ unemployment • E.g. UK • design & entertainment → new jobs important parts of economics = fact
Homework • loss of manufacturing ≠ unemployment • E.g. UK • design & entertainment → new jobs important parts of economics = fact Very, very brief, but also very clear thinking! Might want to include more info for later reference! E.g. you are not saying why design became so important.