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Concision Of language. What does it mean to be concise?. Being concise means to give a lot of detailed information in detailed way that is not very wordy (using fewer words). When writing concise sentences, you should be brief and to the point.
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What does it mean to be concise? • Being concise means to give a lot of detailed information in detailed way that is not very wordy (using fewer words). • When writing concise sentences, you should be brief and to the point. • Concise language should also be clear and easily understood. • Writing in a concise way does NOT mean leaving out details. It is writing that is clear and to the point.
Bad example… There is a bus driver who has red hair who likes to sing all the way to school. How can this be said in a way that is more concise?
Better way… The red-headed bus driver sings all the way to school.
What does it mean to be precise? • Being precise means being accurate. • Precise language is not lacking detail or important information to make something make sense. • EXAMPLE: It crossed the street.
Bad example… • It walked slowly though the woods.
Better way… • The anxious hunter walked through the woods while hunting for a deer.
Practice-- concise • The silly girl who sings all day long that also talks a lot is at school today. • The loud dog barked at the children. It also is a very big and unfriendly dog.
Practice--precise • It swim in the stream. • He watched a happy movie.
Combine sentences Original: A professor was giving a lecture to a room full of college students on global warming. The students appeared to be very bored and uninterested. Can this sentence be combined to be more concise?
Ways to combine sentences • Comma and a conjunction • Semicolon • Conjunctive adverb • Appositive
Comma + conjunction • A professor was giving a lecture to many college students, and they looked boredand uninterested.
Semicolon • A professor was giving a lecture to many college students;they looked boredand uninterested.
Conjunctive adverbs • Conjunctive adverbs connect sentences together using a semi colon and a comma. Example: • A professor was giving a lecture to many college students; however, they looked bored and uninterested.
example I really do not like snow because that means it is cold outside. I like snow ,though, when it means that there is no school. • I do not like snow because that means it is cold outside; however, I like it when there is a snow day.
List of conjunctive adverbs However Hence Therefore Thus Moreover Meanwhile In addition Nevertheless Otherwise Furthermore Similarly Consequently
appositives • An appositive is a noun or a phrase that act as a noun that is placed in the middle of a sentence and is separated by commas. Example: My friend is coming over after school today. His name is Joe. • My friend, Joe, is coming over after school today.
example My friend that I am visiting tomorrow lives in Michigan. She is in the seventh grade. • My friend, a seventh grader, that I amvisiting tomorrow is from Michigan.
Practice • Make the following sentences more concise. • I walked to the store yesterday to buy eggs, milk, and flour in order to make a cake for my birthday. My birthday is on Wednesday and several people will be coming over to my house for a small party. • I need my mom to bring me an extra change of clothes while I am at school so that I can change for the dance. The dance is going to be after school and semi-formal attire is required. I am currently wearing sweatpants and a hoodie.