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On a sheet of paper, describe a place you have seen.

Quick Write. On a sheet of paper, describe a place you have seen. Examples: a specific house, playground, amusement park, classroom, etc. SPECIFIC DETAILS FOR EFFECT (Another Smiley Face Trick) . Instead of general, vague descriptions,

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On a sheet of paper, describe a place you have seen.

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  1. Quick Write On a sheet of paper, describe a place you have seen. Examples: a specific house, playground, amusement park, classroom, etc.

  2. SPECIFIC DETAILS FOR EFFECT (Another Smiley Face Trick)  Instead of general, vague descriptions, specificsensory details help the reader visualize the person, place, thing, or idea that you are describing.

  3. Author Barry Lane says the more we focus our mental “binoculars,” the more vivid images become. Look at the examples - then try going from fuzzyto detailed in the samples that follow.

  4. Fuzzy The pizza tasted good.

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  6. Detailed “It is nothing I have ever tasted before,” I thought to myself as the spicy goodness seeped into every crevice of my mouth. I didn’t care that the crimson sauce was now covering a good portion of the front of my new t-shirt or that a long string of white cheese was hanging off of the stubble on my chin - I just had to have more!

  7. The woman looked kind of funny.

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  9. Her red flowered hat, which was many sizes too large, covered all of her face except her chin. When she spoke, we could only see a small patch of white bobbing up and down under a large red lid.

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  11. Label Each Sentence Fuzzy or Detailed 1. My room is a mess! 2. With a smile on their lips and a twinkle in their eyes, the newly married couple solidified their love with a single kiss. 3. Wiping the drool from my desk, I woke up and quickly hustled to my next class to catch up on a few more hours of sleep! 4. A student’s life is hard.

  12. NOW YOU TRY The food did not look good.

  13. The dog was mean.

  14. Her car was a mess.

  15. Read The Redwoods Is this story fuzzy or detailed?

  16. READ MOUSE ALERT

  17. What lines are full of DETAIL? Highlight the detailed parts in the story.

  18. Don’t be afraid to use FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE, THE MAGIC THREE, AND REPETITION as well! Your job is to rewrite your description of a place you have seen. Focus the fuzzy sentences and add in Specific Details For Effect (SPECIFIC SENSORY DETAILS). (Don’t be afraid really means – Do it – add the other three rules to your description!)

  19. NOW IT’S YOUR TURN Your job is to rewrite the opening to “The Redwoods” using detailed descriptions. Focus the fuzzy sentences and add in Specific Details For Effect.

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