Detail I. Consider:

2. Detail I. Consider: Whenever he was so fortunate as to have near him a hare that had been kept too long, or a meat pie made with rancid butter, he gorged himself with such violence that his veins swelled, and the moisture broke out on his forehead. —Thomas Babington Macaulay, "Samuel Johnson"

3. Discuss: • 1. What effect does the detail (the spoiled hare, the rancid butter, the swollen veins, the sweaty forehead) have on the reader?

4. 2. Would the meaning of the sentence be changed by ending it after himself?

5. Apply: Write a sentence describing someone with disgusting eating habits. It must be one, correct sentence, and it must contain at least three vivid details.

6. Now, write an extended paragraph that explores how the details in the original sentence help create the true sense of the character being discussed and/or the tone of the scene itself. This is a close textual analysis which should include evidence from the sentence.

7. The details in the passage create a negative description of the scene and of the man. The hare had been "kept too long," like an unwanted guest, and "rancid" is a word that implies something that has gone rotten, bad--is smelly and rank. Gorge is a verb implying violent action with an accompanying sound of cacophony produced by the hard "g" which affects the throat when said out loud. "Violence," swelling veins, and sweating all provoke an image of someone under stress. All together, these effective images create a sense of a grotesque person, whether he is starved or simply a glutton (because gluttony is a cardinal sin, the grotesqueness is increased). No matter whether he feels "fortunate" to have food that normal people would avoid or whether he is gorging on it because it gives him some weird pleasure doesn't matter. There is something wrong with the scene and with the character, something disgusting and unsettling. Without the words after "himself," the passage becomes a description of someone who is eating his fill because he is hungry. The additional details create a sense of self-torture or self-loathing.

8. Detail II Consider: An old man, Don Tomasito, the baker, played the tuba. When he blew into the huge mouthpiece, his face would turn purple and his thousand wrinkles would disappear as his skin filled out. —Alberto AlvaroRios, "The Iguana Killer"

9. Discuss: • 1. The first sentence is a general statement. How does the second sentence enrich and intensify the first?

10. 2. Contrast the second sentence with the following: • When he blew the tuba, his face turned purple and his cheeks puffed out. • Which sentence more effectively expresses an attitude toward Tomasito? What is that attitude and how is it communicated?

11. Apply: Describe someone jumping over a puddle. Your first sentence should be general, stating the action simply. Your second sentence should clarify and intensify the action through detail.

12. Detail III Consider: CHARLEY (to WILLY): Why must everybody like you? Who liked J. P. Morgan? Was he impressive? In a Turkish bath he'd look like a butcher. But with his pockets on he was very well liked. Now listen, Willy, I know you don't like me, and nobody can say I'm in love with you, but I'll give you a job because—just for the hell of it, put it that way. Now what do you say? —Arthur Miller, Death of a Salesman

13. Discuss: • 1. Who was J. P. Morgan? What is a Turkish bath? What picture comes to mind when someone is said to look like a butcher? How do these details contribute to the point Charley is trying to make?

14. 2. How would the passage be different if Charley said J. P. Morgan would look like a baker in a Turkish bath?

15. Apply: Think of someone famous and powerful. Use detail to create an unflattering but accurate description of the physical appearance of this famous person. Model your description on Miller's description of J. P. Morgan.