Composition mistakes - Mobile phones Nov. 4, 2010

1. Composition mistakes - Mobile phones Nov. 4, 2010

2. They spend a lot of money talking with the mobile phones They spend a lot of money talking on/over the mobile phones We are used to see little kids playing with their phones We are used to seeing little kids playing with their phones Mobile phones might suppose a danger for thepeople’s health Mobile phones might involve a danger for the people’s health We mustn’t have fear of mobile phones We mustn’t be frightened of / afraid of mobile phones Use mobile phones while driving it’s very dangerous Using mobile phones while driving is very dangerous There are some risks of giving a mobile phone to a kid There are some risks in giving a mobile phone to a kid

3. People have become addicted of this type of phone • People have got addicted to/hooked on this type of phone • The first thing you do is to return home • The first thing you do is return home • We don’t know living without a mobile • We don’t know how to live without a mobile • We are worried when we called somebody and they don’t… • We are worried when we call somebody and they don’t … • In my last hollydays I didn’t use my mobile because… • I didn’t use my mobile phone in my last/latest holidays… • I hadn’t to do this when I was fifteen • I didn’t have to do this when I was fifteen • I feel I’m addicted to my mobile. It’s terrific, isn’t it? • I feel I’m addicted to my mobile. It’s terrible, isn’t it?

4. Nowadays is very common to speak about mobile phones… • Nowadays it’s very common to speak about mobile phones… • It fits in your pocket • It fits into your pocket • If you forget it at home, probably you will return for it • If you forget it at home, you will probably return for it. • Not always it is possible to use it. • Not always is it possible to use it. • Not only they are useful, they are essential • Not only are they useful, but they are essential • Summing up, it is very useful… • To sum up, it is very useful • We can solve this disadvantage being more polite • We can solve this disadvantage by being more polite

5. It is probably that the 90% of the people have a phone • 90% of the people are likely to have a phone • The problem is that we use incorrectly the technology • The problem is that we use technology incorrectly • The case of a car breakdown in a remote road • The case of a breakdown on a remote road • With regards to disadvantages… • With regard to / As regards disadvantages… • They can create a dependency of being connected… • They can create a dependence on being connected • Until the society is get used to live with them • Until the society gets used to living with them Heartless youngs mistreating homeless people • Heartless youngters mistreating homeless people

6. In the exercise doesn’t appear the advantages when we use… • The advantages when we use…. don’t appear in the exercise • Parents could know where is the child at any time • Parents could know where the child is at any time • So they always are available • So they are always available • …but as well as it has disadvantages, there are advantages too • …but while it has disadvantages, there are advantages too • Lots of possibilities: Listen to music, take photos… • Lots of possibilities: Listening to music, taking photos… • We can’t forget other advantages, as educationals, culturals,etc. • ….. other advantages, such as educational, cultural, etc. • The number of people using the mobile phones is increasing • The number of people using mobile phones is increasing

7. One of the main perks of using mobile phones are… • One of the main perks of using mobile phones is… • …a breakdown, or keep in touch with friends and family… • …a breakdown, or keeping in touch with friends and family… • In occasions, there may be some kind of danger… • On accasion, there may be some kind of danger… • All things considered, have a mobile phone can be good but… • All things considered, having a mobile phone can be good…