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Editing for Sentence

Editing for Sentence. Variety. You will need:. A blue marker for intro phrases A green marker for intro clauses A red , orange, or yellow marker for simple and compound sentences that are not introduced by another phrase or clause A pen or pencil to write explanations when necessary.

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Editing for Sentence

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  1. Editing for Sentence Variety

  2. You will need: • A blue marker for intro phrases • A green marker for intro clauses • A red, orange, or yellow marker for simple and compound sentences that are not introduced by another phrase or clause • A pen or pencil to write explanations when necessary

  3. Blue for intro phrases • Read the text of the essay, minus any quotes included, and underline or highlight any intro phrases. • At work, Winston displays. . . • Understanding his role in the world, John. . . • To better understand human nature, Bernard studies. . . • From the moment of their creation, citizens of the world feel. . . • At the reservation, John and his mother. . .

  4. Green for intro clauses • Read the text of the essay, minus any quotes included, and underline or highlight any intro clauses. • When Lenina steps off of the helicopter at John’s lighthouse, she finds. . . • Because Bernard sees the world differently, he does not. . . • Until Winston pursues a relationship with Julia, he lives a life. . .

  5. Other clause beginners • after, before, once, since, until, when, whenever, while • as, because, since • so that, that • If, even if, provided that, unless • although, even though, though, whereas • wherever • whether

  6. Use red, orange, or yellow for: • Marking simple sentences. • Winston waits for O’Brien’s signal. • Similarly, Linda’s ugliness disgusts Lenina. • Orwell demonstrates Winston’s ideal of the free individual. • Marking compound sentences: • Winston reads the book himself, and then he shares the book with Julia. • The D.H.C. explains the creation of children to the reader, and later, Mustapha Mond explains the inner workings of the government.

  7. With the pencil or pen. . . • Put an arrow by any sentence beginning word that your partner has so far that repeats another beginning word.

  8. Now what? • The more green that you have, the more complex and sophisticated your writing is (in general).

  9. What else? • What you marked in the hot color should not take up a lot (more than 1/3 to ¼) of the writing.

  10. And…? • Look at the words that begin each sentence. • Are you alternating kinds of beginnings? • Are you using a variety to words to start the beginnings?

  11. Consider. . . • Making changes when you were repetitious. • Alternating sentence beginnings to vary the sentence structure. (Use more than just one or two sentence patterns.) • Combining simple sentence and their ideas into complex sentences to reflect the sophistication and complexity of your ideas.

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