Fragments: Forbidden and Freed

1. Fragments: Forbidden and Freed Grammar and Usage 9-12

2. Warm Up Please write your name, big and clear, on the unlined side of the index card at your seat. On the lined side, please write three nouns (remember to use concrete, proper, specific), three vivid verbs, and three awesome adjectives that capture who you are, what you like, what makes you very unique. You can write more. Afterwards, on your Warm Up Sheet, write 2-3 complete sentences explaining the choices you made on your lists.

3. Lesson: Fragments Please listen and read along as I read a fragment of Walt Whitman’s “Song of Myself” out loud. Impressions? Observations? Re-read and re-listen paying attention to the nouns, verbs, and adjectives that describe him. So obviously this fragment of the poem is made up of parts of Walt Whitman. What error did he purposefully make? Why would he do this? What is a negative effect? What is a positive effect?

4. “Song Of Myself” by Walt Whitman The smoke of my own breath,Echoes, ripples, buzz'd whispers, love-root, silk-thread, crotch and vine,My respiration and inspiration, the beating of my heart, the passing of blood and      air through my lungs,The sniff of green leaves and dry leaves, and of the shore and dark-color'd      sea-rocks, and of hay in the barn,The sound of the belch'd words of my voice loos'd to the eddies of the wind,A few light kisses, a few embraces, a reaching around of arms,The play of the shine and shade on the trees as the supple boughs wag,The delight alone or in the rush of the streets, or along the fields and hill-sides,The feeling of health, the full-moon trill, the song of me rising from bed and      meeting the sun.

5. Writer’s Notebook Table of Content Section is Editing Fragments is the term Define—What is it? What is it missing? Breaking the Rules: When is it okay? How often?

6. Practice One Writer’s Notebook Writing Pages Section Title Fragments of Me Read the following fragments exercise after you read the directions. Complete as many as you can in the alloted time.

7. Edit Add a subject (noun phrase), verb, predicate (verb phrase), or a complete thought to help this writer. After each, in parenthesis, indicate what you added. As always, use your voice ! Worn out from study Because the room was so dark In order to save money A popular writer After I exercised in the weight room To have faith in yourself Editing the final draft of a paper

8. Practice Two What is your song? Your purpose for writing is to show who are. Your audience is your peers, your teacher, and your Keeper. Use the nouns, verbs, adjectives and anything else you can to create phrases and write your Fragments of Me text. Feel free to change the title. Remember, concrete, proper, and specific nouns, vivid verbs, and awesome adjectives are excellent writing tools. Use poetry, prose, or whatever floats your boat. Play with space and if you will perform, write in physical directions, musical ideas, visual aids. Write the whole time, please. Feel free to play with lists, thinking maps, drawings, movements, dialogue, journal writing, etc. at first to get you going or after to see what else you can create. If you are done early, which I hope you’re not, look at the What Should I Do Now? Chart and simply respect other’s space and time.

9. Fragments of Me Nouns: an English teacher, Minneapolis, Minnesotan, Virgo Verbs: talker, listener, lover** Adjectives: social**, silly, sweet

10. Fragments of Us Splotches of color, curtains waiting to let the sun shine in, Love long, lazy days…barreling down a train track, loyal to others as my shell is to me, walking with two feet and peddling with two wheels,

11. Wrap Up What is a fragment and what is it missing? What effect do fragments have in our writing. What is one positive effect? What is one negative? Homework: Get feedback from one Keeper. Revise this or another portfolio piece. Thanks for another good day! See ya!