Oki Swamp ROSES

1. Oki Swamp ROSES

2. Great job! • You slowed down and fully analyzed • You were thorough in your analysis & used 90/90 terms beautifully • You took risks which added voice and style to your writing Outstanding work!

3. AP Score Breakdown 9’s= 6 8’s= 14 7’s= 25 -------------- 6’s= 14 5’s= 2 4’s= 0

4. At this point one can imagine the game of Jumanji as the children run frantically around, attempting to dodge the insanity of nature beating down upon them: the “misery of life.” Mothers and fathers are respected figures of great knowledge and wisdom and are held up on a pedestal which is perhaps a reason the author used such a description, to show the greatness of the swamp.

5. It is the perfect swamp; it is the swamp that one thinks of when envisioning a lone adventurer feebly traversing a monster of “muck, mud, slime, and ooze” -- sucking and slurping at his heels. The author uses personification of the swamp “giv[ing] birth” to two rivers, creating a mental image of how disgusting something can be-- the slimy and bloody mess of birth-- but the fact that it can also have a beautiful side-- the creation of new life upon earth.

6. The author breathes life into the swamp as it begins to take the form of a living, breathing, even breeding abomination, slowly drawing the reader in like quicksand. Passage two is the loud flamboyent relative compared to the quiet astute nature of the first passage. Whereas passage one is the prosaic cousin who sits in the corner of the Christmas party reading a book about jurisprudence, passage two is the whimsical drunk uncle dancing on the table bellowing slurs about his life in the military. Although they share bloodlines, the two passages couldn’t be any more different.

7. Passage two takes its reader on a mini-safari of the senses. Slime-covered adjectives Each description is saturated with adjectives… Passage 1= playwright; 2= director One can picture a wild and enthusiastic author rolling up his sleeves, sitting down to write the epic tale of his “Hollywood” swamp.

8. The swamp is being admirably envisioned as the Regal King of Filth, the Prince of Muck. He adds Hollywood to show the reader what Speilberg would show his audience as the home of Grendal: a darkened place of beauty. The swamp may be just as repulsive as the process of birth itself; nevertheless, what comes out of the swamp are two rivers that are filled with nourishment and life.

9. The sentences appear in a clipped, precise fashion, not short, but demonstrative of an attempt at succinctness, holding only to essential facts and practically worshipping a doctrine of brevity. Each number of dangerous species is spelled out to claim the full effect of numerical superiority, and not only that, each species is also “variously equipped with beaks, talons, claws, teeth, stingers, and fangs.” Okefenokee now has its disgusting, deadly arsenal.