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Writing a CLEAR, SPECIFIC, & INTERESTING paragraph
HOW? • Cleartopic • Clear, specific, interestingcontrolling idea • Clear, specific, interesting, relevant, and logically written supporting sentences • Interestingsentence structure & vocabulary
Examplesof Clear, Specific, & Interesting Topic Sentences !
e.g. 1 Topic Kant’s Education Viewpoint Kant’s education viewpoint centered on three categories which are nurture, enculturation, and moralization. First of all, nurtureis one of the Kant’s education viewpoint. Second, Kant’s education viewpoint was also on enculturation. Finally, moralizationis one of the important Kant’s education viewpoint. To sum up. . Kant’s education viewpoint centered on three categories which are nurture, enculturation, and moralization. Controlling idea
e.g. 2 Who is Cheol Soo Ahn? Cheol Soo Ahn is the founder of Ahnlab, the biggest security software company in South Korea, and made a huge contribution to cyber security of South Korea. First, . In addition, . Third, . In conclusion, . Topic Cheol Soo Ahnis the founder of Ahnlab, (the biggest security software company in South Korea), and made a huge contribution to cyber security of South Korea. Controlling idea Cheol Soo Ahn’scontribution to cyber security in South Korea
e.g. 3 Louis Pasteur; The Father of Microbiology Louis Pasteur is principally known as the father of Microbiology for his contribution to substantiating the biogenesis, contriving the pasteurization, and familiarizing the prevention of epidemics. First, Louis Pasteur has contributed to substantiating the biogenesis. . In addition, he has contrived the pasteurization which . . Finally, familiarizing the prevention of epidemics is one of his greatest contributions. In conclusion, . Topic Louis Pasteur is principally known as the father of Microbiology for his contribution to substantiating the Biogenesis, contriving the pasteurization, and familiarizing the prevention of epidemics. Controlling idea
e.g. 4 Bjarne Stroustrup Without C++ programming language one cannot discuss about information and communication engineering. As a creator of C++ programming language, Bjarne Stroustrup has made huge contribution to the IT field since C++ provided capabilities for object-oriented programming. First, . In addition, . Third, . In conclusion, . <Without C++ programming language one cannot discuss about information and communication engineering.> As a creator of C++ programming language, Bjarne Stroustruphas made huge contribution to the IT field since C++ provided capabilities for object-oriented programming. Introducing the topic sentence Bjarne Stroustrup’s contribution to the IT field by providing C++ programming language. Controlling idea Topic
e.g. 5 Bill Marriott; The Pioneer of Internal Marketing First, Bill Marriott demonstrated how happy employees make guests happy by greatly emphasizing the value of employees in Marriott Hotel Group. Second, Bill Marriott has set the exceptional examples of how leaders influence on the employee satisfaction and corporate culture which leads to guest satisfaction. In conclusion, . Bill Marriott has highly influenced on the hotel industry by showing the intimate relationship between employee satisfaction and guest satisfaction. Bill Marriott has showed the intimate relationship between employee satisfaction and guest satisfaction by underlining the value of employees in Marriott Hotel Group and demonstrating the leadership that satisfy the employees.
Exampleof good Supporting Sentences ! • Supporting Sentences should be; • Clear / Plentiful / Specific / Interesting • Related to the main idea • Prove the controlling idea • Not introducing new topic
Topic Sentence: Mark Zuckerberg has three Success principles – the power of the organization, partnership, and challenging spirit. Supporting Sentences: First of all, he sat a high value on powers of the organization. He explained in the ‘Hacker Way’. When people heard the word ‘Hacker’, the majority of people have a negative feeling, but that means positive power for him. For instance, Facebook’s employees have been implementing ‘Hackathon’ once in a few month. Hackathon in the abbreviation for ‘Hacker’ and ‘Marathon’. They have a continual efforts to improve, and they quickly provide service that consumers demand through the endless meetings. In the process, Facebook’s timeline was born. • Clear / Plentiful / Specific / Interesting • Related to the main idea • Prove the controlling idea • Not introducing new topic The Hackathon in Facebook Continual efforts to improve / provide service quickly Powers of the Organization Facebook’s timeline has been created Hacker + Marathon
Examplesof interesting Sentence Structures & Vocabulary !
Compound/ Complex Sentence In Samgukyusa, there is a story about Gojoseon, the first kingdom of Korea, andthis story contains legend of Dangeoon who was the founder of Gojoseon. s.v,and s.v In Samgukyusa, there is a story about Gojoseon, the first kingdom of Korea, and this story contains legend of Dangeoonwho was the founder of Gojoseon. i.c. d.c.
Complex/ Compound/ Complex Sentence Third, Wilson had chosen the location of the motel considerately because he thought non persistent motel in roadside was problem, so he had decided to build it alongside the highway, especially at the corner of city which makes all people coming into a city pass by Holiday inn. Complex_ i.c. i.d. Third, Wilson had chosen the location of the motel considerately because he thought non persistent motel in roadside was problem, so he had decided to build it alongside the highway, especially at the corner of city which makes all people coming into a city pass by Holiday inn. Compound_ s.v,so s.v Third, Wilson had chosen the location of the motel considerately because he thought non persistent motel in roadside was problem, so he had decided to build it alongside the highway, especially at the corner of city which makes all people coming into a city pass by Holiday inn. Complex_ i.c. i.d.
Use interesting and diverse Vocabulary Using same vocabulary over & over & over & over = Extremely boring
Follow Directions If not, 6 points will be deducted
About Gary Age: Maybe 45~46 From: U.S.A Came to S. Korea in 1996 Has girlfriend name 사랑 (28yrs old)
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