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Ambiguity and Inflated Language. Anna Prieto , Janaia Bell, Herman Moore, Brendan Bachelor. Ambiguity is the result of stacked nouns, faulty word choice, and other uses of poor communication. Ambiguity can create two possible meanings. Ambiguity. Faulty Word Choice
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Ambiguity and Inflated Language Anna Prieto, Janaia Bell, Herman Moore, Brendan Bachelor
Ambiguity is the result of stacked nouns, faulty word choice, and other uses of poor communication. • Ambiguity can create two possible meanings Ambiguity
Faulty Word Choice • Wrong: We were held up at the bank. • Right: We were delayed at the bank. Stacked Nouns • Wrong: The consultant suggested the manager allow time for a fitness center member evaluation. • Right: The consultant suggested that the manager allow time to evaluate the members of the fitness center. • Alternative: The consultant suggested that the manager allow time for the members to evaluate the fitness center. Examples of Ambiguity
Many writers believe that they will impress readers by using “fancy”, less-familiar words. In technical communication, however, you are more likely to impress readers not with fancy words, but with simple, clear, everyday words. Inflated Language
Concise Alternatives • If • Soon • Today, now • Can • Can • Must, should Wordy Phrases • In the event that • In the near future • In this day and age • Is able to • Is in a position to • It is crucial that Examples of Inflated Language
Concise Alternatives • Essential • Free • Anticipate • Circle • Decrease • Result Redundant Modifiers • Absolutely essential • Absolutely free • Anticipate in advance • Circle around • Decrease down • End result Examples of Inflated Language (contd)
Make actors the subjects of your sentences • Put action into verbs Using Actors &Action Verbs
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