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Improving your essay. Eliminating informal language and replacing it with formal, more sophisticated choices. Tip: enter essay into computer word processing program after 2 nd draft (or later) in order to facilitate faster edits, BUT…!. Caution: Must save! Save on hard drive & save on USB
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Improving your essay Eliminating informal language and replacing it with formal, more sophisticated choices.
Tip: enter essay into computer word processing program after 2nd draft (or later) in order to facilitate faster edits, BUT…! Caution: • Must save! Save on hard drive & save on USB • Must save each new copy under “save as” AND a new draft # so as to avoid writing over the previous copy unintentionally (making it therefore possible to go back to a previous draft to confirm info or to include something that had previously been excluded). Without doing so, you could accidentally save a blank screen and lose everything… permanently!
Step 1: No Contractions From • can’t • I’m • it’s • would’ve • don’t • doesn’t • etc To • cannot • I am • it is • would have • do not • does not • etcetera
Step 2: No Abbr’s (abbreviations) From • B\S • S\D • Etc. • Goth • Met • & or E • TV’s • 24\7 To • Batman and Superman • Similarities and differences • You write more or write “and so on.” • Gotham City • Metropolis • (No ampersand) write “and” televisions • All day, every day
Step 3: No Slang To • The best! • All day every day • going to • because • popular • my mistake • I cannot believe you did not know that! • affirmative From • “bomb” • 24\7 • gonna • cuz • dope • doh! \ “my bad” • duh! • finna
Step 4: Check for places to improve your word choice (yes, again) From VERBS: • wore capes • flies in • flew across ADJECTIVES (DESCRIPTIONS): • GREEN • SKINNY • MAD • HAPPY To • cloaked • swoops in • bolted across (the counter, the sky) • EMERALD • SVELTE • FURIOUS • ECSTATIC
Step 5: Increase the level by incorporating compound sentences From x To • x
Step 5b: Increase the level by incorporating complex sentences From x To • x
Step 5c: Increase the level by sentence combining Instead of: • They both are orphans; they both were fostered. • They are both superheroes; they both live in large cities Consider: • Each man understands what it is to be an orphan raised by someone other than parents. • These superheroes each defends the citizens of his own home populous city.